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Let Sun Go

Beams dripped, from the yellow moon And we did drown in a frenzied dance, Not dreaming, that dawn would bloom And wake us from - our mystic trance. Owls hailed us, with their wild whoops, And gloom bloomed, our lusty hopes; With hasty steps, we danced with groups That measured their steps, on tightropes. Played Night herons - raspy, croaking calls, Yet a rooster played, “cock-a-doodle-doo,” And shadows fainted on - darkened walls, Alarming us, the trespassing, morning hue. To love ... a divine lover stopped the sun, Yet, my love ... I’m simply a mortal one; Hence, let him come, for that’s his run, And faster we can run, and dive in fun. *A 1st Place* in the following contest (judged on Oct. 11, 2020) Sept. 6, 2020 COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE (24)any form any theme Poetry Contest Contest Sponsor: Brian Strand *5th Place* in the following contest (judged on Oct. 10, 2020) The night of passion and desire Contest Sponsor: Faraz Ajmal

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Date: 10/18/2020 3:00:00 PM
You dove right into it dear poet, an amazing poem to boot. have a great day
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/18/2020 4:10:00 PM
Thank you so much, Pixie, for this fascinating comment!!
Date: 10/11/2020 9:22:00 PM
Lovely wording! Congratulations!
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/12/2020 8:48:00 PM
Thank you so much, Kim, for this sweet comment!!
Date: 10/11/2020 1:05:00 PM
what a lively one. Great imagery, and congrats for your win , Newton
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/11/2020 1:39:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea, for your sweet comment!!
Date: 10/11/2020 9:14:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Newton. Wonderful rhymed poem!
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/11/2020 1:38:00 PM
Thank you so much, Carol, for your kind visit and the great comment!!
Date: 10/11/2020 3:22:00 AM
... Sense your dedication, Newton. Your neat and pretty poem thrives with smart simplicity. A deserved Winner here. Congratulations!
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/11/2020 1:37:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sigrid, for this immensely great comment and well-wishes!!
Date: 10/10/2020 12:38:00 PM
A lovely poem and a delight to read, "yet my love I am simply a mortal one", a line indicating the cruelty of life, many congratulations on your win in my contest, good luck and have a really nice day
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/10/2020 1:47:00 PM
Thank you so much, Faraz, for your visit, great comment and for considering this piece for a placement in your contest!!
Date: 9/6/2020 10:46:00 AM
- “cock-a-doodle-doo” ... a lovely poem, Newton :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/6/2020 12:05:00 PM
Thank you so much, Anne-Lise, for this immensely lovely comment!!

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