It Was Dark - Poem To Keep You Awake Contest

It was dark in the Air Raid Shelter
Water underfoot
Candles had long since extinguished
But the battle raged  all night

Mrs Brown
She's the nosey one
Had peeked though a chink
Sky red with fire cant see anyone

A child started whimpering
Are we  going to die
The words started off a chorus
Of cries and shouts "why"

Was a long night
Noise was horrendous
Not knowing was worse
Was fire all round us?

Did we have a chance
Then a lone voice started to sing
Slowly we all joined in
"We'll meet again" echoing

At last the door opened
Daylight blinded us
We were still alive
Our homes were a mess

Then I awoke in a state of trembling fear
Thinking of loved ones lost in the war

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 6/5/2013 2:45:00 AM
Seren, I've actually spent time in bomb shelters in Lebanon while bombs were falling on campus. A fire started and my dad and brothers had to go out during the shelling to put it out. Very real...brought vivid memories! Thanks for sharing this poem, and for your love post on my work. God bless.
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Date: 6/6/2013 4:33:00 PM
Sorry if it brought back bad memories Eileen, thanks for stopping and commenting ...Seren
Date: 6/4/2013 9:15:00 AM
Had me hooked!!! Damn. Excellent job!
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Date: 6/6/2013 4:32:00 PM
Thank you Drake...Seren
Date: 6/3/2013 9:58:00 AM
Like this one sass it brings home what it must have been like xx
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/3/2013 4:32:00 PM
thank you Mandy ...Seren
Date: 6/2/2013 10:39:00 AM
Very nice, potent, Seren! ... Terry
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/2/2013 10:44:00 AM
Oops thank you
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/2/2013 10:42:00 AM
Thanl u Terry ... Seren
Date: 6/2/2013 8:14:00 AM
Seren this is superb gl in contest Shadow
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/2/2013 10:11:00 AM
Thank you so much Shadow, ....Seren
Date: 6/2/2013 5:34:00 AM
Wow, this is quite an emotional one my friend! I am in awe of the intensity of this incredible poem Seren! You have captured the art of trying to escape the atrocities of war! Then to find their lives a mess due to it must be saddening, but seeing that they all survived was inspirational! What a spectacular piece, such a tremendous poem, Great Work!!
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/2/2013 10:13:00 AM
Thanks Russell, watched an old warfilm and got the idea....Seren...
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