Emile Pinet Poet Sonnet

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Italian Sonnet

A ten syllable per line sonnet, consisting of an octave with the rhyme pattern abbaabba followed by six lines with a rhyme pattern of cdecde , cdcdcd or cdccdc

In the Shadows

I spy you standing in the shadows cast
by a flashing neon sign, bumming a smoke,
with your nose dripping as it does on coke;
your pale skin and red hair in sharp contrast.
And you're ogled by shady men you've asked 
for a smoke, even some hippy type bloke
who tries to convince you to take a toke.
You didn't recognize me as I passed.

Like a silhouette inked by the darkness,
you are framed by flashing colored lights,
and so drunk, three times you had to hurl.
This alley holds an aura of starkness
and although I know all about your rights,
I won't walk away; you're my baby girl!


(Italian Sonnet)


8/8/2018

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Jesse Rowe August 30, 2018 at 6:03 AM An important thought that EVERYONE is someone's baby. Definitely a cutting write. I did notice you used ABAB in the first stanza even though you said it was ABBA. Only mentioning because you asked us to point anything out. Emile Pinet August 30, 2018 at 8:29 AM Thanks so much Jesse, I didn't catch that...I'm grateful to you for pointing that out and have corrected the error my friend, Emile.

John Gondolf August 24, 2018 at 7:51 AM Emile, as I was reading this sonnet I was thinking it was nicely written and then I got to the last line and it ripped me in two. This one will linger with me today. Nicely written. John Emile Pinet August 24, 2018 at 8:44 AM Thanks John, I'm happy you liked it, as always I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Line Gauthier August 11, 2018 at 12:23 PM Wow - what a touching poem, Emile. A FAVE for me. Emile Pinet August 11, 2018 at 12:41 PM Thanks Line, I'm happy you liked it, as always I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Wendy Watson August 8, 2018 at 3:01 PM Hello Emile A hopefully fictional scenario but one which would make any parent shiver. The ally holds a aura of starkness: Slight correction as you have asked : The alley holds an aura of starkness Best wishes Wendy Wendy Watson August 8, 2018 at 3:33 PM No problem, Emile. 'An aura' because of the vowel sound after the indefinite article. I wish I had the ability to write poetry in French! Emile Pinet August 8, 2018 at 3:23 PM Thanks ever so much Wendy, that's exactly the kind of error I was hoping to catch my friend, Emile

Arturo Michael August 8, 2018 at 11:25 AM Enjoyed the imagery and message...All the best Emile Emile Pinet August 8, 2018 at 1:17 PM Thank you very much Arturo, I appreciate you encouragement and support my friend, Emile.

Sunlite Wanter August 8, 2018 at 11:05 AM A father's dilemma! And a mother's, too. The world says "tough love," but the heart says something much different. I have a tear. Emile Pinet August 8, 2018 at 1:16 PM Thanks Sunlite, I welcome your visits my friend, Emile.