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Just a Cliche

Although it's a well worn cliche, there is something soothing in the thought of lying in bed listening to rain. Last night I was front row in a symphony. An adagio of soft fall, murmurings on a metal roof and whispers running along gutters. Calm in the tempo of raindrops, muted gargles and gulps echoed inside the throats of downpipes. Then everything changed. A quickening pace heralded heavy rain and hailstones falling in a roar of wind. Lightning flashed behind curtains, thunder drew nearer, giant, swollen bags of noise burst to come crashing down, rattling windows and sending the spill rushing through doorways into tense rooms. Heaven unleashed its might, as if trying to tear itself away from this world, as it still does, weighted with words and held here on a page, longing to lift into song with drum rolls and tremble in a crescendo fit for a thousand voices, straining to break free and fly somewhere else, finding itself stuck in a poem, slowly drifting towards sleep and oblivion.

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Date: 4/3/2024 4:37:00 PM
a well worn cliche, maybe...but the way your described the soft symphony of rainfall was mesmerizing. The quickening pace reminded me of the drums and other percussion instruments in a symphony. The real gem of your poem was the last verse...I felt breathless at the subtle and graceful manner in which you transcended into writing poetry. Brilliant I say! Have a great evening, Sara
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Paul Willason
Date: 4/4/2024 7:42:00 PM
Viewed as a challenge...to make something of a cliche...thankyou dear Sara for giving me some comfort that I may have succeeded in the challenge. The last stanza shaped itself without direction, came upon me as if this was the real, but hidden, driver for the poem. Poetry is always a delicious mystery to me...I keep coming back to the table. Take care dear Sara. Thanks.
Date: 4/3/2024 7:31:00 AM
The murmurings of a gentle rain are soothing to me as well. Love the comparison to an orchestra's symphony. I was married to a musical composer, so I learned the importance of highs and lows... changes in rhythm. It's an experience like being thunderstruck.
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Paul Willason
Date: 4/4/2024 7:33:00 PM
I think there is a musical element in poetry...apart from the rhythms and beat...like music there is that special something that transcends the words...communicates directly at the level of feeling and emotions. You have a trained ear as always...thanks my friend.

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