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Sentimental rain creates puddles upon a lane of lost memories. Gone are those malachite meadows, where we once ran free. Clouds now reflect against intimidating soaring glass towers. The scent of Silent fresh air, replaced by raucous toxic bustling cars. In my childhood playground, rusty swings no longer blow in the wind, as a medley of broken dreams and forgotten promises, haunt my mind. I hardly recognise these taciturn faces running around like ants. Every strangers face I see, reminds me this place was never meant for me. As suppressed spirits slowly guide me to your final resting place, I am finally content, knowing, you are in the company of angels. Silent One 25 September 2018 Example for the 'lines of ten that remind you what it was like back then' contest.

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Jude Herrick

Date: 12/7/2023 3:41:00 PM

And by "manicured", I mean, anyone can make a diamond with the letters (font). But to arrange the am"bush" at the end. The arrangement is entity like, rather than haphazard . It gives form in 2 ways instead of 1 superficial way. I think you knew what I was saying, just being thorough. This may be the last...and furthermore (won't that be nice?) lol

Jude Herrick

Date: 12/7/2023 3:28:00 PM

To be clear "sterile" attributed to the Bonsai tree not seemingly bearing fruit. But it bears fruit indeed that feeds the soul in it's manicured aesthetic beauty.

Jude Herrick

Date: 12/7/2023 11:08:00 AM

I really like th way this is crafted. The hub at the end holding possibility for many offshoots. "As suppressed spirits slowly guide me to your final resting place," Within the rest of the poem is given topic by this Mother line. (It could be the memories, the childhood park, the better era, a graveyard of dreams...very awesome, and manicured like a Japanese Bonsai Tree, in a pregnancy of haunting fruit. Sterile, never.

Constance La France

Date: 12/1/2018 10:55:00 AM

Silent, such a beautiful write and you always pick the exact perfect music to accompany your words, love this, well done ~

Becca Teagan

Date: 10/15/2018 12:01:00 AM

Some interesting word choices in this one! It's amazing how much things can change, isn't it. The final couplet is kind of a twist ending, I think. Very well done.

James Inman

Date: 10/10/2018 7:48:00 AM

Your melancholy thoughts are beautifully presented here Silent One.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/8/2018 9:22:00 AM

Hi Silent, firstly, a belated congratulations on your POTD. Another excellent use of the free verse form. As always, you lay before us an emotional piece that touches the heart deeply. The emotional content paints such vivid imagery in the mind. It is always an honour and a pleasure to read your work my friend. this one is a fave. Hugs....Mike. XX

Debjani Mitra

Date: 10/4/2018 8:52:00 PM

so much to learn from your poetry....for beginners like me..I go through often..lovely use of words..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/4/2018 7:35:00 PM

POTD. BIG congrats, Silent One.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/3/2018 8:48:00 PM

Your poem is deep, lonely and melancholy, Silent One. Life is never the same.. we realize that our childhood with its hopes and dreams is lost and then sadly, so are some of those we love as the passage of time takes its toll. Your last two lines are especially moving. Our present can pale in comparison to our sweet memories of yesterday.. Belated congratulations on your well deserved recognition with POTD honors with your exquisitely expressed poem. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Carole Duet

Date: 10/3/2018 3:24:00 PM

P.S. One of my favorite songs too.

Carole Duet

Date: 10/3/2018 3:23:00 PM

So heartfelt and deep...wonderful poetry as usual, ZZ.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/3/2018 2:25:00 PM

POTD it is, S O... huggs

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 10/1/2018 5:18:00 PM

Very well written poem replete with metaphors and similes. Congratulations

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/29/2018 8:00:00 AM

A belated congratulations on your very sad but so well-written poem honored as POTD.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/29/2018 1:05:00 AM

- Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d., S.O. :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/28/2018 8:34:00 PM

I am back to congratulate you on POTD! Brilliant writing Silent! : )

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/27/2018 9:29:00 AM

Enjoyed reading this beauty of a poem, SO:) congratulations on POTD:)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/26/2018 9:14:00 PM

Sad, happy, loving, compassionate, lonely; it has many attributes, this poem; well done.

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/26/2018 5:42:00 PM

Congratulations for POTD! :)

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/26/2018 3:58:00 PM

Back to Congrats!!! on POTD! my Silent friend...love & light...^WW^

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/26/2018 3:32:00 PM

I really like your example. I just saw another poem like this so somebody has also done a very nice one. I am so behind here. Gotta catch up on new contests like yours.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 9/26/2018 1:32:00 PM

Congratulations Silent One, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. ~ Brandy

Roy Pett

Date: 9/26/2018 12:38:00 PM

Absolutely amazing SO, thoroughly enjoyed reading this exceptional piece of poetry, congratulations on your well deserved POTD my friend. :))

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 9/26/2018 11:11:00 AM

We are never the same when we lose parts of who we are.. The taste of that beauty once filled our lives.. Living on sweet and cherished memories.. A deep and brilliant write about human nature aches.. Beautifully nostalgic.. Congratulations on your POTD Silent One.. A well deserved recognition.. A poetry from the heart goes deep inside the heart. My deepest regards. Stay blessed always.