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~ First Place ~
Premiere Contest: It Happened On A Rainy Night - Collaboration
Sponsor: Charles Messina

(first stanza by Charles Messina)

September 4, 2023
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Foggy mists engulfed the bright
When raindrops fell throughout the night
The lampposts glowed at midnights dark
When sweethearts kissed at Lover’s Park

The fluid rhythms, realm of rain
Where lamplight’s stream did gild the lane
Wet leaves dripped dreams from tinseled trees
And pulses flowed like rolling seas

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Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 1/3/2024 6:40:00 AM

Superb write!! These two lines in particular Wet leaves dripped dreams from tinseled trees And pulses flowed like rolling seas Great poetry!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 1/4/2024 6:49:00 PM

Dear Krish, thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful comments. Glad to know which lines you particularly enjoyed. Charlie's inspiring verse led the way for a wonderful collaboration. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lisa Ricci

Date: 10/23/2023 4:02:00 AM

Dear Susan. Good Morning. Please allow me to let your entry stand because there is nothing I could add and if I critiqued this entry it would diminish it and I would never want to do that. This is poetry in the truest fashion. Be proud of your execution. Thank you once again for sharing your talent. Have a wonderful morning and day. Blessings always (smile)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/2/2023 9:54:00 AM

Dear Lisa, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your beautiful comments. Life obligations have kept me very busy lately and internet issues have also intruded to keep me from adding my ingredients to the Soup. I am inspired by both your visit and your lovely thoughts. Thank you, my friend, for your precious time spent with my poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 10/13/2023 11:14:00 AM

Wow Susan, another win. Amazing and congratulations. I love all of your poems. Blessings

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/13/2023 6:09:00 PM

Dear Paghunda, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for your heartwarming words. I appreciate you and adore all of your poems too, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 10/7/2023 4:35:00 AM

This is an excellent addition to Charles Messina's introduction. In a way one could say that the two stanzas are seamless, yet, for one who well knows your technical abilities and writing style, the give-aways are definitely there, Susan (exp. the alliteration which is missing in 1st stanza). ~ Warn regards & Hugs // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/8/2023 9:05:00 AM

Dear Paul, I am so delighted by your uplifting response to my stanza in collaboration with Charlie's lovely verse. Nothing escapes your keen poetic eyes :) Indeed, my inspiring friend and mentor, you know my style and capabilities so very well. I relish your wonderful comments and heartwarming congrats! With gratitude, I continue to move forward in my poetic journey through the subtly of your gentle encouragements. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 10/7/2023 4:36:00 AM

Ohhhh and congratulations on yet another merited trophy!!

Ministryofdreams Daisy Silk

Date: 9/15/2023 11:15:00 PM

From the nightly raindrops to a ‘sweetheart kiss’ I'm certainly sure I could smell this realm of rain you described. Entrancing piece and congratulations desert Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/17/2023 8:46:00 AM

Dear Daisy Silk, both your gracious visit and and inspiring comments are wonderful to receive. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts and kind congrats with me. Your presence here is heartwarming. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/15/2023 5:09:00 AM

I am sorry my good friend, I see that my comment to this poem somehow is not here. I was sure I commented previously to this superbly crafted poem! Either it vanished or my mind is losing it. This is truly a beautifully deep creation, And a fav for me. God bless you.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/17/2023 8:44:00 AM

My good friend, both your gracious visit and and inspiring comments are a delight to receive. Thank you, Robert, for sharing your precious thoughts and for bestowing the honor of your fav upon my humble poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 9/14/2023 9:57:00 AM

Aw, this is just brilliant dearest Susan. "Wet leaves dripped dreams from tinseled trees"... so creative. A very well deserved win. Congratulations. How have you been my friend? Have missed you and your poems. I was not on here for long. Glad to read your inspiring ink again. Hugs... ~ Ani

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/17/2023 8:09:00 AM

Dearest Ani, my sweet friend, your shining spirit has been sorely missed. So happy to see you and receive your beautiful comments and kind congrats. They send my heart soaring! Like you, I was not here for a period of time but I'm glad to have time to be here once again. All is well here and I hope all is well with you too. Thank you once again, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Bill Baker

Date: 9/12/2023 4:47:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your Trophy win! Yeah!!! No surprise here. WTG Susan! Hugs, Bill

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2023 10:21:00 PM

Dear Bill, your return visit to my poem with your congrats is heartwarming. Thank you, for your thoughtfulness and kindness. Your friendship is held in my truest appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan.. your poet friend up north

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/11/2023 8:51:00 PM

So gorgeous. Congrats on the trophy win

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2023 11:25:00 AM

Dear Andrea, coming from a poetess of such a high caliber, I'm thrilled to receive your comment and kind congrats. Thank you my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/11/2023 1:46:00 AM

Excellent writing, Susan, congratulations:)

