Insidious

One somber summer  night
darkness descended
to destroy and deaden
a dappled candle on the table.

A soulless silver smile
turned gray and tarnished
and your eyes that once aglow 
lost its luster and life
for it was destined
to falter and fade forever. 

Now, a child within me weeps~
as sepulchral silence spawns silhouettes
of abysmal labyrinth~ 
in bloody snowy pavement. 
The candle dies...my hope soon will...
so in blood-stained feet, I run and run~
until the shadows from the woods
swallow my insidious fear.


November 5,2020

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 4/18/2021 2:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win with this impressive poem JCB! Blessings xxoo
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Date: 1/17/2021 9:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A deep story/write. I love your line, "The candle dies...my hope soon will..." When one candle dies another one must be lite. Enjoy your win/day with blessings...............
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Date: 11/24/2020 10:04:00 AM
"as sepulchral silence spawns silhouettes" what great poetry and alliteration! Congratulations on your win, JCB. Best wishes~ Warren.
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Date: 11/23/2020 3:42:00 PM
JCB, congratulations on your win in the contest with this wonderful write _Constance
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Date: 11/22/2020 5:38:00 PM
yes, I do remember this one and the awesome imagery it contains. Congratulations on your well deserved win, my friend.
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Date: 11/22/2020 2:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning placement.
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Date: 11/22/2020 12:25:00 PM
CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, JCB. Janice
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Date: 11/22/2020 8:30:00 AM
Congratulations on the win JCB! Linda
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Date: 11/7/2020 5:58:00 AM
Hello JCB Burl, was this a nightmare? As I read it is what I get from this poem. Don;t eat anything before be time. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Date: 11/6/2020 6:27:00 PM
this feels like more than mere death. Is there murder afoot? This really has the atmosphere of insidiousness!! I enjoyed the read, JCB!
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Date: 11/5/2020 6:11:00 PM
The dark beauty of your artistry gives me chills, JCB, the kind that stings the imagination with sad emotional imagery and tinges the heart with a hopeless angst. Unsmiling and superb! Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
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Date: 11/5/2020 2:53:00 AM
I could feel the angst in your poem...
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Date: 11/5/2020 12:14:00 AM
Sometimes we go through states when we remain with a "soulless silver smile".. the shadow becomes more of a visibility.. the candle of the heart just melted within.. we have only the burn and a scent of existence.. Hope sometimes chooses to step out leaving shells of soul.. So deep! So powerful a rendition of a state of mind and heart in a wonderful poetry! Achingly amazing! A great pleasure to read, JCB.. My warmest wishes. Regards and blessings.
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Date: 11/5/2020 12:39:00 AM
Very well-said dear Besma. Your comment put my poem into another dimension I never thought it could get there. Thank you so much. You inspired me.
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