Inclination Combed Your Eyes

where you must float around me
a snapped stone melted into
that bottom of water glass
beside myself, drift currents

it shattered up to sunrise
and rippled through my shirt for
my heart with blue lows drawing
from sea with her fingerprints

a million shores leading out
the more you ebb than ~our ebb~
we feel a thousand lifetimes
same reflections in our gills

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Date: 5/23/2025 5:12:00 PM
This flows like memory underwater--fluid, broken, achingly reflective. "Same reflections in our gills" is such a haunting line, blurring love, identity, and longing. The whole piece feels like emotion seen through sea glass--fractured and beautiful.
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Date: 12/25/2024 3:22:00 PM
So many times I have felt like a stone skipped over water. Just to stop dead in my tracks and sink. To the bottom of something, only to look up like a fish that doesn't need to breathe. I have always wished that I could write in Mandarin. I like the fact that it has no rhyme pattern that says so much. Without it. Warmly A.S.
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Date: 11/10/2024 10:38:00 AM
ohh paige, a heightened brand of artword yet subtly relayed... i enjoyed your mystical sensual mood!
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Date: 10/31/2024 10:52:00 PM
A poem alluding to the greatness and peacefulness of the ocean, I was transported to the living waters in your words. I appreciate your thoughts.
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Date: 10/26/2024 7:28:00 PM
Interesting metaphors!
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Date: 10/24/2024 12:03:00 PM
Dear paige, this is so very well written and I absolutely love your use of metaphors in this form too! So many lines stood out for me such as “ it shattered up to sunrise and rippled through my shirt for my heart with blue lows drawing from sea with her fingerprints“ so deeply moving and soulful! How descriptive you are! Truly you can do any form and leave me still speechless! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always
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Date: 10/21/2024 8:41:00 PM
Such interesting phrasings. Love that line "shattered up to sunrise"
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Date: 10/21/2024 7:08:00 PM
Loved reading your poem tonight!
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Date: 10/21/2024 6:42:00 PM
What a catchy title. Especially liked the second stanza.... rippled through my shirt. I never could come up with such a comparison. You always have an intriguing way with words.
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Date: 10/21/2024 12:00:00 PM
Great use of the form and so poetically done dear Paige..
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Date: 10/21/2024 2:37:00 AM
I assume you wrote this poem after closing time. Pity. You could have got a placement.
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Paige Hind
Date: 10/21/2024 8:41:00 AM
Hey Victor, I didn't know this fit a contest. I was just writing and following my muse. I don't enter contests often- maybe I am shy, lol. :)
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