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Do you wish to hold me? We can drift on the sea my love, under the stars above. You were my lovely dove so free, who captivated me. I thought I’d never be so glad and still inside so sad For the love we both had, is gone. As we approach the dawn I will think, “Once upon a time, you were meant to be mine.” So now my heart does pine away Wishing that you would stay I know that you will say, good bye Still I will wonder why, you chose another guy, not me. Him on shore, me at Sea~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Inspired by Brenda Chiri She introduced me to this new form. The form is called Luc Bat. Check out Brenda’s poem titled “Seasons”

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Date: 12/24/2019 8:21:00 PM
Nice one Richard. Must look up this form. Hope you have a very Merry Christmas and thank you for the gift of your poetry. Cheers, SuZ
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/25/2019 9:06:00 AM
So nice to have a visit from you. Merry Christmas!
Date: 12/4/2019 11:14:00 AM
I am certain this poem will be a win - well penned and wonderfully described and created Richard 'Him on shore,me at sea'. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2019 8:43:00 AM
Thanks Jennifer. Hugs Rick.
Date: 12/3/2019 5:02:00 AM
..Him on shore, me at Sea... Beautifully penned..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2019 8:26:00 AM
Thanks Jenish.
Date: 12/1/2019 12:20:00 PM
The form sounds intriguing, Richard. I must check this out! ~Mark
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Mark Toney
Date: 12/3/2019 5:11:00 PM
Will do
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2019 8:27:00 AM
Check out Brenda’s poem. She has the rules listed.
Date: 12/1/2019 11:00:00 AM
Beautiful heartache, Richard...this form suits your lyrical thoughts nicely!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2019 8:28:00 AM
Thanks Jim.
Date: 11/30/2019 7:56:00 PM
Luc-bat?! Intriguing. Have to check with Brenda too on this one. Thanks for the introduction, Richard! Season's, best, Gershon
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2019 7:41:00 AM
Thanks Gershon. Enjoy your Sunday.
Date: 11/30/2019 9:38:00 AM
Good I stopped by. I get some touching poems to read. "So now my heart does pine away Wishing that you would stay" You could have used any word but you chose "pine away" shows how the flow of thoughts come and words roll in by default. Thanks for sharing
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2019 9:41:00 AM
So nice to have you visit Johnson.
Date: 11/29/2019 9:33:00 AM
Very descriptive and moving, Richard. Janice
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/29/2019 9:42:00 AM
Thanks Janice. ;0)
Date: 11/29/2019 7:40:00 AM
Hi Richard, a wonderful write, using a new form. Love, whether sad or happy, always touches my soul. This write is a poetic gem. Love the flow and the content. A Fav. Have a wonderful Friday. Blessings....Mike.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/29/2019 9:24:00 AM
Thanks Mike. Blessings Rick.
Date: 11/27/2019 6:17:00 PM
So wistful, especially the ending - thank you for the recommendation-
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/28/2019 8:49:00 AM
Thanks Michelle. ;0)
Date: 11/27/2019 2:54:00 PM
The damn goodbye... I have said that so many times... Nicely done.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2019 3:14:00 PM
Sorry to hear that. Hopefully if you keep saying hello, the right one will stay.
Date: 11/27/2019 2:18:00 PM
beautifully penned Rick... i saw her form, and you did a wonderful poem with it...i haven't tried it...maybe one day... :) hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2019 3:14:00 PM
Thanks Sandra, hugs Rick.
Date: 11/27/2019 1:33:00 PM
A wonderfully creative smooth flowing piece in a new poetry form! You hit the bullseye my friend. Love the title too!! A true gem and a fav..
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Date: 11/27/2019 12:36:00 PM
Thanks, Richard, for sharing this poem, which so beautifully captures the rhythm of the sea, and relationships. Glad it was only your "pretend heart" that was broken!
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Date: 11/27/2019 12:23:00 PM
Been there and had it done to me, a woman leaving for someone else. This piece brings back memories. Nicely done.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2019 12:27:00 PM
I once gave an ultimatum and she chose him over me. I wonder how things worked out for her? As for me I could not be happier.
Date: 11/26/2019 9:06:00 AM
Very good debut Luc-at-bat, Richard! lol! But in all seriously, this is a doubly excellent poem, per your usual excellence. Have to thank Brenda C. for this form introduction. So she poetically left ... you're a muse soldier of love! On your quill feet soldier!! Don't break the chain (of command), write another dove love in who will help should the pain, 'kay. lol! Love and more love always, bruh.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2019 8:05:00 AM
Great comment, thanks Freddie. ;0)
Date: 11/26/2019 6:54:00 AM
Brilliant writing my friend Richard! Fortunately I know that no woman would leave you for another guy therefor I do not worry of you being unhappy! Hahaha!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/26/2019 8:06:00 AM
I have been with my sweetie for 26 years so all is well my friend.
Date: 11/25/2019 4:52:00 PM
Very nice Richard Thanks for sharing this
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/25/2019 11:05:00 PM
My pleasure. ;0)
Date: 11/25/2019 4:47:00 PM
Sweet, Richard. I personally think it's better to float freely at sea then be grounded. A shame your woman didn't feel the same. Thanks.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/25/2019 11:06:00 PM
It’s fictional so only my pretend heart is broken. ;0)
Date: 11/25/2019 2:57:00 PM
Special melody to your poem Richard--kudos to you and Brenda for this new form. Enjoyed the way you presented the case--the ending line says it all.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/25/2019 11:08:00 PM
Thanks Vijay. Much appreciated.
Date: 11/25/2019 2:46:00 PM
Rick you did an amazing job with this! I love it! Plus I'm so glad you gave it a go and did better then mine! !;)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 11:53:00 PM
Most welcome Rick! Hopefully I can inspire you again sometime!;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/25/2019 11:10:00 PM
Personally I really like yours. ;0)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/25/2019 11:09:00 PM
Thanks for the inspiration, it was a fun challenge. Hugs Rick.

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