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It’s raining-Seijaku

Written: July 28, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There will be rainfall soon Quietude is how we spot roots of creative impulse Its fragrance permeates the air There is a brief pause in the music There is also motionlessness in dancing I draw deeper breaths Yoga seeks self-awareness and focus  We must learn how to quiet our minds. Stifling heat is gone I relish the fluky summer shower Focus your prayers solely on God No punter thoughts of you Oh, restless saffron, a hermit What are you hoping to gain? You are doomed! How do we create a wagerer world? Unless we improve ourselves. A slow, steady trickle Misty droplets trickle down Cool air dispels the heat Unraveled as if time forgot Trees run through Haze Thank you for respecting us You maintain your balance When riches long for a palace I crave meadows As fields tend to be evasive Things will deteriorate with time As the world around us crumbles. I cannot rescue you from shadows An unidentified person appears hungry What can we observe? We don't fathom where we're going When the only thing left is a dream, When does it first start to rain? In a world where clouds never break, Maybe I run till I'm breathless Despite this, I will sustain my mask Stars illuminate the sky Kids wonder why So, abide by them with stories and explanations of why.

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Date: 8/24/2024 10:46:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Sotto Poet! lovely poetry with meaningful healings!
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Date: 8/24/2024 9:30:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading about your "It's raining-Seijaku" write again. A wonderful ending. Have a great day/weekend writing away.......................
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Date: 8/24/2024 6:52:00 AM
Good to see you still somewhere on soup, congrats dr sotto! Hope you are doing ok! Sending you light
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Date: 8/24/2024 5:31:00 AM
'There is also motionlessness in dancing/I cannot rescue you from shadows' so beautiful. congratulations dear poet.
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Date: 8/24/2024 4:28:00 AM
You captured the essence of the theme really well and showcase a good message in your poem.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 8/4/2024 2:57:00 PM
Rain is a steady, dependable gift that seems to cleanse the earth. I like your poem of gratitude. Enjoy the coming cooldown.
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Date: 7/30/2024 12:07:00 PM
I enjoyed reading about your "It's raining-Seijaku" write. Great Ending... "Good Luck" We both did this one.  Have a great/fun day writing away...........
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Date: 7/30/2024 12:03:00 PM
Bravo. All the ingredients of a great poem: metaphors, alliteration and great ideas. Best for a win.
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Date: 7/30/2024 11:59:00 AM
This is beautiful. I loved the last stanza. "In a world where clouds never break, Maybe I run till I'm breathless Despite this, I will sustain my mask Stars illuminate the sky Kids wonder why So, abide by them with stories and explanations of why." Wow...
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Date: 7/29/2024 6:31:00 AM
Hello Sotto, Oh, so well expressed! I loved the way you layed out the secret to life and finding peace and self-awareness amidst life's chaos and challenges. As part of my counseling world, I teach the importance of quieting the mind, focusing on personal growth, and seeking solace in simple natural moments like a summer shower. I loved reading this, Sotto! - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 7/28/2024 1:38:00 PM
Wonderful! I love your free verse poems… Quietude is how we spot roots of creative impulse Its fragrance permeates the air… I relish the fluky summer shower… When the only thing left is a dream, When does it first start to rain? In a world where clouds never break, Maybe I run till I'm breathless (much emotion in these lines) Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 7/28/2024 11:54:00 AM
What a deeply moving poem so eloquently presented with exquisite metaphors and descriptive diction dr sotto! I think silent one will love this one how youv painted imagery and also written one that is soulfully moving ! I love “ When riches long for a palace I crave meadows As fields tend to be evasive Things will deteriorate with time As the world around us crumbles.” Hits so strong and emanates so much depth in the most flawless rhythm! You do free verse’s very well. Best wishes!
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