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dying to get home - last message that she texted to her waiting spouse. . . . near the wreckage of her car - shattered phone in blood-stained grass For Brian Strand's Tanka Me Contest

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Wilma Neels

Date: 9/30/2010 3:26:00 AM

Tragic story with brilliant images Andrea.. I'm glad you thought my 29 piece was a worthy write hey.. love Wilma

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/15/2010 7:46:00 AM

Hi Andrea, you asked me about to what my Senryu "History" was referring. When I wrote that I was actually thinking about archeology...All the best...Love, Gert

Paul Holmes

Date: 6/13/2010 10:12:00 AM

Could be a roadside Billboard message. Well written.

Zera Masters

Date: 6/3/2010 9:30:00 AM

painful to read. every day I see people texting, phones propped on the steering wheel. sad.

Sue Mason

Date: 5/29/2010 6:12:00 PM

WOW ... incredible imagery with this one Andrea. Good luck in the contest!!

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/28/2010 8:54:00 PM

I can relate to this one because I was once in a serious car accident. Your description is quite graphic. Matthew Anish

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/26/2010 6:51:00 PM

Good luck Andrea, in the contest, this is sad and awful. Just the picture of the phone and blood. Her dying to get home, you made it a Tanka, enjoyed,..p.d.

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 5/25/2010 9:03:00 AM

Again a brilliant brief tragic story from your seasoned pen. Great write my friend. My good wishes for your contest. Hope you would find my new series poems Patradoot based on my father's work in Hindi and written by my in English quite interesting. Love and best wishes....Ravindra...... Andrea Dietrich

James Fraser

Date: 5/23/2010 1:53:00 PM

This reminds of events a few years ago when there was a crash and the fireman who arrived at the crash scene discovered his wife in the crash. Incredibly tragic and sad life can be at times. Heartfelt piece Andrea > good luck in Brian's fine contest >> James

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/23/2010 7:49:00 AM

Wow...this tells a tragic story, in so few words! Wonderful take on the contest, Andrea!!

Margaret Foster

Date: 5/22/2010 8:05:00 PM

A great tanka on a sad situation. Very real emotion is stirred...good one Andrea...Luv Margaret

Daniel Cwiak

Date: 5/22/2010 3:35:00 PM

Very nice write...I hope it's not from seeing something like this in person. Good luck in the contest. Dan C

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/22/2010 9:00:00 AM

oh...such a sad tanka :( so vivid too... it's really heartbreaking when things like this happen...

Kim Hilliker

Date: 5/22/2010 8:59:00 AM

OMG. How eerie and sad. Well written Tanks, Andrea.

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 5/22/2010 4:44:00 AM

Touching...enjoyed reading this, but with pain...nicely written!

David Byrne

Date: 5/21/2010 7:20:00 PM

poignant!

Lynette Chachere

Date: 5/21/2010 4:38:00 PM

thats not a very welcoming sight to find your own spouse in a wreckage. dying to get home, clever, and very sad. good luck. its says it all in just a few syllables. -Always&Forever Lynette

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/21/2010 3:39:00 PM

Very emotive write for the contest...Good luck..This is happening often here in America when young people use their phones when they should be paying attention..Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work...Sara

Marty Owens

Date: 5/21/2010 2:42:00 PM

Wow this is a nice sad one and should get some attention....enjoyed...good luck in the contest....Marty

Sheol Moribund

Date: 5/21/2010 11:24:00 AM

Hi Andrea: I hope this is fiction and not fact, anyway it is a well written and thought provoking poem. I hope that your vacation was great. Thanks 4 reading and commenting on my poem. Yours truly: Sheol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/21/2010 9:09:00 AM

This poem is great Andrea... good luck in Brian's new contest... yes Ron proposed but a few months ago before our 3000th fight and then we split...AGAIN... I have the emerald and diamond wedding ring remember? ..luv.. Linda-Marie..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/21/2010 6:30:00 AM

Good luck in the contest. Full of suspense

Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/21/2010 5:35:00 AM

Sad story, Andrea, but well written! Wish you success in the contest and thank your for your comments...All the best...Love, Gert

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 5/21/2010 4:19:00 AM

Good luck love... great entry..

James Peranteau

Date: 5/21/2010 2:58:00 AM

Wow, serious message here Andrea ! We just got the new law here, which we have been back and forth about for the last two years....no more cell phones while driving around here or a heafty fine ! Great write ! james