Last Swim

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drifting ... desultory and dour tossed by a testament tide of the ocean, mortal - weary, waterlogged wood shed in a storm by some mighty oak intended of grander things now bare and barkless smooth, stiff, sullen atop the sea all those dark, oily devils drowned in the depths beseeching me - "swallow!"

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Robert Lindley

Date: 8/31/2021 2:54:00 AM

Going deep into the dark- into dark and darker waters. Gasping for light, for illumination. Struggling to not perish into the hungry void. Reaching up- upward towards the truth, the higher levels in this too oft sordid mass of humanity. Finally touching shore- the welcome sand and safety... Your poem truly outstanding my friend! A fav- a gem ..

John Lawless

Date: 8/28/2021 6:53:00 AM

Avery dark and ominous metaphor filled drowning........

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/29/2021 9:30:00 PM

Indeed, John ... thank you for reading and commenting, my friend! :o)