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driving to work is a regular part of the day for her, but the specialised hospital is too far - twenty-five days, exactly at nine! the best option is the subway ..why not? instead of watching those busy roads, immersing herself in a peaceful reverie ! peaceful reverie? deep into thoughts! radiation is the best option too, for the disease, at this stage of cancer, probably, that’s how the doctor felt, once done, she should be safe - optimism prevails... chemo? clinical trial? unanswered questions. a polite strong gentleman with kind eyes - Doctor Wunder is very hopeful ... the sarcoma didn’t touch her other organs, not yet! that’s a very good sign..."We will take it out, you will be as good as new." when he talked, he sounded like an angel! an angel - who can heal magically by touching! she sighed - she wanted to believe in miracles. that night she dreamed of her grandma - reading to her- in the quiet tranquil afternoons, on a patio surrounded by serene fragrant jasmine creepers - was Karen's  job.... she read grandma's favourite novels with her best emotive voice, and grandma listened eagerly to what happened to the girl who rebelled against her parents, and left home with the boy she loved... until her eyes drooped in tiredness like colourful flowers in her garden droop, end of the day when birds return home, when gossamer amber twilight covers the mysterious horizon. Karen's grandma was only in her fifties - she wanted to live until Karen became a famous writer, which she was sure of. but grandma did not. she fought for five years... ultimately the cruel disease won, dreaded cancer took her away, snatched her away from the embrace of the loving family, the last days were very sad..couldn’t eat or sleep, and nothing could alleviate her excruciating pain... still she smiled her sweetest smile, still she prayed to her gods, she, who Karen loved more than anyone else, she, who was her best friend and confidante of her dreams and hopes. Karen frantically looks for the pendant ..a precious gift from her grandmother, a beautiful piece of jewellery grandma wore on her wedding day, today is the day Karen needs her ethereal presence, it clings to her neck ... a sublime feeling emerges ... someone is holding her hand, in a tight grip, and they are walking together bravely for a very long walk in her life. this time they are not going to fail. FIRST PLACE June 4. 2021 For " Cancer Ivy" Poetry Contest Sponsor: Chantelle Anne Cook

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Date: 7/1/2021 7:43:00 PM
Another creative work from a master poet. While congratulating you on this, I take this opportunity to thank you for the contests you sponsor. I really enjoy taking part in it. I feel I grow. Thank you very much.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/2/2021 2:03:00 PM
Dear Christuraj, Thank you for visiting my page. I am not a master poet at all ...we all are trainees. I get inspired by interesting topics from other sponsors, so I try to offer something I feel touching, for my contests. The hard part is the placement - usually I love all the poems, I truly feel everyone is a winner. You are definitely growing ...Best wishes for a wonderful poetic journey. Mala
Date: 6/23/2021 9:41:00 AM
WOW!!! What a amazing story/write. A wonderful picture to go with your poem. Life and death can be so very hard. Peace and blessings going to you with hugs..............
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/2/2021 2:05:00 PM
Thanks Paula .. your comments mean a lot. Really appreciate your visiting my page. Love ~ Mala
Date: 6/18/2021 10:57:00 AM
This is one of the best poems I have read of late, Mala...and here I am, with misty eyes, suddenly deeply involved in the lives of two persons who represent many others... their love for life, tribulations, doubt, hope, faith....and determination. This deserves potd award, and to my favs it goes ~ Take care my friend. Hugs // paul
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Date: 6/20/2021 3:14:00 PM
Dear Paul, I have no words to express how much I appreciate your kind words! How do I thank you enough for reading this poem, and leaving an inspiring comment, which sounds like a blessings to me. I am so honoured that this poem is in your faves. Beast wishes and hugs ~ Mala
Date: 6/13/2021 4:57:00 AM
OMG I cried. Your poem is so deep and so touching, it won the Oscar for me. gl in the contest, sending love and prayers, for a cancer free life hon xo
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Date: 6/11/2021 8:54:00 AM
What a beautiful write dear Mala... Very good take for the contest... Losing someone so special in our lives due to the dreadful disease is so painful... Your last stanza is so sweet and I love the last line specially... Best wishes in the contest my inspiring friend... Hugs... ~ Ani
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Date: 6/9/2021 7:03:00 PM
wow, this is such precious writing . you really capture the essence of loss of loved ones by the beautiful way your told this story
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/10/2021 4:16:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. Glad you visited my page. Really appreciate your inspiring comments. Loved your poem too. Hugs ~ Mala
Date: 6/6/2021 5:10:00 PM
Malabika, Very well written though pain hides lurking between the lines. The world so full of true grit tears and spoils of silent wars. Left to ponder their multitude, like so many stars in the night skies, looking down at the rabble left here on earth to wonder why. -Richard
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/7/2021 7:24:00 AM
Richard, thank you very much for reading my poem. Your comments are so insightful and inspiring. There are both pleasures and pains in our life - one dominates the other in different times. Warm wishes ~ Mala
Date: 6/5/2021 6:29:00 AM
Such a very touching story! Emotions well-conveyed in every line. Magnificent! Best wishes in the contest!
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Date: 6/5/2021 8:59:00 AM
Thank you, Dear JCB. This is a true story.. I wanted to tell. So appreciate your inspiring comments. Love and hugs ~ Mala

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