Life Dims

He was a shadow of a man,
gaunt and undernourished,
no money, no demands,
hunger is all he commands,
his skin barely filling out his bones,
nothing he owns,
missing teeth makes his words more garbled,
eyes shining like marbles,
his family would scarcely recognize him,
as he took a sad moment to reflect,
nothing to detect,
as he palmed his rumpled hair,
as death came near,
homeless, and no one cares,
distraught, and filled with despair,
as he walks broken into the night,
life dims,
as he prays for the light.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 3/19/2009 1:10:00 PM
Much to think about here. Such a sad situation that too many face. Hopefully, he found that "light". Keep up the good writing. Karen
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Date: 3/17/2009 5:46:00 AM
But I love not being able to stand you
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Date: 3/17/2009 5:26:00 AM
I cant stand you (little) man
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Date: 3/16/2009 7:15:00 PM
And indeed without the dark we have no need of light, and without the prayer we do not see the beauty of the night. I feel you in the words, love.
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Date: 3/16/2009 3:24:00 PM
this goes where i fear to tread. john
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Date: 3/16/2009 12:44:00 PM
hello ,thanks for your comments,i'm just an amateur but its nice for giving me your support,it helps me to keep writing.This is a very strong reality,i wish life wasn't like this,its not fair for anyone to be hungry when the world is so rich,NO ONE CARES,yeah its true people who can do something don't care at all,they're well fed,im a middle class citizen and i do care,very nice poem it touched my heart
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Date: 3/16/2009 12:36:00 PM
This is a very deep and moving write, Frank. Your imagery is is vivid in this narrative that makes me want to know his whole story. Excellent piece! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/14/2009 11:28:00 AM
Frank that was an awesome comment. Thanks brother.. did you read Laurie's poem about going topless?..I know you had something clever to say.
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Date: 3/14/2009 9:08:00 AM
I greatly respect your sense of "humanity" Frank, Jim
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Date: 3/13/2009 8:18:00 PM
So touching and sad. You have a way of ripping the heart out of the reader as they follow the story in your words. Beautiful writing. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 3/13/2009 5:50:00 PM
So sad, this could be anywhere in any town. A wonerful heartfelt poem. ~ Carrie
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Date: 3/13/2009 4:45:00 PM
Another wonderful write Frankie.
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Date: 3/13/2009 1:54:00 PM
Dag gone it Frank, I can't be mean and I can't be nice. You write such tragic hopeless pain filled pieces. You really have a heart for people, I mean you haven't eaten a finger or spurted blood in forever. What does it feel like to be invisible? No one seeing or trying to meet your needs, actually you've probably already answered that question, sunshine,,,Great job almost a 6.5
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Date: 3/13/2009 12:59:00 PM
Your character's lot in life is compelling as well as sad, Frank. No wonder "he prays for the light." Love, Carolyn
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