Lin Lane Poet Monorhyme

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Labyinthine, Languish, Letter Word Contest ~ November 7, 2023

Sponsored by Constance La France

painting by Judy Mackey

Languish

“Every wall that would entrap me has a door that would free me. And I languish because the fear of freedom often leaves me preferring the familiarity of the wall.”                              Craig D. Lounsbrough

I'm languishing in self-pity
My cat is lost in the city
Grieving for my itty bitty
Missing kitty   Missing kitty

Again, I find myself alone
Nobody calls me on the phone
Weeping for loved ones I have known
Fate, I bemoan      Fate, I bemoan

A poet languishes each time
He seems to be bereft of rhyme
Unable to write poems, sublime
It is a crime        It is a crime

Artists languish in mortal fear
that their paintings will bring a tear
Like Van Gogh who lobbed off an ear
End of career        End of career

Who has not languished in despair
pining over things hard to bear
Anguish reveals how much we care
Heartache beware     Heartache beware

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Paula Goldsmith November 10, 2023 at 12:36 PM Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this one again. Creative write/picture. Have a great day............

Anne-Lise Andresen November 9, 2023 at 8:42 AM - Congratulations on your win...a wonderful poem, Lin :) - I'm bad at rhyming in English :) - hugs Lin Lane November 9, 2023 at 9:01 AM Anne-Lise, I couldn't begin to write in Norwegian, so you're much braver than I am to try rhyming in English. I admire your writing. Thank you. ~ hugs

Bill Baker November 8, 2023 at 8:05 AM Excellent Monorhyme, Lin. I especially like the way you used a repeat phrase at the end of each verse. Great entry for the contest. You shouldn't need luck, so I'll just say I hope it gets the acknowledgement it deserves. A poet friend in Texas, Bill P.S. at my age not getting a call is the norm. lol Hugs, Bill P.S.S. Forgot to mention I added this one to my FAVs list. :-) Lin Lane November 8, 2023 at 6:07 PM What wonderful comments and compliments you’ve bestowed on these lines. Thank you very much, Bill. And for faving it, too.

Charles Messina November 8, 2023 at 5:22 AM Lovely write, Lin. Especially that second very relatable verse. BOL in the contest. Hugs Lin Lane November 8, 2023 at 7:23 AM Hi Charlie and thanks for the well wishes and supportive comments. Hugs to you, too.

Daniel Turner November 7, 2023 at 7:21 PM languishing in a prison of words, broken sentences, disrupted thoughts and unfinished poems. I really like this poem Lin. Very relatable. Excellent penning! Lin Lane November 8, 2023 at 7:22 AM I think you're languishing days are near their end, Danny. Thanks for commenting... Ear scratches for Buddy.

Jan Allison November 7, 2023 at 5:06 PM Can relate big time to losing my muse and unable to even write a simple limerick, I do love the form you chose Lin, you really are so versatile in whatever style or form you chose:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane November 8, 2023 at 7:21 AM Jan, you've certainly not had to deal with a missing muse since your return to the kitchen. I'm so glad you're here and thank you for being so complimentary of my poetry. Hugs.

Abdullah Alhemaidy November 7, 2023 at 2:56 PM Very nice poem and form! Have a very nice time. Good luck. Lin Lane November 8, 2023 at 7:20 AM Thanks for leaving me your kind thoughts, ~AA.

David Kavanagh November 7, 2023 at 12:52 PM I see you chose the Languish side of the contest Lin, good choice too, especially stanza 3 it’s very befitting of me; anyway anguish reveals how much we care, doesn’t it just, another fine poem from you in one of your specialist forms, cheers David Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 1:09 PM You can write, David. About anything, any time and it will hold my attention… even if sometimes I have to dig the find the root of your thought or a hidden acorn.

Paula Goldsmith November 7, 2023 at 12:05 PM A very creative Monorhyme write/fun picture. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a wonderful day......... Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 1:06 PM Dear Paula, I enjoy reading all of your kind reviews.

Jay Narain November 7, 2023 at 11:25 AM Nice poem, Lin. I hope writing a poem without rhyme is not a crime. Lol. Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 1:05 PM Lol lol Jay. If it is I’ll have to pardon myself. Loved your humor.

Jeff Connelly November 7, 2023 at 10:17 AM So many poetic forms I'm unfamiliar with Lin, but I like the repetition; and you've written it well. Thanks Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 10:48 AM I like this one, too. Jeff. The repetition gives significance and emphasis to the overall meaning. Thanks!

Mike Gentile November 7, 2023 at 9:34 AM Lin, you've so interestingly penned a very relatable poem! I love your Monorhyme and technique for this unique expression! Excellent! Happy Tuesday xxoo Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 10:47 AM Your comments are always so encouraging and supportive, Mike. I thank you for the many wonderful remarks you've left.

Arlo Parker November 7, 2023 at 8:33 AM Awestruck Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 10:57 AM There is only one Lin, Arlo, and I've never been unkind to you. Comment on my poetry or not... that ball is in your court. Arlo Parker November 7, 2023 at 10:56 AM Friend for sure. Game hater. Kindness is a driving force that you seem to embrace often. Our relationship has ebbed and flowed over several platforms. I need not comment anymore as I never know which Lin I am commenting on. Bless your journey. Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 10:40 AM Now that's a game I will not play with you, Arlo. I've admitted to being Jenna, but who are you? Really? You try to teeter back and forth portraying yourself as friend and foe. I consider you a foe from now on. I won't block you, but I'll see what kind of person you are by the way you comment or respond to my poetry from now on.. Arlo Parker November 7, 2023 at 10:25 AM Never removed anything, ever Jenna. But if somebody did it must have been AI. Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 9:16 AM Another awestruck from you. A titch repetitive, especially since you removed that same word I commented on one of your posts. I’ll play your game. Get a little more inventive.

Tom Cunningham November 7, 2023 at 8:30 AM Sometimes in life we hit a downward spiral and often can't see a way out, we must never give up on hope because the gray clouds will disperse eventually. I love the repeating lines, good luck in the contest. Tom Lin Lane November 7, 2023 at 9:17 AM Thank you very much, Tom. The form is called Monotetra and I’ve used it several times.