Last Train

She hugged her shoulders in the morning mist,
the sun struggled to pierce the charcoal shroud,
beside her someone turned, his lover kissed,
she left as he dissolved into the crowd.
The platform full, she stared along the rails,
he said he'd be along on the next train,
last chance for them, or else the marriage fails,
ten years to make it work, but all in vain.
He left for someone else, she could not cope, 
another man like him she would not find,
her thoughts now focussed on this one last hope
when someone rushing pushed her from behind.
He heard the guard say 'please remain inside'
and thought 'I hope she's not seen someone's died'...

For contest 'Your finest Sonnet', sponsor Mark Massey

22nd July 2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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George   Avatar
July 28, 2018 at 6:48 AM
Great sonnet, Viv. Good luck in the contest.
Lindley Avatar
July 26, 2018 at 6:02 AM
My friend, I bow to the creativity and depth of this exceptionally crafted sonnet! You are a wonderful sonneteer. A fav.. a shining jewel..
Dietrich Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 5:00 PM
Very mysterious and eerie, Viv!! Also well metered sonnet from you! question for you in soupmail.
Melugin Avatar
July 23, 2018 at 1:16 PM
This train was fueled by your atomic ink! E=MC squared! You smoked it!
Lamoureux Avatar
July 23, 2018 at 9:20 AM
Now that’s how to tell a story!
Ashley Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 7:50 PM
Viv, your story-telling enthralled me and I didn't want it to end.. tragic, captivating, intriguing and dramatic.. a beautifully written and superb sonnet! Best wishes for a win my friend.. ~Susan
Horsman Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 3:31 PM
Love the sonnet the train, and your poetry..Made my day.
Duet Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 2:26 PM
Very dramatic and very sad. This one's like the intro to a murder mystery. Very compelling. Good luck in the contest, Viv.
Cunningham Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 11:14 AM
Well written sonnet Viv, I could see the old station ,lots of steam and smell of coal. Good luck. Tom
La France Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 9:24 AM
Viv, oh a great story and I wanted more.. and in sonnet too! Wonderful...
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 8:15 AM
You always shine at your ability to generate a great story. A brilliant sonnet Viv! : )
Teagan Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 8:01 AM
Great story-telling in excellent sonnet form!
Sands Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 7:24 AM
Well written .Captivating Viv :)
Allison Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 5:01 AM
The bard would have been delighted with the tragic ending to the sonnet Mr Viv, I got chills down my spine reading your fine poem, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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