In the Woods

My friend, so much like a brother to me,
has met me in these woods where we like
to hunt for pesky animals we see.
I’ve brought my bow and arrows on this hike.

Because I’ve known this friend most of my life,
I have confided to him I believe
some man is paying visits to my wife
while I am out of town. I’m not naive!

Something he has told me now gives me pause.
I’m at a cliff. He’s somewhere at my back.
I lift my bow and turn around because
I hear him running . He’s on the attack.

He’ll shove me off this cliff and watch me die?
In an instant, I let an arrow fly.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025


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Date: 2/1/2025 9:00:00 AM
Andrea, how amazing you create a complex story in so few lines. Really remarkable how you did this. I'm impressed! Smiles!
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Date: 1/26/2025 6:33:00 AM
So glad not to be the betrayer in this scenario...I assume the arrow does not miss its mark! Another superb sonnet dear Andrea, Bravo
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Date: 1/24/2025 11:51:00 PM
Peskiness is great! I love hunting :-) Have a nice day ~ AA
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Date: 1/24/2025 12:37:00 PM
You can't trust anyone anymore
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Date: 1/24/2025 11:57:00 AM
this is so well done, andrea! bravo!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2025 12:07:00 PM
Wow. Thanks, Ilene. I had my last lines written first and had to think down toward them .
Date: 1/24/2025 10:01:00 AM
Interesting poem.
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Date: 1/24/2025 5:57:00 AM
Damn a very interesting poem, hopefully the arrow found its target...have a great dayy
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2025 9:32:00 AM
Yep. It did
Date: 1/24/2025 5:44:00 AM
Good aim -- though not the man alone to blame:) Two arrows, perhaps, a fairer game.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2025 9:34:00 AM
The wifes gift will be grief!
Date: 1/24/2025 5:26:00 AM
Sounds like they both have gone over the edge! Love this thriller! The woman will lose her husband and lover in one fell swoop!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2025 9:33:00 AM
Yep!! Thanks, Kim
Date: 1/24/2025 4:35:00 AM
Dear Andrea, You stirred me this morning for your words grip like a vice, pulling me into a story thick with tension and betrayal. And Oh, that twist is sharp and devastating, leaving me breathless. You’ve painted trust and treachery with a masterful hand. Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2025 9:33:00 AM
Thanks. That was my intent exactly
Date: 1/24/2025 4:17:00 AM
Hi Andrea, hopefully your arrow found its target.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2025 9:34:00 AM
It did
Date: 1/23/2025 10:40:00 PM
Ah this must be for Craig contest? Really creative take this is dear sweet andrea. And i must also praise the rhymes. And flow of your descriptive word weaving. What an intense scene it is, i can almost see this unfold, as this friend confronts the other! Clever and profound! Best wishes always. Sending you light today and always
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Date: 1/23/2025 10:00:00 PM
In the woods ..nice ending....The story very nicely told.
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Date: 1/23/2025 8:50:00 PM
so nicely written, listening someone is never innocent and may be precious, enjoyed
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Date: 1/23/2025 7:53:00 PM
Well, he deserves for the "arrow to fly" - gosh,
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Date: 1/23/2025 6:48:00 PM
Andrea, Very nice twist in this. Let an arrow fly.., and with a sigh perfidious one, goodbye. -Richard
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Date: 1/23/2025 6:31:00 PM
Oh I like this one!
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Date: 1/23/2025 6:28:00 PM
Interesting poem. I hope the arrow found its mark. Nice sonnet
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