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Leaves Falling

Deleted emails retrieved Text messages you wouldn’t show me Phone calls when you thought I was asleep How could I NOT notice The leaves falling from the trees? 7/9/11

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2013 2:28:00 PM

I'm coming way back here to tell you this: Susan, congrats on the HM you just got on that other poem. It really is one of your best poems and I'm surprised it has not done better in contests. I have a poem like that too.I have two poems that I keep putting in contests and still they don't win. Not even HM and yet many people are telling me they really like those poems. In fact, both have been faved by other poets!! It is very weird!

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/6/2011 9:17:00 PM

The mystery of rhyme paints this picture so well.

Matthew Anish

Date: 8/1/2011 5:10:00 PM

A nice metaphor here! Did you mean a lover or husband who has a "side" intrest? That is what I assume it means. Let me know if I am correct. Yours Matthew Anish

Cory Long

Date: 7/30/2011 10:00:00 PM

this is awesome with so much emotion and power behind your lines.. loved it cory

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/30/2011 7:39:00 PM

one word..powerful..Susan.. such emotion...and many have experience this same scenario luv.. excellent piece ...

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/30/2011 3:57:00 PM

Soup Mail!!!!!!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/30/2011 2:30:00 PM

aww, thank you very much, Susan! That is so sweet of you!! Eeep! I suppose that I was emoting a tad too much in that poem? I don't exactly feel that way, maybe just a small part, on some occasions... It completely slipped my mind that the contest was supposed to be about what kind of stone I think I am?? Oops! The idea of that write had been there way before, when I was suddenly reminded of some instances & compared those times to being a stepping stone...hugs to you for your sweet thoughts :)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 7/30/2011 2:31:00 PM

Believe me, I am more positive that what I projected over there-- thank you again for your wonderful concern, you are a sweetie :)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/30/2011 1:09:00 PM

Those last two lines tied this piece so well, Susan! Ouch! How I hope this isn't based on real life, though-- this sure leaves (pun Not intended!) such an impact!

Jack Horne

Date: 7/29/2011 1:34:00 PM

Very powerful piece, Susan. Hope it's just a poem, not based on experience.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2011 10:35:00 AM

ps. I really liked the poem too.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2011 10:34:00 AM

gosh,what is THIS all about, sweetie??? well, I did not get nearly enough done that i had hoped this morning. And now I have to get out the door. See ya later!! andrea

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/28/2011 8:31:00 PM

And he probably thought he could hide all this from you, Susan. The sense of betrayal is captured so creatively in your last two lines. Excellent rhyme, Susan. As for that lawyer, I threatened to write a book about her. Everything in that poem was true. She was ordering shoes online while my hearing was underway. Thaks for reading it. Love, Carolyn