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Interface Connected

I long to think in great lofty thoughts Instead I'm stuck in the mud they brought Filling the cracks of my mind with lessons taught I sought out respect yet that's not what I got The reading of books knowledge to obtain Unwrapped the cellophane putty on my brain Thinking I knew answers but I couldn't explain Each thought looped in large circles down the drain Within papered prison thoughts shrink and grow I strive to know what so many others know Free me from myself let my mind flow Not all ideas emanate from a lamps glow In the real world I grab onto the prophets hand Walking through the desert footsteps in the sand My skin cracked, his is soft and tanned His thoughts mine, I feel my world expand Original Poem This one received only one comment. Thanks Donna for commenting. Interface Broken He has lofty thoughts Yet he's stuck in the mud Stepping through fields of regret A brilliant mind filled with cracks Longing to be given respect Reader of books Putty for his brain Absorbed within his core He thinks what he thinks Yet knowing can't unlock the door So he's trapped in his prison Of all that he knows Knowledge didn't set him free The interface is broken He can't help others to see Perhaps he's a prophet Far beyond this world It is really hard for me to say I sit with him and listen Wishing to turn night into day For Marugu's Least Viewed Contest.

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Old Man Emu

Date: 10/23/2016 2:18:00 PM

Richard, both are fantastic, great effort, I love the line "within papered prison thoughts shrink and grow". Kind regards Craig

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2016 6:44:00 AM

Thanks Craig.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 10/23/2016 6:44:00 AM

Wow! The first poem is great as well as the second. It flow is great. Good luck in the contest........A.M.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2016 8:18:00 AM

Thanks A.M.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/21/2016 11:39:00 PM

How did I not see the original poem. It's profound and deep. God's wisdom is foolishness to man...that's what the Word says. You've captured the essence of that verse well. Amazing.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:50:00 PM

Yes that message came to mind. Thanks again my dear friend.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/21/2016 12:44:00 PM

well, now your page is full so it is no longer least read, rich... such splendid works i wonder how was missed!..huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:13:00 PM

Thanks Nette. Hugs Rick.

Tim Smith

Date: 10/20/2016 1:45:00 PM

I am amazed at your talent Richard...I thought the first was great then I read the second...wow

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:14:00 PM

Thanks Tim.;0)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/19/2016 4:32:00 PM

I loved both poems, Richard. Each had its own merits. The first was more expressed more expansively, like a thought wave. The second was very streamlined, very focused, like a mental laser beam. Oh there I go again, waxing poetically. Sorry. You write very beautifully. Two excellent poems. I really enjoyed this first offering of yours that I've read. Can't wait to read more of your work. Also, ty for the kind comments on my poems. Much love and peace to you.

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 10/19/2016 4:35:00 PM

Oops! Should read: expressed more expansively, like a thought wave. Much love, Richard.

Mama Bear

Date: 10/19/2016 3:27:00 PM

I find it amazing that hundreds of people can read what others write and never comment. I can relate best to the first one but both are most enlightening Big 7 from me and hope you win the contest Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 4:13:00 PM

Thanks mom, love Rick.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/19/2016 8:19:00 AM

The core ideas seem to be the same: Quest for knowledge! Each poem has its merits but both are beautiful dear, Richard I will give a seven to both!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 8:20:00 AM

You are kind my friend.

Paloma P

Date: 10/19/2016 5:45:00 AM

It's really a shame when poetry/poets don't get read. You made the most of it, I prefer the first, it's more affecting, to me anyway, but both are fine. Good luck Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 12:11:00 PM

Thanks, I too prefer the rewrite. Thanks for clarifying.

Paloma P
Date: 10/19/2016 11:57:00 AM

Sorry Richard, sometimes I confuse myself, the one at the top of the page. Same sentiment in both, but I feel that one is more personable and a more intimate depiction.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 8:21:00 AM

When you say first are you meaning the first one I wrote or the one at the top of the page?? Thanks for the positive comment either way.

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 10/19/2016 4:25:00 AM

Two for the price of one and yet I believe although similar both sit in their individual right as there are parts personally I prefer or would take from each. Made me consider for some time....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 8:23:00 AM

Thanks Anna-Marie.