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dying to get home - 
last message that she texted
to her waiting spouse. . . . 
near the wreckage of her car -
shattered phone in blood-stained grass

For Brian Strand's Tanka Me Contest

Copyright © Andrea Dietrich | Year Posted 2010

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Wilma Neels Date: 9/30/2010 3:26:00 AM Tragic story with brilliant images Andrea.. I'm glad you thought my 29 piece was a worthy write hey.. love Wilma Login to Reply

Gert W. Knop Date: 6/15/2010 7:46:00 AM Hi Andrea, you asked me about to what my Senryu "History" was referring. When I wrote that I was actually thinking about archeology...All the best...Love, Gert Login to Reply

Paul Holmes Date: 6/13/2010 10:12:00 AM Could be a roadside Billboard message. Well written. Login to Reply

Zera Masters Date: 6/3/2010 9:30:00 AM painful to read. every day I see people texting, phones propped on the steering wheel. sad. Login to Reply

Sue Mason Date: 5/29/2010 6:12:00 PM WOW ... incredible imagery with this one Andrea. Good luck in the contest!! Login to Reply

Matthew Anish Date: 5/28/2010 8:54:00 PM I can relate to this one because I was once in a serious car accident. Your description is quite graphic. Matthew Anish Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 5/26/2010 6:51:00 PM Good luck Andrea, in the contest, this is sad and awful. Just the picture of the phone and blood. Her dying to get home, you made it a Tanka, enjoyed,..p.d. Login to Reply

Ravindra K Kapoor Date: 5/25/2010 9:03:00 AM Again a brilliant brief tragic story from your seasoned pen. Great write my friend. My good wishes for your contest. Hope you would find my new series poems Patradoot based on my father's work in Hindi and written by my in English quite interesting. Love and best wishes....Ravindra...... Andrea Dietrich Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 5/23/2010 1:53:00 PM This reminds of events a few years ago when there was a crash and the fireman who arrived at the crash scene discovered his wife in the crash. Incredibly tragic and sad life can be at times. Heartfelt piece Andrea > good luck in Brian's fine contest >> James Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 5/23/2010 7:49:00 AM Wow...this tells a tragic story, in so few words! Wonderful take on the contest, Andrea!! Login to Reply

Margaret Foster Date: 5/22/2010 8:05:00 PM A great tanka on a sad situation. Very real emotion is stirred...good one Andrea...Luv Margaret Login to Reply

Daniel Cwiak Date: 5/22/2010 3:35:00 PM Very nice write...I hope it's not from seeing something like this in person. Good luck in the contest. Dan C Login to Reply

Kabuteng P.Ink K. Date: 5/22/2010 9:00:00 AM oh...such a sad tanka :( so vivid too... it's really heartbreaking when things like this happen... Login to Reply

Kim Hilliker Date: 5/22/2010 8:59:00 AM OMG. How eerie and sad. Well written Tanks, Andrea. Login to Reply

Syed Amaan Ahmad Date: 5/22/2010 4:44:00 AM Touching...enjoyed reading this, but with pain...nicely written! Login to Reply

David Byrne Date: 5/21/2010 7:20:00 PM poignant! Login to Reply

Lynette Chachere Date: 5/21/2010 4:38:00 PM thats not a very welcoming sight to find your own spouse in a wreckage. dying to get home, clever, and very sad. good luck. its says it all in just a few syllables. -Always&Forever Lynette Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 5/21/2010 3:39:00 PM Very emotive write for the contest...Good luck..This is happening often here in America when young people use their phones when they should be paying attention..Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work...Sara Login to Reply

Marty Owens Date: 5/21/2010 2:42:00 PM Wow this is a nice sad one and should get some attention....enjoyed...good luck in the contest....Marty Login to Reply

Sheol Moribund Date: 5/21/2010 11:24:00 AM Hi Andrea: I hope this is fiction and not fact, anyway it is a well written and thought provoking poem. I hope that your vacation was great. Thanks 4 reading and commenting on my poem. Yours truly: Sheol Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 5/21/2010 9:09:00 AM This poem is great Andrea... good luck in Brian's new contest... yes Ron proposed but a few months ago before our 3000th fight and then we split...AGAIN... I have the emerald and diamond wedding ring remember? ..luv.. Linda-Marie.. Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 5/21/2010 6:30:00 AM Good luck in the contest. Full of suspense Login to Reply

Gert W. Knop Date: 5/21/2010 5:35:00 AM Sad story, Andrea, but well written! Wish you success in the contest and thank your for your comments...All the best...Love, Gert Login to Reply

Michael J. Falotico Date: 5/21/2010 4:19:00 AM Good luck love... great entry.. Login to Reply

James Peranteau Date: 5/21/2010 2:58:00 AM Wow, serious message here Andrea ! We just got the new law here, which we have been back and forth about for the last two years....no more cell phones while driving around here or a heafty fine ! Great write ! james Login to Reply

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