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Jan.30- 2024
Pick a Title, Vol.41. Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Edward Ibeh
~ Placed First~

 

Growing out of childish pranks, With the storm and stress of turbulent teens, I locked within my mind’s cupboard, A portrait vaguely sketched, but never finished. Rough it was, though fancifully done, The silhouette of a masculine figure, The Gallant who would reach one day, To hold my hand and own me his. Had no inkling who he would be, Yet had fallen in love with that phantasmal figure, He had dazzling eyes and sturdy limbs, With striking features, ravishing to view, Elusive ever to sight and touch, He remained an enigma, abstract to grasp. At times his contours grew distinct, But soon blanched out into hazy lines, Sometimes when a covert devouring look, Or a pair of intent adoring eyes, Sent a thrill down my fickle heart, I forced open my chestnut draw, And took out stealthily that half-done sketch, Hidden out from the world’s staring glance, To alter the features one by one, And make it resemble the man I met, Either within a moving train, Or sometimes in an elite gang, Who derailed my thoughts in a pensive mood, And tickled my fancy to heave and sigh. He made me turn and toss in bed, And left me, many a sleepless night, He stroked my heart with gladdening ache, And made me lose in sweet reverie. In the nick of time, he solemnly came, To hold my hand and tie the knot, With a pounding heart and quivering breath, I found him different from the man I dreamt. The fabulous fabric in my loom, Looked at variance from the one unfurled, Transfixed between fact and fallacy, I struggled to hide a falling tear. Time marched on in silent haste, And I learned to outgrow my childish whims, Sagacity dawned with passing age, Making me discern the real from the sham. It made me admire his sanguine self. On fathomed deep beyond external mien, I saw him unveiled in taintless worth, That made my heart pine in love. Piecing together our halved selves, With the glue of love, our identities merged, Now he is with me in my blues, Consoling me with his balmy touch, He is with me in my joy, Making it resonant with a hearty laugh, He is there when storms rage, Whispering in my ear, not to fear, He taught me how to savor life, To meet the slings with radiant cheer, Now the image is etched deep, Never to erase, nor to revise, And the old portrait locked within, Grew so musty, bereft of use, In its place, I keep within His indelible print that he reigns supreme, An invincible king in my inner sanctum!

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Date: 2/11/2024 5:29:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win in my contest with this absolutely stunning write, Valsa. Vivid imagery throughout. I'm faving this one for sure.
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Valsa George
Date: 2/11/2024 9:15:00 AM
Edward, you have never disappointed me, but have always surprised and delighted me. I don't know how much i owe you for boosting my confidence. Thanks a lot for placing my poem at the top list, dear friend.
Date: 2/9/2024 6:24:00 PM
One of my favorite songs has the words "I knew I loved you before I met you I think I dreamed you into life I have been waiting all my life." Your amazing poem is so like this. Dreams can be a danger when we believe in them and they don't come true or they can become something to keep in our inner sanctum to give us hope. Valsa your poem is to be cherished. Fact or fiction, its beautifully written and brought teas to my eyes. I too have an inner sanctum. You have an amazing talent dear friend
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Date: 2/9/2024 6:27:00 PM
I think Anisha likes your poem too !!!!! :)
Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:01:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/9/2024 7:01:00 AM
Congratulations to win first place. To compose so lengthy poem is beyond my imagination with my limited vocabulary in English. Love.
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Date: 2/1/2024 9:58:00 AM
An amazing poem full of emotions. A journey of love and self growth. Glad you found the right person. Written in so smooth verse and captures the character of a lover. Hugs.
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Date: 1/31/2024 12:59:00 AM
Dear sweet valsa! What a profound write this is depicting various stages of finding love and finally settling with that love etched within your inner sanctum guiding your and consoling you through turbulent times. I love the flow of this, and how your ending is soulful, and the way you’ve also described and taken the readers through a journey of visual descriptions is what makes this poem stand out so much. And you always do it in a way that is so poetic. Excellent storytelling throughout! BOL
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Date: 1/31/2024 1:00:00 AM
It is definitely a new fave for me for the impeccable way youv portrayed your poetic skills in the most engaging manner!
Date: 1/30/2024 5:16:00 PM
Dear Valsa, your contest submission is a work of art that depicts the journey of love from adolescence to maturity. The profound notion of love as the connecting force that pulls two different hearts together fascinates me. Your representations of love are heartfelt and lively. It's fantastic that you can honestly share your deepest emotions. Your entry is wonderful, and I hope you perform well in the competition. I'm delighted you're able to write and share your work again. BOL in the contest
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Date: 1/30/2024 1:31:00 PM
Dearest, Valsa, what a beautiful take on the contest with your ever changing portrait of love growing from infatuation to maturity. I love the sense of love being the glue bringing two halves of two distinct hearts together. Love the powerful, living, images of love. There is such a wonderful transparency as you share all of your emotions with us! Beautiful write, dear friend. Best wishes for the contest! So glad you are finding time to write and post again! Blessings.
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Date: 1/30/2024 12:36:00 PM
Hey Valsa.. I love your take on the contest and how your poem celebrates the journey of self-discovery and the transformative power of love in transcending illusions and embracing the beauty of reality. Through its lyrical imagery and emotional depth, the poem invites readers to reflect on the complexities of human relationships and the enduring quest for meaning and connection in the tapestry of life.
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Date: 1/30/2024 10:01:00 AM
Nice captivating poem. GL in contest.
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Date: 1/29/2024 11:18:00 PM
Dear Valsa, this is an absolutely amazing piece that is so captivating and absorbing. So, so wonderfully descriptive. Line after line of astonishment as the reader gets drawn into the inner sanctum. ‘ now the image is etched deep, never to erase or to revise’. So profound. This is so creative from your golden pen. It has to be read several times. Loved it. Good luck in the contest - looks a winner to me. Hugs and blessings xx
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Date: 1/29/2024 10:46:00 PM
Gosh, dear Valsa, this is such an intriguing and impeccable take for the contest and especially for the theme 'inner sanctum'.. I felt breathless as I read your lines, adding details one after other and dwelling deep in the oceans of mystery.. Woah! How uniquely you've described that hazy vision of a person who appeared as a saviour and healing in the vision and how one chased his existence, by editing the portrait everytime, but only to find that he reigns as a king in her inner sanctum.. Wow
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Date: 1/29/2024 10:48:00 PM
This can be perceived in many ways metaphorically, one of the interpretations being that the shadow that she was chasing and the love that she was yearning to feel was actually within herself, hiding in the inner sanctum.. Many ways to see this write.. I love your artistic vocabulary throughout and the pace of flow.. Majestically done! Sending you many best wishes for the contest, this is a FAV :)

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