Andrea Dietrich Poet Quatern

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For the 'Labyrinthine, Languish, Letter Words' Contest of Constance La France

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Languish

“New love is a fresh breeze, but when it leaves unexpectedly,
it knocks the wind right out of you.” By author of this poem

Languish

Now sick from love, I languish here,
and rarely do I leave my bed.
I never thought a simple tear
that for that guy I’d ever shed.

He wore me down with charming ease.
Now sick from love, I languish here
recalling how like a fresh breeze
it felt when I saw him appear.

He broke right through my private sphere
that I’d been guarding with such care.
Now sick from love, I languish here.
How could he also bring despair?

First love and joy he brought to me.
I took his sweet words as sincere.
His leaving I did not foresee.
Now sick from love, I languish here.

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Paula Goldsmith November 10, 2023 at 12:32 PM Congratulations on your win. A great write/picture. Have a great day............

Terry Miller November 10, 2023 at 8:17 AM Very nicely done; congratulations

Joseph May November 9, 2023 at 2:17 PM He captured her heart with sweet words, Very nicely penned Andrea, Congrats on your win

Anne-Lise Andresen November 9, 2023 at 8:38 AM - Heartfelt written, Andrea - Congratulations on your top win :) - hugs

Gary Radice November 7, 2023 at 2:09 PM A great first line that lead this reader wanting to find out what you meant by "sick by love". It became apparent as I progressed. So much anguish and upset wrapped up in your words Andrea and with an excellent rhyme scheme made for a great, but poignant read. Cheers - Gary

Christina Bowring November 7, 2023 at 9:39 AM A wonderful quatern dear Andrea. So well written and full of such expressive lines,’ Now sick from love, I languish here’ He broke right through my private sphere’. So many reading this will be able to relate to it. The repeating line is so poignant. I also love your quote like Inky - absolutely wonderful and the picture pairs well.Good luck in the contest! Hugs and smiles xx

Ink Empress November 6, 2023 at 9:59 PM Ah this is such a poignant and soul stirring write! I love the picture you’ve used here too goes so well with your word weaving. So deeply soul hitting. And what a brilliant quote too! I love that! Definitely a top winner! Goodluck in the contest

David Fisher November 6, 2023 at 4:56 PM This is so enjoyable to read; such flow. The end was a whopper even with the hint.

Paige Hind November 6, 2023 at 3:45 PM Very beautiful, but sad... enjoyed your poem!

Victor Buhagiar November 6, 2023 at 1:37 AM Brilliant poem. You used everything to make this poem brilliant, emotions galore. Best for a win. Hugs and blessings.

Unseeking Seeker November 5, 2023 at 1:56 AM You are a master of this form, Andrea! Truly an outstanding poem. You bring out the anguish of betrayal and abandonment so vividly and artistically.

Daisy Meadows November 5, 2023 at 1:45 AM Brilliant poem. Well done.

Eve Roper November 4, 2023 at 11:03 PM Heartfelt poem. I still remember my first crush. I think of him every so often. Because I was shy and in the 5th 6th 7th grade, I totally ignored him. I enjoyed reading my friend. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe have a nice weekend.