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Renga was a popular poetry format in Old Japan, and was actually the precursor to haiku. A renga poem is composed by two or more poets, each taking tutrns adding two or three-line verses to the poem. Stretching however long you wish: from a dozen verses to several hundred. The idea is to create the element of change, by every two verses adjacent verses being connected in some fashion, while NOT being connected to the verse written before THAT. Renga also goes through all the seasons.

 

To better understand this concept, read this link that I followed through. It's actually considered a "poetry game" ... http://www.wikihow.com/Play-Haikai-(Collaborative-Poetry-Game)

 

Can you name the connections between two adjacent verses (there's also a connection between the first and last verses))

A collaborative poem, written in renga format, or "linked-verse", by Timothy Hicks and Jesse Whitehead. Verses in normal font are by me. Verses in italic are by Jesse Whitehead. January jest drawing mustaches in the newspaper coffee to warm the hands walking the railroad refusing to stay put a child's balloon spring in her step red moon overhead has dusk come already? the field of tulips seem to say unwavering and gentle strong as stone mountain peaks wind through summer meadows a tender caress lying there still a heart-shaped mark steady rhythm ebb of the tide broken shells spiraling earthward the last golden leaf fading in and out memories sweetly touched a dancing flame burning through pages another x on the calendar NOTE: This was my first attempt at a Renga poem, written in collaboration, with one of my best friends from Idaho, Jesse Whitehead. He's one of the few friends of mine whom I could discuss writing with. Though he typically writes fiction and stories, rather than poetry, he was willing to give this poetry format a go; and to my knowledge this was his first time writing poetry. It's a fun little challenge that I hope you all will give a try!

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Date: 6/25/2016 7:50:00 AM
Definately worth coming back to r ad this one!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/28/2016 10:25:00 PM
Thanks for the re-read, my friend ... much appreciated :)
Date: 6/5/2016 7:55:00 PM
Very unique , will have to give this a try! :)
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 9:22:00 PM
Thanks again, Art! I hope you do :)
Date: 6/5/2016 6:43:00 PM
This was certainly a lovely composition to read from the two of you...very dreamlike and abstract- can take you to various places. I really like poems like these...you guys did a lovely job. Thanks for sharing! Always, Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 9:22:00 PM
Thanks, Laura! It was rather abstract, come to think of it ... it was fun because neither of us knew where it was going. We just knew we were having fun.
Date: 6/2/2016 9:23:00 AM
I reworked my poem and entered it based on Andrea's urging. I will have to give this from a chance when time permits. Have a great day Timothy.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 8:54:00 PM
Thanks for participating in my contest ... should have the results posted up in a couple days, I hope. Hope you'll give the Renga a go sometime :)
Date: 6/2/2016 1:05:00 AM
A pretty composed poem, relish the read......love.......A.M.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 8:44:00 PM
Thanks Afolabi! Nice to meet you.
Date: 6/1/2016 8:00:00 AM
Good morning Timothy. Your contest inspired a poem. Unfortunately my poem is to long for your contest. I do however thank you for the inspiration.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 8:32:00 PM
Glad to inspire, Richard ... thanks for letting me know!
Date: 5/31/2016 3:22:00 PM
It's got some beautiful lines from both of you, but still not sure what the form is. Does it fit a certain syllable count? Or just short responses to what each other is saying. Awesome to read.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 8:19:00 PM
Hey Andrea. I'd like to write a blog about this soon, so I can explain it more in depth ... I will say that there is a MAX amount of syllables, but no minimum. It's basically responses to one another.
Date: 5/30/2016 10:08:00 PM
Timothy, you did well for a first attempt. Awesome for a collaboration... LINDA
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 7:01:00 PM
Thanks Linda!
Date: 5/29/2016 7:31:00 PM
I like it Timothy. Is there a sylable count to follow?
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 6:31:00 PM
Thanks Richard. There is (sort of) a syllable count. A very lose rule. The three-line verses are 17 syllables MAX, and the two line verses are 14 syllables MAX ... but they can be as short as you like, and they often are.
Date: 5/29/2016 6:38:00 PM
Hi Timothy, I quite enjoyed this, a great collaboration, and great insight to this form, I did not know!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 6:25:00 PM
Thanks Art ... it's a very fun little game, where the rules are up to you, and can go in very unexpected directions!
Date: 5/29/2016 9:00:00 AM
Have heard of Renga, but never tried it. Your co-write ( a first attempt for both) is cleverly done. Yes, there are connections, such as the 'cold' in first & second; moon and balloon shape, etc. // paul
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 6:17:00 PM
Very observant, Paul. It's a fun little game, that tests out the imagination ...
Date: 5/29/2016 6:44:00 AM
I'm inspired ;)
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 6:12:00 PM
Looking forward to that collaboration my friend :D
Date: 5/28/2016 3:48:00 PM
This is just superb!! It's so simple and beautiful.. Such a lovely form too!! :) :)
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 6:06:00 PM
Thanks Sneha! You are very kind :)
Date: 5/28/2016 2:21:00 PM
what a fascinating form you chose for a collaboration - great work Timothy and Jesse:-) hugs Jan xx
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 5:56:00 PM
Thanks Jan!
Date: 5/28/2016 1:29:00 PM
Tim, for a first time effort this is superb ! Congrats to you and Jesse. I tried to collaborate with a friend but nothing materialised, more my fault due to my current health scare !
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/5/2016 5:33:00 PM
Thanks Lenny. I hope you try it yet again when your mind is able to find some peace ... I know sudden life-changes do weird things on the muse!

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