Journey

Caught in the whirl of the wind Fought with the wilds of the west As I looked for the light that has dimmed I reached out till my sight found my quest Alas! Wretched am I who has sinned! Thinking I’m better than best. Humbling myself for your grace Hoping this pain’s not in vain With the tears of my shame on my face I forsake all the fame I have gain’d For the love and my savior’s embrace Now, I will dance in the rain. 16 July 2015 Isaiah Zerbt's Quatrets

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Lycia Harding

Date: 8/2/2015 10:33:00 PM

Excellent write, Kim! Totally true to form. Congrats on your win. xoxo

Len Gasun

Date: 8/1/2015 4:13:00 AM

This is n outstanding winning piece my dear friend, Kim. Many Warm Congrats on your well-deserved top win! I'm so glad to meet another very talented Filipino poet like you! Soo proud of you too, my very dear friend Kim. Mabuhay! love lots and biggest hug, Leonora

Kari Mitchell

Date: 7/31/2015 10:49:00 AM

Beautiful, Kim! True to life and and talent. This was a well-deserved win.

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/30/2015 2:41:00 PM

Congrats on your top win, Kim! Excellent :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/30/2015 1:16:00 AM

What a beauty Kim!Congrats on ur awesome winning work!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/29/2015 3:20:00 PM

Perfection indeed…Way to go with this win..Congrats!!Sara

Lee Carter

Date: 7/29/2015 2:35:00 PM

Congrats on your great win kim! ~lee

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/29/2015 6:47:00 AM

Mabuhay Kim!!!! Proud of you!!!go go go!!! Your poem love the feelings the message and just sincerity running in the lines!~Olive Eloisa

Jan Allison

Date: 7/29/2015 1:42:00 AM

wow what a journey Kim - love the flow and the last line finishes the journey to perfection - congrats on your top spot! hugs jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/22/2015 10:00:00 PM

This one sings out my friend. Deep and expressing the hope of forgiveness, the promise! A7 but easily a 10 IMHO.

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/22/2015 2:43:00 AM

In the rain you shall smile with face of love, as pain be cooled and passion free and good...you teach how a life's journey rewards the honest and devout Kim...J.A.B.

Aiyah Torres

Date: 7/20/2015 10:32:00 AM

girl, sure this journey would end in sweet success !! I added you in my fave list ... Idol !!! :O)) you're soooo great! ^_^

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 7/18/2015 3:37:00 AM

What a lovely write Kim, all for the sake of love. Lol.....excellent.......A.M.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 7/17/2015 7:20:00 PM

Incredible peace!! Repentance is so freeing! That last line is beautiful and relieving. I feel the joy in the journey of these words. Always, Laura

Noel Villarosa

Date: 7/17/2015 8:07:00 AM

A fitting theme for this contest. All in one, with a combination of power, gratitude and plain amazement. In just few words, but it flows in order with the captivating imagery and feelings that you just shared here, goodluck to you for this contest. 7 (^_^) Noel.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/17/2015 7:14:00 AM

Dancing in the light of truth with an unparalleled poetic verse! Wonderful dear, Kim!

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/17/2015 2:05:00 AM

G'day Kim... hey, what a beaut flowing poem you have written; well done and all the best - Lindsay

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/16/2015 7:21:00 PM

an ace up on your sleeves, kim... rhythmic and wonderfully quilled.. atta girl!.. huggs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2015 7:03:00 PM

I knew right away this was for Isaiah's contest (before seeing the bottom)because as I was reading it, I could FEEL the meter he asked from us. You are one of the few I see that has done it with his meter. VERY well done and I think you have a winner here.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/16/2015 4:04:00 PM

I see my mom has excellent taste in poetry. I enjoyed it as well Kim.

Mama Bear

Date: 7/16/2015 3:09:00 PM

Life is a wonderful journey given to us by God and the wise always follow the path Well done my dear Good luck Hugs Edith

Tim Smith

Date: 7/16/2015 2:41:00 PM

I do believe we should humble ourselves... This should soar high in the contest.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/16/2015 2:25:00 PM

- A wonderful poem, dear Kim ........ dance happily :) - I wish you good luck in the contest! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/16/2015 1:59:00 PM

Kim, this is just beautiful! I enjoyed the flow of this write. There's skill and beauty within your pen.Excellent job! Good luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/16/2015 1:33:00 PM

Wonderfully done! magnificently penned, best of luck in the contest !!