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This poem is an example for my current contest, 'It's a part of me - life and the perceptions and philosophies you hold.'

I wanted to use examples of Juxtaposition in this poem.  I hope the reader can identify where it has been used.

 

 

Our lives are not immune to the impact of time, nor is our mind between the tensions of love and hate. That's why I curse this wanderlust heart - still searching for that wandering star. without a guide - without a love to call my own. I try not to look back, but sometimes certain scents, remind me of things that saw me as a minority. A summer heart misplaced in winter's wickedness, a child frozen in the passages of a stolen childhood. Ingredients of my life are a juxtaposition of flavours, finding purity among diseased hearts, fighting against principles of corrupt minds and I hurt nobody - until they pushed me, it was never about the physical - but the mental. Silence is different in adolescence - suppressed into a protective bubble, you reject the harshness of existence. My small hands could not hold the burdens, so I was mute as demons slayed my father, his anger drowning my brothers into darkness. Tears of my mother, dehydrated my soul, so I grew like a tree with broken branches - sometimes naked, sometimes an abundance of green. Even in an obscure world of nightmares, my heart was a light bulb, full of dreams - but misplaced in a place of misunderstanding. I adopted silence in the violence, because I struggled with reality's fabrications. Fatherless, I found acceptance in the war on the streets, where love was poison, but hate brought prosperity. Only surviving due to my father's name, yet I knew it was an unwinnable game. My hands were pacifying guns, so I learned to exist without bullets. I was a black sheep in a strange white herd, opposing shepherds who couldn't tolerate me. A clean soul in a dirty social order - a peaceful heart seeking a place to call home. Silence is a choice in adulthood. I used to ignore the pain from unhealed wounds, but today the inner child screams and shouts, because oppressors can no longer mute my tongue. Death taught me not to be bitter, stubborn fingers how to bleed ink onto paper - showing compassion in an ugly world. If life was so simple, we wouldn't look at it differently. Our perceptions are based on what we have learned, what was, what is to come and what we search for. Where you end up depends on how you deal with the past.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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Date: 12/11/2023 11:04:00 AM
Excellent poem!
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Date: 4/9/2022 7:36:00 AM
I love the revealing of your heart and soul here SO. You have described the silence so poignantly and the wounds of your soul in detail that grabs at my heartstrings . Your loving heart is apparent here and your ability to analyze your past is profound . A fav for me . Thank you for being so raw and honest and real . You shine ! Susan :)
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Date: 5/8/2021 1:37:00 AM
Such a profound insightful rendering of ones soul. Touched me deeply my poetic friend! Adding this to my favorite list.
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Date: 3/31/2021 11:37:00 AM
This piece pulls the reader in, anxious to see the story unfold between the captivating lines. Intriguing and wonderfully written.
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Date: 12/1/2020 4:22:00 PM
Dear Friend, Such a profound, spiritual, intellectually and emotionally brilliant piece of writing! True that I have to read it several times to grasp all the thoughts and feelings - and that's what I will. All the lines have so much depth using well-crafted vocabulary - magnificent!
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Date: 11/25/2020 11:25:00 AM
Love the last three stanzas and last line of this. Well done.
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Silent One
Date: 11/26/2020 6:41:00 AM
Thank you..
Date: 11/23/2020 9:23:00 AM
Wonderful Silent One. I wish I could express such deep thoughts to delve into the mind and the soul.... an express it so very well. Bravo!!!
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Silent One
Date: 11/23/2020 1:17:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 11/22/2020 5:19:00 PM
SO, you're such a great poet, good grief! How magnificent is this write? WOW! Instant FAVE.
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Silent One
Date: 11/23/2020 1:18:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 11/22/2020 10:59:00 AM
Silent. one of the best poems ever posted on these pages! brilliant. I read several times to grasp its depth! It was a journey in to my own self!! Congrats on creating such a fine poem!
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Silent One
Date: 11/23/2020 1:18:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 11/21/2020 1:03:00 PM
Such elegant intellectual musing, and profound emotional introspection, SO. An amethyst poetic gem. Such is the color of your quill reign. I consider you a crown Prince of poetry. Love and peace always.
