Instinct - Tanka 3

mind still on his work
he picks up the ringing phone 
on instinct--- 
     the way he reaches for his lover 
     before opening his eyes









Tanka 3: Return to TOP TEN - Poetry Contest - Shared 4th Place with Franco Gonza

Sponsor : Andrea Dietrich

25 March 2015
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 4/22/2015 2:01:00 PM
Sometimes these short poems have a lot more power then longer ones.
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Date: 4/2/2015 2:59:00 PM
Congrats!! Sara
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Date: 3/31/2015 12:39:00 PM
Hi Kim! So pleased to be back with merited congratulations. I had no doubt this would be a winner! // paul
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Date: 3/29/2015 10:41:00 AM
What a wonderful twist on your poem. Congratulations on your win a 7 Blessings eve
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Date: 3/29/2015 3:08:00 AM
Nice!! Congrats!!
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Date: 3/28/2015 10:50:00 PM
nice romantic tanka. thanx for visiting my page Kim. Congrats. Mohan
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Date: 3/28/2015 4:31:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Kim! Love the twist in your poem! Sandra
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Date: 3/28/2015 1:48:00 PM
Congrats on the win, nicely written
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Date: 3/28/2015 1:53:00 PM
Thank you for sharing my joy, John. Appreciate your comment and visit. Kim :)
Date: 3/28/2015 1:34:00 PM
This is such a smart and nuanced tanka…wonderfully written Kim
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Date: 3/28/2015 1:44:00 PM
Thank you, David. Honored to be in the winners' list too. Your name is up there. Thank God Andrea liked our entries. :) Kim
Date: 3/28/2015 12:05:00 PM
Hey, this is good. I really like it. Many congrats.
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Date: 3/28/2015 12:15:00 PM
Thank you, Abdul. Oh but I remember your entry, the one that made me smile...We're both on the winner's list! I really thank God Andrea liked our entries. Smiles from the isles! Kim :)
Date: 3/28/2015 11:15:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win Patrice
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Kp Nunez
Date: 3/28/2015 12:12:00 PM
Thank you once again, Joseph, for sharing my joy. Thank God Andrea liked my take on modern tanka. Smiles from the isles! :)
Date: 3/28/2015 10:20:00 AM
Oh yes........so true to life, and an excellent take on human nature! This is terrific, Kim !!
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Kp Nunez
Date: 3/28/2015 12:10:00 PM
Thank you, Carrie. I wanted to see how far Andrea would allow me with my take on what a "modern" tanka is. Thank God she liked it! Oh, but we're both on the winners' list! Hugs! :) Kim
Date: 3/28/2015 7:41:00 AM
Kim, congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest with this beautifully written tanka, a perfect 7
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Kp Nunez
Date: 3/28/2015 12:06:00 PM
Ain't that right! LOL! Really happy we both joined and that Andrea sponsored again! More hugs! :)
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Date: 3/28/2015 11:59:00 AM
Thank you, BW. I see your name on the winners' list as well! Another reason to thank God. Appreciate your rating too. Hugs! :) Kim
Date: 3/28/2015 5:48:00 AM
dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/28/2015 11:57:00 AM
I am made up Kim I struggle so hard with this form and to place in the contests means so much to me:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 3/28/2015 11:56:00 AM
Thank you, Jan. Another reason to thank God. We're both on the winners' list! Hugs! :)
Date: 3/28/2015 12:32:00 AM
I really enjoyed this tanka. the comparison of his work day to his home life, and what is instinctual in each one. Nicely done. congrats in my contest.
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Date: 3/28/2015 11:32:00 AM
Thank you, Andie, for placing me in your winners' list. God bless you more for continuously sponsoring contests! Hugs! Kim :)
Date: 3/27/2015 10:59:00 AM
Good morning Kim : “ Thank you, sire, for your visit ”, you are most welcome my Dear, and sorry Kim, that I get to deep into “ and sharing your thoughts.” I have seen that you have mind a couple of more gems from the subconscious lands of history. Keep up the good work !!! “ I wish you a lovely day. Hugs! Kim :) ”And may the same be for you !!! Best wishes, big hugs and kisses !!! Bill .
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Date: 3/27/2015 10:05:00 AM
A well written Tanka Patrice...best wishes in the contest
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Date: 3/26/2015 8:30:00 PM
It is best to be fully engaged when reaching for your lover or she may vanish without warning.
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Date: 3/26/2015 5:17:00 PM
Few words' magic done beautifully about instinct. Good luck in the contest. 7 sure. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 3/26/2015 12:43:00 PM
Excellent and unique take you present here, Kim!! Your pivotal instinct serves you well; love your final two lines. #7 In my eyes...a winner! hugs // paul
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Date: 3/26/2015 5:51:00 AM
a different take KIm. Hope you will do well on the contest.. :)!//olive eloisa
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Date: 3/26/2015 4:58:00 AM
- This was a unique Tanka, dear Kim ! - I love it, 7 !! - I wish you best of luck in the contest ..... and a relaxed afternoon - hugs and <3 // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/25/2015 2:51:00 PM
Very well done my friend...the turn is outstanding.....hugs Tim
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Date: 3/25/2015 1:06:00 PM
Interesting work..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 3/25/2015 11:07:00 AM
Hi Kim! I love this tanka! Great twist. Hugs, Kimberly
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