Itty Bitty Spring

snowy daffodils bend under the chill blanket sunrise uncovers The radiators still ping April is disguised as March

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Black Eyed Susan

Date: 12/3/2014 11:34:00 AM

Nice use of sound in this and good ending. Just wanted to say hi and thanks for the inspiration for my last haibun - I was going to enter it in your contest here, but liked it so much I gave Haibun Today a whirl. I'm surprised they took it, but grateful. Thanks for the inspiration!

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 4/21/2014 5:57:00 AM

Our April too is disguised as march, but that's a good thing. A well penned enchanting read.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/19/2014 9:28:00 PM

Dang, why wasn't this one in my contest? I LOVE this, Debs!!!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/18/2014 2:31:00 AM

this is so clever and a cute title....let's hope Springs blossoms for real soon. Hugs, SuZ

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/17/2014 7:25:00 AM

Your last line is the grand finale for this lovely itty bitty. I sure hope it warms up for you, Debbie. We are nice and warm in these parts....a bit cloudy today, but can't complain about that. Hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/17/2014 5:18:00 AM

- The spring comes ...... - If we had no winter, the spring would not have been so lovely :))) - Luck in contest, Debbie ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)