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in the stillness

I stood along the shores of faith this salty spray it knew my wraith bitter was its taste I struggled as I drew my breath watching you succumb to death another life erased in the stillness as you laid I clasped my hand, in silence prayed a final kiss I placed June 11, 2020 Triple Stanza Couplet Tail-Rhyme Poetry Contest Sponsored by Charles Messina

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Date: 7/7/2020 4:26:00 AM
Touching words of sad yet beautiful emotions Sandra. Congratulations on your win. Blessings and love :)
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Date: 7/2/2020 1:31:00 PM
Pure poetry, Sandra. Heartrending. Congrats on your win. Hugs ~ John
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Date: 7/2/2020 5:41:00 AM
Great write, Sandy. (sad & heartfelt) Congratulations on your win! Hope all is well.. Hugs Charlie
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Date: 6/27/2020 9:41:00 AM
A sad poem Sandy but written with heartfelt powerful thoughts. Good luck in the contest, I hope you are keeping safe - we see CNN every night and really worried how the 2nd wave of the corona virus is sweeping across the states - really concerned for all my friends on poetry soup. Be well my dear friend Sandy, Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 6/26/2020 10:38:00 PM
Heart touching lines
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Date: 6/15/2020 3:49:00 PM
Remarkable lines, true words, amazing piece from a very deep and wise mind. I love every bit of this. Great work
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Date: 6/15/2020 1:53:00 AM
A heartfelt beauty Sandra! The ones left behind suffer the loss until the afterlife. Brilliantly composed my friend. xxoo
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Date: 6/13/2020 5:25:00 AM
A very moving and wonderfully composed piece my friend. A fav... God bless,,,
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Date: 6/12/2020 7:48:00 AM
Hope is a poem written for a contest and not a poem depicting an actual event dearest, Sandra. An absolute powerful poem that captivates the heart with its superb emotional vigor. Hugs xxx
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Date: 6/12/2020 7:43:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this... making me nostalgic of the day our Dad bade us goodbye to be with the Lord. God bless you.
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Date: 6/11/2020 10:41:00 PM
So tragic to say goodbye to a loved one, you can feel the sadness.
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Date: 6/11/2020 3:01:00 PM
Beautifully written Sandra :)
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Date: 6/11/2020 1:33:00 PM
A truly sad verse Sandra, a situation that we all find ourselves in at some point in our lives. Good luck in the contest Tom
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Date: 6/11/2020 10:01:00 AM
A write that is both sad and beautiful at the same time loved this one Sandy I sense another win coming.
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Date: 6/11/2020 9:42:00 AM
What a sad but beautiful story Sandra. Love the way you place that final kiss through your soothing words. Best wishes for the contest. Much love :)
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Date: 6/11/2020 8:57:00 AM
beautiful in its sadness Sandra:-) such a touching piece:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/11/2020 7:38:00 AM
So poignant, yet so beautiful! wonderful write, sandy.
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Date: 6/11/2020 7:26:00 AM
Wow. A wonderful work of art, dear friend. Bless you always with love and poetry, Gina
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Date: 6/11/2020 7:09:00 AM
Beautifully sad and heart touching. The softness of this is paired perfectly with the sadness it expresses. Best wishes in the contest.
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