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Kids In the Park

As happy swing-set riders join the skating board sliders the more affluent children rode on the Merry-Go-Round. With scraped shins and scratched up knees we would climb the tallest trees and dirty our new sneakers playing on the muddy ground. We'd build castles in the sand with plastic buckets in hand, a league of superheroes that dreamed of becoming kings. Swapping marbles made of glass we'd form whistles out of grass, and drank gallons of Kool-Aid while doing summery things. Jeans covered in green grass stains we'd walk the tracks between trains, and often, we'd go fishing in the large pond in the park. We'd get bronzed from the sun running around having fun and playing hide-and-go-seek till it started to get dark. (Rhyme) 8/5/2018
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Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 4:11 PM
Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara
Pinet Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 4:40 PM
Thank you Sara, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Duet Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 12:33 PM
I like your added stanzas, Emile...so typical. Kids and Kool-Aid, marbles and sand castles. Perfect! And, congrats on your high placement in the contest.
Pinet Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 2:04 PM
Thanks Carole, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Roper Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 3:02 PM
Love your addition to Charlie's poem, Emile...Congratulations on your 2nd place win!
Pinet Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 4:12 PM
Thanks Eve, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Pappadogiannis Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 1:44 PM
Congrats on your win Emile. Your stanza blended in perfectly :)
Pinet Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 2:13 PM
Thanks Francesca, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Messina Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 7:21 AM
Emile, this is great! I absolutely love it. A fave for sure. I couldn't have wrote it any better. Thank you for entering my contest and what a pleasure to read. Congratulations on your win my good friend. All the best, Charlie
Pinet Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 7:39 AM
Thanks so much Charlie, I appreciate the win and your comments my friend, Emile.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 3:36 AM
Congratulations, Emile on your win. Great rhyme.
Pinet Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 7:39 AM
Thanks Subimal, as always I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Watson Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 9:48 AM
Hi Emile I think you've italicized 2 verses and I believe that only one verse is allowed so I wouldn't wish this to disqualify you. Best wishes Wendy
Pinet Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 10:00 AM
Thanks Wendy, but in order to follow the rhyme scheme in the original poem it requires two verses...if I'm disqualified...so be it, Emile.
Gauthier Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 9:17 AM
Lovely, Emile. Very successful collaboration.
Pinet Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 9:28 AM
Thanks Line, as always I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
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