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Lachrymose Lament Premiere Contest Winner

As the last petal falls upon trembling twigs, and the heart withers, like nocturnal stars weeping in a casket~ of ice-laced sepals, soaked in searing silence, cloaked in thistles of nothingness, let Cleopatra’s amulets dress your blurred horizon, embroidered with empty promises. I wear our forbidden love like a bleeding epitaph, inscribed with gusts of grief and twisted tendrils, emanating memories of us~ a mystical reflection of how once we danced like daffodils sipping spiced gold magic while the satanic sun burned the flickering flames of felicity within twin souls, weaving poetic pansies across the symphonic sky, brushed with Sahara crystals, unfolding a canopy of unbreakable c o m p a s s i o n ... O beloved black dahlia, if I could, I would fetch you the moon on a spoon, steal the galaxies~ wrap them in supernova serenity. I’ll paint lakes of longing with opalescent silver, sculpt Swarovski swans glazed in iridescent bliss, tempting the alluring twilight to drizzle aurora threads across mysterious silhouettes, engrossed in an ethereal orchestra. But if tomorrow these words weigh little less than the dreams we’ve dreamed in stillness, remember my soul is tied to your rain-kissed metaphors, and even if rhymes cannot fix what’s undone, these verses ache to cleanse every stain left within lifeless leaflets. For no shift in season could veil the vibrancy of vermilion still rushing through these veins, singing your name in scarred cadence, resting my quivering quill on the cusp of the cursed springs, as I embrace darkness before the dawning of dulcet wings, to lure you back to the land of timeless trinkets, a lachrymose lament~ romanticized as the requiem for bewitched orchards...

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Date: 3/23/2025 1:06:00 AM
Another deserving win from one of soups best poets! Congratulations Inky!
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Date: 3/15/2025 3:42:00 PM
Your poetry is so outstanding, worthy of 1st place. Its a feast for my eyes and heart when you write like this, Congrats on your win dear Ink, I'm proud of you !
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Date: 3/14/2025 6:58:00 PM
Congratulations Ink. Your poetry soars among the clouds and stars. Very well done.
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Date: 3/14/2025 6:47:00 PM
congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers!!!
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Date: 3/14/2025 11:03:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful/wonderful write again. Have a fun/blessed day with your win..........
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Date: 3/14/2025 9:16:00 AM
wow, great writing, you must really go into another space to write something like this.
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Date: 3/10/2025 5:29:00 PM
IE, oh my goodness, the passion of romance and attraction do make us pine and feel if only. You do this so well. The way you lift me up and set me down is so much emotional fun. Hope your life fills with ups and floating on clouds. Smiles!!!
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Date: 3/6/2025 6:32:00 AM
Thank you for writing for my contest. Congratulations on your placement. As always your writing has such depth and emotionality. The imagery is always impeccable. Some favorites are "could veil the vibrancy of vermilion still rushing through these veins," and "romanticized as the requiem for bewitched orchards..." Always look forward to reading your work.
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Date: 3/7/2025 12:08:00 PM
Awn thank you so much for my placement and also for this detailed comment, grateful always
Date: 3/4/2025 11:18:00 AM
weeping in a casket of ice-laced sepals, soaked in searing silence,.. oooo child that line just took my breath away!! a mystical reflection of how once we danced like daffodils .. love the soft warm imagery in this papi! fetch you the moon on a spoon, steal the galaxies wrap them in supernova serenity.. Oh my!!! That’s sexaaay!!! I want this spoon ae!! no shift in season could veil the vibrancy of vermilion still rushing through these veins, Damn rite !! The power of love !! The flow here is absolutely amazing… divine creation indeed papi!!
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Date: 3/5/2025 8:33:00 AM
Thank you papi for visiting! I appreciate your support always
Date: 3/4/2025 9:13:00 AM
"Like nocturnal stars weeping in a casket..." sublime imagery, even the stars have something to wish for. The reference to Cleopatra is charming. "I wear our bleeding love like an epitaph...Singing your name in scarred cadence..." You have a very romantic soul Poetess, one which writes on tombstones of love...Take me, to where Love learns no more...J.A.B.
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Date: 3/5/2025 8:40:00 AM
Thank you for your very poetic comment, i see now is a prompt too. Im sure many will get inspired. Appreciate your kind support truly
Date: 3/4/2025 9:01:00 AM
"I wear our forbidden love like a bleeding epitaph, inscribed with gusts of grief and twisted tendrils," -- And sadly, happily, love is most of life. Nothing else stands out worth mentioning. Your poetry is lovely and profound. Blessings. "remember my soul is tied to your rain-kissed metaphors, and even if rhymes cannot fix what’s undone, these verses ache to cleanse every stain left within lifeless leaflets." -- Beautiful!
