In the Woods

My friend, so much like a brother to me,
has met me in these woods where we like
to hunt for pesky animals we see.
I’ve brought my bow and arrows on this hike.

Because I’ve known this friend most of my life,
I have confided to him I believe
some man is paying visits to my wife
while I am out of town. I’m not naive!

Something he has told me now gives me pause.
I’m at a cliff. He’s somewhere at my back.
I lift my bow and turn around because
I hear him running . He’s on the attack.

He’ll shove me off this cliff and watch me die?
In an instant, I let an arrow fly.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Beaufort Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 9:00 AM
Andrea, how amazing you create a complex story in so few lines. Really remarkable how you did this. I'm impressed! Smiles!
Martin Avatar
January 26, 2025 at 6:33 AM
So glad not to be the betrayer in this scenario...I assume the arrow does not miss its mark! Another superb sonnet dear Andrea, Bravo
Alhemaidy Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 11:51 PM
Peskiness is great! I love hunting :-) Have a nice day ~ AA
Parker Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 12:37 PM
You can't trust anyone anymore
Bauer Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 11:57 AM
this is so well done, andrea! bravo!
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 12:07 PM
Wow. Thanks, Ilene. I had my last lines written first and had to think down toward them .
Narain Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 10:01 AM
Interesting poem.
Walimbe Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 5:57 AM
Damn a very interesting poem, hopefully the arrow found its target...have a great dayy
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 9:32 AM
Yep. It did
DiMino Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 5:44 AM
Good aim -- though not the man alone to blame:) Two arrows, perhaps, a fairer game.
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 9:34 AM
The wifes gift will be grief!
Rodrigues Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 5:26 AM
Sounds like they both have gone over the edge! Love this thriller! The woman will lose her husband and lover in one fell swoop!
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 9:33 AM
Yep!! Thanks, Kim
Rodgers Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 4:35 AM
Dear Andrea, You stirred me this morning for your words grip like a vice, pulling me into a story thick with tension and betrayal. And Oh, that twist is sharp and devastating, leaving me breathless. You’ve painted trust and treachery with a masterful hand. Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 9:33 AM
Thanks. That was my intent exactly
Read Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 4:17 AM
Hi Andrea, hopefully your arrow found its target.
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2025 at 9:34 AM
It did
Empress Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 10:40 PM
Ah this must be for Craig contest? Really creative take this is dear sweet andrea. And i must also praise the rhymes. And flow of your descriptive word weaving. What an intense scene it is, i can almost see this unfold, as this friend confronts the other! Clever and profound! Best wishes always. Sending you light today and always
Singh Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 10:00 PM
In the woods ..nice ending....The story very nicely told.
Rolland Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 8:50 PM
so nicely written, listening someone is never innocent and may be precious, enjoyed
Hind Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 7:53 PM
Well, he deserves for the "arrow to fly" - gosh,
Theraven Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 6:48 PM
Andrea, Very nice twist in this. Let an arrow fly.., and with a sigh perfidious one, goodbye. -Richard
Bass Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 6:31 PM
Oh I like this one!
Mckeithan Avatar
January 23, 2025 at 6:28 PM
Interesting poem. I hope the arrow found its mark. Nice sonnet
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