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Languish

The main purpose of life is to live rightly, think rightly, act rightly. The soul must languish when we give all our thought to the body. 
By Mahatma Gandhi


                        Sheer sneaking swallowing my sigh, sooty sky, unaware,
            The lion's might had dwindled to that of a little mouse.
Vibes can be outspoken, yet fate is tying me in despair.
Everything in my universe revolves around my house.
                        Once I had insight, dark languid dashes shed no light.
Once I had hope, but a haze of hankering hides my sight.
Once I had the birthright, yet a black beam binds blight.
      I shed my inner tears while feeling a sense of peace.
            We pray every night that the slaughter will cease.
                        We yell as the world spins, and sanity is a flimsy fleece.
We yell as worry claws its way up the mask we wear.
            Fearful of a skewed worldview and warped brain douse.
      Yet, we might be asleep if the world were to end tonight.
            If crisis slips, the dove may put his bill to lock a lease.

2nd place contest winner

Written: March 14, 2023

Writing Challenge - 'L' Words - Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France


This poem form is the Fragmented Rhyme invented and Conceived by Constance La France. It has 14 lines with indentation, and a rhyme scheme, as follows: ABABCCCDDDABCD

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023



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Date: 4/3/2023 3:09:00 PM
Sotto, wonderful writing and thank you for sharing your poem in my Writing Challenge congratulations !
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Date: 3/17/2023 10:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your win dear Sotto. Wonderful poem
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Date: 3/17/2023 9:35:00 AM
- Back with a congratulations, Las :) - hugs
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Date: 3/17/2023 7:28:00 AM
Very nicely done Lasaad. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 3/17/2023 7:26:00 AM
"Sheer sneaking swallowing my sigh, sooty sky" - great alliteration. Beautiful writing, as a whole. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/16/2023 9:11:00 AM
A creative/wonderful write. Good Luck. Have a blessed day................
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Date: 3/14/2023 1:56:00 PM
Wonderful line; "sanity is a flimsy fleece." Elizabeth
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Date: 3/14/2023 10:59:00 AM
- There is so much to worry about in this world, Las...don't let it keep you awake at night...the lions will attack unexpectedly...we never know where? or when? or why? - A great piece of writing - best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 3/14/2023 8:20:00 AM
In Greek mythology, we see Athena (Minerva), daughter of Zeus, to represent Wisdom. She was called; the thrice-born because Wisdom for the Greeks meant: To think correctly, to speak correctly, and to act correctly. This, my dearest friend, Lasaad, 3000 years ago. You have written a very profound and inspiring poem that enriches one's soul and mind. Blessings!
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Date: 3/14/2023 7:57:00 AM
Creative and expressive way to go for the contest. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
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