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Date: 3/5/2025 9:50:00 AM
Thank you so much dear joe for your detailed and thoughtful comment, always so encouraging and kind: appreciate your support truly
Date: 3/4/2025 6:50:00 AM
Sad to love and lose at the endeavor. It brings many heartaches. Sometimes we are going after the wrong person/s or personality type. Counseling helps. Thanks for sharing. Sara K
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Date: 3/5/2025 9:50:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear sara. Grateful always for your kind support
Date: 3/4/2025 4:46:00 AM
Exotic Description! Your mind is truly spherical - the way you pick up words & phrases from all over & weave them anew is truly astounding. In your poem today I saw you as a Reed along the Nile blowing in the wind. I enjoyed the last two lines particularly: Romanticized as a requiem for bewitched orchards ... outstanding imagery ThkU
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Date: 3/5/2025 12:04:00 PM
Thank you so much truly for your sweet comment im always grateful,. Yes i was thinking of Egypt when i wrote this.: been there... and river nile too: was one of my dreams to see the pyramids and was a nice experience: so good to hear from you always sweet soul
Date: 3/3/2025 10:19:00 PM
Dear empress, I feel the pain and the intensity of your longing. You are ready to do anything to bring back the lovesome days of union once more to re live. " If I could, I would fetch you the moon on a spoon, steal the galaxies~ wrap them in supernova serenity." Your reference to Greek mythology and Cleopatra add to the classical touch of your poem. "I wear our forbidden love like a bleeding epitaph, inscribed with gusts of grief and twisted tendrils, emanating memories of us~" A lament rises from your heart, each time you are haunted by those memories. Nonpareil is your style, dear friend.
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Date: 3/6/2025 1:00:00 AM
Thank you so much for always being so kind and supportive im grateful truly for your detailed comments and encouragement
Date: 3/3/2025 8:21:00 PM
The poem exploring themes of impermanence,unfulfilled desires and enduring power of love amidst sorrow.Superb.
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Date: 3/6/2025 1:06:00 AM
Thank you
Date: 3/3/2025 7:34:00 PM
Dearest Inky, your poetry is breathtaking as always. The way nature is intertwined with human emotion—stars weeping, daffodils dancing, and the sun burning twin souls—creates a hauntingly beautiful atmosphere. There’s a delicate balance between despair and devotion, with each line carrying the weight of love lost yet never truly gone. The mention of Cleopatra’s amulets and Sahara crystals adds an enchanting, almost mythical depth, making the piece feel both personal and timeless. The final lines, with their aching hope and poetic lament, leave a lingering echo of bittersweet remembrance. Truly a masterpiece of evocative language and raw feeling. A fave , and hugs
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Date: 3/6/2025 1:07:00 AM
Thats so sweet of you to say dear maria, beautiful soul, thank you so much for the fave. And also for your uplifting comment! I am beyond grateful
Date: 3/3/2025 3:35:00 PM
Dear one! JustbFav-ed this masterpiece…if Jim ever left me after a fight, this THIS would be MY lament! The Night, Time’s seasons, the flowers down to their parts…all weeping, pain moving through vermillion veins! OMGSo often dear one after reading your poetry, i think i will quit writing. Your excellence is beyond reach. Amazed. Left me in awe…sending blessing! sally
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Date: 3/6/2025 1:11:00 AM
Your comments always leave my heart full , filled with nothing but gratitude! Thank you so much for being so generous with your compliments, you are an amazing poet, pls dont stop writing ever. I appreciate also the fave
Date: 3/3/2025 2:52:00 PM
May that quill quiver fast until the end of days, when it the stillness of the night it will whisper to thee " your poetry is amazing " then your smile and know that you were gifted the greatest gift of all, " writing" winning wishes dear heart !
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Date: 3/6/2025 2:19:00 AM
Awwn you are so kind sweet rose! Thank you so very much truly
Date: 3/3/2025 2:27:00 PM
Amazing metaphors, I can sense the sadness in your verse. Lovely to see you back IE. Tom
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Date: 3/6/2025 2:24:00 AM
Ah always grateful for your kind support dear tom thank you so much truly
Date: 3/3/2025 11:51:00 AM
I've lived parts of your poem. There can be sadness of loss so great that exhaustion takes over. I enjoy the metaphors- ice laced sepals, flames of felicity within twin souls- and the rhythmic meter of words. I'm glad you're back.
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Date: 3/6/2025 2:34:00 AM
Thank you so much always for being so kind and supportive dear sweet hilda, im truly grateful for your kind support
Date: 3/3/2025 10:12:00 AM
Breathtaking poetry. Always an enjoy to read!!!
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Date: 3/6/2025 2:34:00 AM
Ah thank you dear robert so kind of you to always support me: thank you for your generous support
Date: 3/3/2025 9:41:00 AM
WOW!!! What a powerful/wonderful write. Each line is better than the next. “Amazing” ~ "Good Luck" in the contest. Looks like we both did this one. Have a blessed day writing away.....................
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Date: 3/6/2025 3:03:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear paula im so grateful for your kind support
Date: 3/3/2025 8:41:00 AM
You are an amazing poet ! Love it
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