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Last Breath - Summer

“To say it was a beautiful day would not begin to explain it. It was that day when the end of summer intersects perfectly with the start of fall.” – Ann Patchett Summers last breath quickens my heart My longing gasp to hold the warmth Against my skin as you leave Whispered farewell the geese fly south I skip stones from a lonely shore Trade long days for sunset colors Welcome fall’s crispy open door written: 9-6-2019 FAREWELL, SUMMER Poetry Contest Sponsored by: nette onclaud

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Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/15/2019 3:25:00 PM

some lovely wording and images in this; i'm sure it would've placed but for the syllable count being out on the third line..thanks for your kind comment on my work :)

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/25/2019 2:02:00 PM

I see that now. Thanks for your encouragement,, Charlotte

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/8/2019 1:14:00 AM

This is beautiful Jeanne! Outstanding imagery! : ) xxoo

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/8/2019 11:55:00 AM

Thank you Connie...I live for summer but cherish the fall.

John Lawless

Date: 9/7/2019 7:21:00 AM

"I skip stones from a lonely shore". Therein lies the crux of the matter, no chatter, now honk, no hum in the surrounding woods.....a muted silence precedes fall. Nicely done with a intriguing take on the theme an the form

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/8/2019 11:54:00 AM

Yes, it gets so quiet with all the kids back in school...even on the week ends...

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 9/6/2019 4:44:00 PM

'Trade long days for sunset colors' - what a perfect line, captures the end of summer so sweetly!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/8/2019 11:55:00 AM

The colors are why I love the fall. Thanks for coming by for a read Michelle. xoxo

Paul Callus

Date: 9/6/2019 2:12:00 PM

What a delightful poem this is, Jeanne! I don't like summer coming to an end, but autumn's colours compensate the loss of warm weather. ~ regards // paul

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/8/2019 11:56:00 AM

Hello Paul...I agree completely. I'm glad you enjoyed.