In the Wind

a single leaf
clings to its branch
trembling in the wind
I watch you
walk away

12/22/2021

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/7/2022 10:48:00 PM

What an incredible metaphor for the emotions that leave one chilled and cold. This is wonderful P.S. Congratulations on your winning poem. New year blessings xxoo

P.S. Awtry
Date: 1/8/2022 5:27:00 AM

Thank you so much Connie! :) -ps

Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/7/2022 11:45:00 AM

Very thought provoking PS! I like the tenacity of life clinging to love in a love of life. Congrats and high fives for your win. Blessings for the new year.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 1/7/2022 11:54:00 AM

Thank you Sam for your thoughtful comment. Blessings to you, as well! :)

Valsa George

Date: 1/7/2022 12:59:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, dear friend P.S.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 1/7/2022 7:23:00 AM

Thank you Valsa! -ps

Craig Bowden

Date: 1/7/2022 12:06:00 AM

Another form I’ve never tried before but I will now thanks to you. Congrats on your win.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 1/7/2022 7:22:00 AM

Well, that is such a nice thing to say! :) -ps

Wren Rushing

Date: 1/1/2022 9:32:00 AM

P.s. You are becoming a master of the Tanka! So much said in this Bite size!

P.S. Awtry
Date: 1/1/2022 9:41:00 AM

Oh, thank you! I'm kind of proud of this one :) ~ps

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 12/30/2021 5:57:00 PM

Another masterful, emotionally moving Tanka! PS. You really own this form.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/30/2021 6:25:00 PM

Thank you Geoffrey! I find I do like to play with a form a bit. There may be more to follow :) ~ps

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/27/2021 7:38:00 PM

The juxtaposition is perfect, P.S. ~ O'Henry

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/27/2021 7:52:00 PM

Thank you! -ps

Shirley Hawkins

Date: 12/25/2021 8:48:00 PM

Bravely clinging on until the end that comes to us all. Very poignant and thought-provoking. I enjoyed reading this. P.S. Great Tanka. Thank you.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/27/2021 7:54:00 PM

Thank you -ps

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/25/2021 7:16:00 PM

Oh wow, yes most of the world would walk straight past, but not you, love the mind set here and the poetry. All the best for the new year.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/27/2021 7:55:00 PM

Thank you, Harry :) -ps

David Mchattie

Date: 12/24/2021 11:45:00 AM

Wishing you and yours a Happy Holiday and a Merry Christmas.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/24/2021 12:18:00 PM

Merry Christmas to you as well! :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/24/2021 5:02:00 AM

There is a hint in your final two lines. Well composed poem.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/24/2021 6:25:00 AM

Thank you Vijay for your visit :) -ps

Panagiota Romios

Date: 12/23/2021 2:41:00 PM

A beautiful Tanka. MerryChristmas, well almost! Lobe, Pangir xo

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/23/2021 11:48:00 PM

You are too kind. Merry Christmas to you too!

Mark Toney

Date: 12/23/2021 7:30:00 AM

Very thought-provoking, P.S. I can think of several scenarios, from a winter scene and they're simply parting for the day to later return, to the heartbreaking end of a relationship. That's the beauty of the Japanese forms. Nicely done!

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/23/2021 7:38:00 AM

Oh good! I so appreciate the feedback. Thank you very much! :) -ps

Joe Dimino

Date: 12/23/2021 3:54:00 AM

Ouch! The epitome of chilling aloneness. Wow! Great writing!

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/23/2021 7:11:00 AM

Thank you very much, Joe! :) -ps