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Wrote this for a contest, but found it to be one of the most cathartic to date!

So you say you want to sit on MY cloud. The view, you say, is rainbows and bluebirds. I understand you hate your polyester, Dishwasher safe, blue light special cloud. It is weak, sagging under the weight of your expectations. It is no longer fluffy, no longer billowy, no longer white. It is empty and dingy and flat. Like your soul. You can't see the best part of my cloud because it is on the inside, Where it is built from the sweat of a hundred strong women like me. Where the walls glisten from the tears shed as others like yourself tried to steal our cloud's glory. But like this cloud, though we look soft and billowy, we are steel, cursing forth our thunder and glaring bolts of lightning to protect ourselves and our own. My cloud is high now, but it has had its lows. Where were you when others avoided and mocked us as nothing more than valley fog? When the view consisted of puddles of want and winds of despair? Did you once offer me a seat on your cloud? Did you give me a hand up? Or were you too busy looking down on me? So excuse me if I block your sun, ruin your picnic, cancel your flight. But I will never ignore you. Come closer and I will whisper a message in your ear: HEY, YOU, GET OFF OF MY CLOUD!!!!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 4/17/2018 7:02:00 PM
A fun poem, Cindi. Well done.
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Date: 3/1/2016 11:08:00 AM
Strong write Cindi.
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Date: 7/1/2015 11:19:00 AM
Such a great masterpiece. I love it!
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Date: 6/19/2015 6:56:00 AM
Stunning, Strong and very well said. You've passed the test... Stay Blessed.
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Date: 6/18/2015 11:36:00 PM
Cindi, Congratulations on your cloud win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 6/18/2015 10:29:00 PM
The last line reminds me of a song by the Rolling Stones. This is a well written, evocative poem. It holds one's attention throughout. Good job! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 6/18/2015 2:59:00 PM
Congrats on your win on a work with an unusual topic..Sara
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Date: 6/16/2015 11:09:00 PM
Love it, Cindi, you did a wonderful job on these pen. Congratulations on your wonderful win. 7 +++++Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/16/2015 9:38:00 PM
This was freaking awesome Cindi, I like the simple fact it's all inside you. Thank you so much for joining my contest:), Congratulations on a poem well done. Thank you for entering my CLOUD contest. Luv SKAT
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Date: 6/16/2015 1:24:00 PM
Hello Cindi!! A marvelous write indeed!! Your last verse pulls the all the narrative together at the end. Enjoyed this one!! A "7" for sure. Best Always, Gary
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Date: 6/16/2015 1:02:00 PM
I am in tune with you and it gets an AMEN +7 from me. God Bless. D.
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Date: 6/16/2015 6:24:00 AM
I will never think of clouds the same way again :)
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Date: 6/16/2015 2:45:00 AM
A little bitter but makes for a good subject.
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Date: 6/15/2015 7:13:00 PM
Hi Cindi: The yin and yang in the form of a cloud. Well done, my compliments!
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Cindi Rockwell
Date: 6/15/2015 7:26:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 6/15/2015 5:56:00 PM
I get it. Applicable to so many situations in life.
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Cindi Rockwell
Date: 6/15/2015 7:27:00 PM
Thanks!
Date: 6/15/2015 3:25:00 PM
My cloud is high now, but it has had its lows. I really like this line. It certainly evokes a simple image of our lives. You know I agree with you it gets awfully uncomfortable when there is too many people on my cloud.
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Cindi Rockwell
Date: 6/15/2015 7:28:00 PM
Thank you! I always say when I retire, I want a "cloud" with no guest rooms! Haha!
Date: 6/15/2015 3:25:00 PM
excellent piece cindi love the imaginary used beautifully painted pen
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Cindi Rockwell
Date: 6/15/2015 7:28:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 6/15/2015 2:28:00 PM
I suspect you were listening to The Rolling Stones when writing this interesting piece, or at least are a fan of the band. Nice imagery and beautifully written. Thanks for sharing.
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Cindi Rockwell
Date: 6/15/2015 7:29:00 PM
Thank you, Charles!
Date: 6/15/2015 1:31:00 PM
Beautiful.
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Date: 6/15/2015 12:47:00 PM
All I can say is this is very good. I love the images and the flow
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Date: 6/15/2015 11:42:00 AM
Now this seemed to be a fun exercise---love your imagery....words spoke a lot to me too! ...didee
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Date: 6/15/2015 11:36:00 AM
Enjoying your poetry Cindi ... Welcome to lifetime membership. ~J~
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Date: 6/15/2015 11:15:00 AM
Cindy this is fabulous. Keep it up!
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Date: 6/15/2015 12:16:00 AM
I love it. Deep. Three snaps for you. Snap, snap, snap.
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Date: 6/12/2015 12:38:00 AM
LOL, Cindi, I love the title. This has awesome slam lines. Thank you for raining on my parade. That was you right... LOL...Just kidding.... A super 7... and a fav. I wonder if anyone else is fav-ing the cloud poems. I like everything about this cloud, especially the flat cloud look.... HUGS ~LINDA~
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Cindi Rockwell
Date: 6/12/2015 9:34:00 AM
Thank you for the idea! Had so much fun writing it and found I need to get some slams off my back!

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