Interface Connected

I long to think in great lofty thoughts
Instead I'm stuck in the mud they brought
Filling the cracks of my mind with lessons taught
I sought out respect yet that's not what I got

The reading of books knowledge to obtain
Unwrapped the cellophane putty on my brain
Thinking I knew answers but I couldn't explain
Each thought looped in large circles down the drain

Within papered prison thoughts shrink and grow
I strive to know what so many others know
Free me from myself let my mind flow
Not all ideas emanate from a lamps glow

In the real world I grab onto the prophets hand
Walking through the desert footsteps in the sand
My skin cracked, his is soft and tanned
His thoughts mine, I feel my world expand

Original Poem

This one received only one comment. Thanks Donna for commenting.

Interface Broken

He has lofty thoughts
Yet he's stuck in the mud
Stepping through fields of regret
A brilliant mind filled with cracks
Longing to be given respect

Reader of books
Putty for his brain
Absorbed within his core
He thinks what he thinks
Yet knowing can't unlock the door

So he's trapped in his prison
Of all that he knows
Knowledge didn't set him free
The interface is broken
He can't help others to see

Perhaps he's a prophet
Far beyond this world
It is really hard for me to say
I sit with him and listen
Wishing to turn night into day

For Marugu's Least Viewed Contest.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 10/23/2016 2:18:00 PM
Richard, both are fantastic, great effort, I love the line "within papered prison thoughts shrink and grow". Kind regards Craig
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2016 6:44:00 AM
Thanks Craig.
Date: 10/23/2016 6:44:00 AM
Wow! The first poem is great as well as the second. It flow is great. Good luck in the contest........A.M.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2016 8:18:00 AM
Thanks A.M.
Date: 10/21/2016 11:39:00 PM
How did I not see the original poem. It's profound and deep. God's wisdom is foolishness to man...that's what the Word says. You've captured the essence of that verse well. Amazing.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:50:00 PM
Yes that message came to mind. Thanks again my dear friend.
Date: 10/21/2016 12:44:00 PM
well, now your page is full so it is no longer least read, rich... such splendid works i wonder how was missed!..huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:13:00 PM
Thanks Nette. Hugs Rick.
Date: 10/20/2016 1:45:00 PM
I am amazed at your talent Richard...I thought the first was great then I read the second...wow
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:14:00 PM
Thanks Tim.;0)
Date: 10/19/2016 4:32:00 PM
I loved both poems, Richard. Each had its own merits. The first was more expressed more expansively, like a thought wave. The second was very streamlined, very focused, like a mental laser beam. Oh there I go again, waxing poetically. Sorry. You write very beautifully. Two excellent poems. I really enjoyed this first offering of yours that I've read. Can't wait to read more of your work. Also, ty for the kind comments on my poems. Much love and peace to you.
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Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 10/19/2016 4:35:00 PM
Oops! Should read: expressed more expansively, like a thought wave. Much love, Richard.
Date: 10/19/2016 3:27:00 PM
I find it amazing that hundreds of people can read what others write and never comment. I can relate best to the first one but both are most enlightening Big 7 from me and hope you win the contest Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 4:13:00 PM
Thanks mom, love Rick.
Date: 10/19/2016 8:19:00 AM
The core ideas seem to be the same: Quest for knowledge! Each poem has its merits but both are beautiful dear, Richard I will give a seven to both!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 8:20:00 AM
You are kind my friend.
Date: 10/19/2016 5:45:00 AM
It's really a shame when poetry/poets don't get read. You made the most of it, I prefer the first, it's more affecting, to me anyway, but both are fine. Good luck Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 12:11:00 PM
Thanks, I too prefer the rewrite. Thanks for clarifying.
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Date: 10/19/2016 11:57:00 AM
Sorry Richard, sometimes I confuse myself, the one at the top of the page. Same sentiment in both, but I feel that one is more personable and a more intimate depiction.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 8:21:00 AM
When you say first are you meaning the first one I wrote or the one at the top of the page?? Thanks for the positive comment either way.
Date: 10/19/2016 4:25:00 AM
Two for the price of one and yet I believe although similar both sit in their individual right as there are parts personally I prefer or would take from each. Made me consider for some time....
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 8:23:00 AM
Thanks Anna-Marie.
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