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Silent One
Date: 11/23/2020 1:18:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 11/21/2020 1:47:00 AM
"I grew like a tree with broken branches" will you stop it already...WOW, WOW, and WOW How many places can you break my heart? I write about things hope friends don't assume are about me. Hope this is. your awareness of others, but if this is a reflection of your life... I completely know and feel your emotions. FANTASTIC!!!!!!
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Silent One
Date: 11/21/2020 4:00:00 AM
Thank you.. This is very much a part of me...
Date: 11/19/2020 5:01:00 PM
'I adopted silence in the violence' -I can relate to this. Such a deep write !
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:12:00 AM
Thank you..
Date: 11/19/2020 8:48:00 AM
Simply wow!
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:14:00 AM
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Date: 11/19/2020 1:42:00 AM
Poetry at its best, SO, your mind shines brilliantly with such thought provoking ideas:)
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:14:00 AM
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Date: 11/19/2020 1:14:00 AM
what can I say about this poem- nothing else; just brilliant piece; I enjoyed really this; thanks for sharing
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:15:00 AM
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Date: 11/18/2020 8:19:00 PM
If life was so simple, we wouldn't look at it differently. Our perceptions are based on what we have learned, what was, what is to come and what we search for..... So true.
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:12:00 AM
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Date: 11/18/2020 12:23:00 PM
Hello Silent One, yes where we end up depends on how we deal with the past. I have healed from my past pains. Yet I will never know about my last hurt from my dead husband that still bothers me. Yet I have moved on. Ready to begin a new. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 11/20/2020 12:14:00 PM
Hello Silent One it is for the best. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:12:00 AM
Thank you.. I am glad you have moved on, it is for the best..
Date: 11/18/2020 10:57:00 AM
WoW! Silent, You continue to wow me with your pen. I'm in all of your talent. I am moved by you sharing who you are, and what you've gone through. I agree, who we are and our perceptions ( what we believe in) is shaped by our upbringing and what we were taught. Your final line sums up this outstanding write perfectly. Excellent job! PS, this is a good(excellent) example, the for the contest, but you have set the bar real high:-)Alexis
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:12:00 AM
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Date: 11/18/2020 9:40:00 AM
This is so moving, deep and soulful. Life is full of struggles that we may not even understand. Sometimes, we have to take a stand and learn. Thank you for sharing.
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Silent One
Date: 11/20/2020 8:12:00 AM
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Date: 11/17/2020 9:03:00 PM
Thank you for your kind word on my page. Im very much humbled because look at this poem! You are such an incredible writer. Every line is a punch line.
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Silent One
Date: 11/18/2020 5:58:00 AM
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Date: 11/17/2020 7:08:00 PM
As ever, your poetry is poignant beyond words, from the message to the eternally shifting forms that bring new beauty to the message itself.
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Silent One
Date: 11/18/2020 5:58:00 AM
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Date: 11/17/2020 5:21:00 PM
Thanks for sharing this, especially your concluding words: "Where you end up depends on how you deal with the past." Such wisdom helps me in my reaching-out endeavours, by the grace of the Lord. God bless you.
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Silent One
Date: 11/18/2020 6:02:00 AM
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Date: 11/17/2020 1:50:00 PM
A good very last line. Enjoyed reading your work. Life doesn't always seem fair or right but it will all balance out if we do what is right. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Silent One
Date: 11/18/2020 6:02:00 AM
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Date: 11/17/2020 11:10:00 AM
This is breathtaking my dear friend, Wow, I applaud you and your amazing talent, a fave for sure. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Silent One
Date: 11/17/2020 1:13:00 PM
Thank you, glad you liked it..
Date: 11/17/2020 4:38:00 AM
Wow I'm lost for words for once. incredible writing. up there with the very best. well done.
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Silent One
Date: 11/17/2020 1:15:00 PM
Thank you..
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