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my breath in rattles as do the windows outer storms cause and effect

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Joseph May

Date: 8/27/2024 2:25:00 PM

Very nicely crafted, soup mail

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2024 2:44:00 PM

Thank you

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 8/20/2024 9:40:00 AM

Dear DD, What a wonderful monoku that speaks to the physical and internal worlds. I enjoyed the introspection. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/20/2024 10:02:00 AM

Many thanks Daniel, appreciated

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/19/2024 2:23:00 PM

Hmmm! think I see the bigger picture here Dilly, a microcosm within the macrocosm of a storm, quite powerfully worded, great monoku, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/19/2024 11:24:00 PM

Thank you David, I wrote a fairly lengthy poem that didn't feel right to post and just condensed it right down - could easily be a reverse ekphrasis of The Scream - it's all on the outside... Haha I'm just thinking of Annie now "The sun'll come out tomorrow..." Thank you for your comment :)