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:03:00 AM

Dear Joanna, thank you for the delight of your visit and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andy Chunn

Date: 9/9/2023 7:33:00 PM

Beautifully written Susan. Congrats on the win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/10/2023 7:46:00 AM

Thank you, Andy, for both your lovely thoughts and kind congrats. Your visit to my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Fading Star Silence

Date: 9/9/2023 10:04:00 AM

I’m so enthralled with the way your words ebb and flow, the beauty and grace in which you’ve woven your poem is a breathtaking read and feel from beginning to end..your poetry has spoken to my heart!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:32:00 AM

Dear Fading Star, I am enthralled by your lovely response to my poem. I'm so happy to know that my poem has spoken to your heart, the beauty of your comments has spoken to mine. Thank you for gracing my poem with your uplifting and shining spirit. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 9/9/2023 5:21:00 AM

The imagery and passion in this poem is breathtaking. Belated congratulations Susan on this lovely and most deserving of recognition poem.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:36:00 AM

Dear Nancy, thank you for gracing my poem with your beautiful comments and warm congrats. I am uplifted by your lovely spirit. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 9/9/2023 1:02:00 AM

A superb addition to Charles collaboration Susan, very romantic… Belle

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/10/2023 7:48:00 AM

Thank you, Belle, for your heartwarming comment. Your visit to my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Natasha L Scragg

Date: 9/9/2023 12:10:00 AM

Beautiful :-D huge congrats on your win :-D

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/10/2023 7:50:00 AM

Thank you, Natasha, for your kindness and warm congrats. Your visit to my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Roger Roger

Date: 9/8/2023 10:52:00 PM

Wonderful... Congratulations...

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/10/2023 7:49:00 AM

Thank you, Roger, for your kind congrats. Your visit to my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 9/8/2023 6:50:00 PM

Susan, This poem has everything, all the elements of continuity, rhythm, word choice, and especially great metaphors. Loved reading it and I know I will read it again. Lonna

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:50:00 AM

Dear Lonna, I am touched by the beauty of your comments. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. The luster of your words shine upon my poem like golden rays. I hold your gracious visit and kindness in my deepest appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tania Kitchin

Date: 9/8/2023 1:58:00 PM

Susan, congratulations on your trophy win, beautiful!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/10/2023 7:52:00 AM

Dear Tania, thank you for your heartwarming kindness and congrats. Your visit to my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Speaks Volumes

Date: 9/8/2023 12:20:00 PM

A wonderful collaboration Susan. Congratulations on a very well deserved win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/10/2023 7:56:00 AM

Dear SV, thank you for your heartwarming comment and kind congrats. Your visit to my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/8/2023 12:15:00 PM

Your contribution is replete with beautiful imagery. Great rhymes too. Best for a win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:46:00 AM

Dear Victor, thank you for gracing my poem with your golden presence. Your beautiful comments are held in my truest appreciation along with your soulful and beautiful poetry. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Lin Lane

Date: 9/8/2023 11:18:00 AM

That's quite a setting you've allowed the lovers to share with us. Congratulations, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:43:00 AM

Dear Lin, it's wonderful to see you, your visit is a delight! Thank you for your lovely comments and kind congrats. Your golden presence is ever appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Ink Empress

Date: 9/8/2023 11:04:00 AM

This is absolutely stunning, your way with pairing words like rolling seas, and rhymes that are so sublime, and those slight alliterations flowing in such beautiful rhythm, while also painting a passionate and soulful ambience so flawlessly. Well deserved win. Congratulations

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:41:00 AM

Dear Ink Empress, your gracious comments and kind congrats fill me with delight. I'm humbled and honored by your shining presence and precious thoughts. Thank you for gracing my poem and my heart with the poetic elegance of your insight. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/8/2023 10:54:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your collaboration flows like raindrops flowing from umbrellas or rooftops! Your creative talent falls like a gentle mist on two lovers embraced in a secret embrace. So romantic and your imagery perfectly conveys the sensual experience - "tinseled trees," "fluid rhythms," "pulses flowed." There is always such depth that operates on many levels, sweet poetry sis. Congratulations on your win! Sending flowing blessings of grace.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:21:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, the gentle beauty of your comments flow over my soul like a soft summer rain buffing new leaves to a high shine... such is the power of your lovely words and creative kinship. Thank you, my poetry sis, for your kind congrats and moving comments. I treasure your expressive thoughts as much as I treasure your soulful, beautiful poetry. You are ever appreciated my sweet friend. Warmest wishes sent on shades of Autumn leaves.. ~Susan

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/8/2023 7:33:00 AM

a gorgeous melding of nature and romance; some lovely imagery, especially that second to last line! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/11/2023 10:08:00 AM

Dear Charlotte, it's a pleasure to see you! Your comments are as prized as your exquisite poetry. I'm rather fond of the second to last line too :) Thank you for the delight of your visit. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan