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KILLER ON THE LOOSE

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A new Etheree Poem Any Theme Contest. Sponsored by Tania Kitchin 02/20/25

FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST

I abhor the way that you’ve silently stalked me in my house I have begged you to leave But you steadfastly refused I’ve just found you in my bedroom I’m rooted to the spot in terror And yell so loudly my son rushes in Help! I scream. My son looks At my white face. He bravely squares up, corners the intruder then pounces like a cat. “Gotcha”! He says in triumph As he captures the small spider “You are safe to move again now mum” How I hate being arachnid phobic!

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/4/2025 6:57:00 AM

Dropping by to say congratulations on your winning work. So nice to see it in the winners' list. Way to go. I like the set up and then the change in directions. Sara K

Tania Kitchin

Date: 3/2/2025 5:28:00 AM

Jan, I enjoyed your poem and I dislike spiders too. Congratulations on your first place win.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 12:02:00 PM

Thanks so much Tania, I am beyond thrilled with my placement:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/25/2025 6:42:00 PM

You had me there, Jan. Arachnophobia is no laughing matter. I've missed your visits. Hope all is well.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 12:01:00 PM

thanks Eileen, yes all is good sweet lady. I think of you often and the fun times when Darren Watson was on the site - how I miss his support and friendship:-) hugs Jan xx

Yolanda Nicholsen

Date: 2/25/2025 1:45:00 PM

This is indeed a totally fun write.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:59:00 AM

thanks Yolanda:-) hugs Jan xx

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 2/23/2025 12:14:00 PM

Your ethereal makes an interesting pattern. I'm happy that your son saved you. In my eyes, they are cute, but I realize that cute is crazy. Originality is well penned in your poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:58:00 AM

Thankfully it is pure fiction Hilda:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/23/2025 3:19:00 AM

Shall we hang him? Great two Etheree. Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:58:00 AM

thanks Victor, he does like hanging from the ceiling I guess:-) hugs Jan xx

Joe Maverick

Date: 2/22/2025 12:51:00 PM

An arach-nicking poem.' As i'm going.' Wracking Stuff it does sound tough.'

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:57:00 AM

thanks Joe:-) hugs Jan xx

Marinus Jansen

Date: 2/21/2025 4:39:00 PM

Picture perfect! Smiling broadly. Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:57:00 AM

thanks so much Marinus:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 2/21/2025 10:21:00 AM

A fantastic job of building the suspense and then a bit of humor at the surprise ending.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:57:00 AM

thanks Jerry, i do like a twist at the end of a poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/21/2025 10:13:00 AM

LOL!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2025 11:56:00 AM

thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/21/2025 7:27:00 AM

Dear Jan, This gripped me, your fear, the helplessness, the sheer invasion of space. And then, the relief, the small but mighty victory by your son. It’s raw, real, and I felt every pulse of it. In other words Excellent! Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Jan Allison
Date: 2/21/2025 7:49:00 AM

Thanks Daniel, thankfully it is just a ficitional poem but my hubby does remove a spider if it wants to share my bath lol. it was fun to build up the suspense and then have an unexpected but happy ending! hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/21/2025 6:59:00 AM

:))) ... a brave rescuer ... - Best wishes in the contest - Have a lovely weekend, Jan :) - hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 2/21/2025 7:06:00 AM

It's pretty much fictional Anne- Lise but hubby does remove them if one is in the bath lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 2/20/2025 6:01:00 PM

Good job on this difficult form, Jan. The most dangerous spiders where I live re black Widows, which appear in summer months. Dangerous because they're toxic. / Maurice

Jan Allison
Date: 2/21/2025 7:05:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Maurice, thankfully I don't think we have any venomous spiders on our little Island and I only get hubby to remove one if it is in the bath as i dont like sharing lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Margaret Foster

Date: 2/20/2025 5:45:00 PM

Lucky for you, your son was home. Hope it wasn’t a redback. Nice work on the form Jan. Good luck in the contest..

Jan Allison
Date: 2/20/2025 5:52:00 PM

It's pure fiction Margaret and i dent think we have any venomous spiders on our Island - i couldn't live anywhere that did lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Terry Flood

Date: 2/20/2025 4:32:00 PM

Ha ha… I’m the ‘spider man’ in our house. I don’t mind having to catch the flaming things… but the spandex suit really chafes! Good luck in the contest, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/20/2025 4:50:00 PM

ha ha ha you crease me up with your comments Terry! hugs Jan xx