In the Dark Night Sky

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Author's Notes: "In the Dark Night Sky," is a collaborated poem written by both Liam McDaid and me. It's a special cosmic fantasy and allegorical write, which expresses the ultimate wonder of God's Universe (or Cosmos) and all of the things that go in to making the "Dark Night Sky" so special as a "Pale Moon" crests across its horizon reflecting "God's Starlight." Enjoy this very special write!! (Gary Bateman - November 17, 2015) (Unrhymed Quatrain)  

Categories:  allegory, change, destiny, fantasy, future, god, and symbolism.

In the Dark Night Sky

In the Dark Night Sky, a “Pale Moon” now arises suddenly, 
With clouds of ice sparkling in a frozen-cold ring around it; 
While your bright, rosy-cheeked face appears as a paste-like
Image of a grinning and laughing White Dwarf so happy!
 
A Million-Times-Brighter-Hell-Hot Supernova emerges now, 
With a colossal colored-array of jewels firmly fixed upon the
Trajectory of a brilliant star trailing and exploding its waves,
As it shakes its cosmic dust on all of your light-filled dreams! 

Divinity travels through my veins like warm blood free-flowing;
And as one radiant supercharged beauty kisses God’s very face,
She finds His divine and infinite picture—His view of our Cosmos,  
Where the souls of Mankind seek the final spirit of their being!
 
Wild Moon Dogs howl joyous echoes bouncing into an infinity, 
As they choose to dance to an ancient song of peace and love. 
This is the final message of the pale moon’s image cresting now
Lonely across the Dark Night Sky as it reflects God’s Starlight!

Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem
Copyright © All Rights Reserved – November 17, 2015 
(Unrhymed Quatrain)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 11/19/2015 9:13:00 AM
A breathtaking beauty indeed my very dear supertalented poet friends, Gary and Liam. What else can I say is a big round of applause to both of you and for this outstanding piece plus a 10 for each! I super love it and enjoyed emensely the read. Thank you, thnk you sooo much! love lots and big hugs, Leonora (I'll be back soon again to read more if you don't mind. God bless. Good night)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/19/2015 3:44:00 PM
Hello Again Dear Leonora!! I can see that you're following our fantasy writes now too. Great!! It looks like Liam and I painted the right picture with one. (Feel free to look at some of the other ones we've done, if you have any time to so.) I really like your "10" rating for us. You're immensely nice!! We have another one of these fantasy writes following in the next few days that Liam will be posting this next time. Continued best wishes and cheers, Gary
Date: 11/17/2015 2:38:00 PM
thank you dorian and lin also for the beautiful comments bless you both
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/17/2015 7:52:00 PM
You're very welcome.
Date: 11/17/2015 2:30:00 PM
your pen sparkled in this gary such a deep pleasure writing this with you pal passing you a warm smile thanks
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/17/2015 7:51:00 PM
I must congratulate you, as well, Liam. Very impressive Quatrain.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/17/2015 7:29:00 PM
Thanks Liam Mate!! It was always a pleasure as usual when we have the chance and opportunity to team up and do interesting and perceptive writes of this nature. I really liked how this one turned out too!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/17/2015 8:09:00 AM
Hi Gary n' Liam! Wow!This is a very beautiful,outstanding,enchanting, amazing poem that you've painted here in Quatrains,my dearest friends.Just dazzling!A masterpiece!So very beautifully written.Incredible imagery!Just awesome! Great collaboration! Just excellent!Wonderful piece! Perfectly done!Very cosmic for sure.Just beautiful!I truly enjoy it!Your pens are truly mighty golden!A 7+ + + to each!A Fav!Wishing you both a very lovely week!In His light God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs! xoxox D.^O^
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/17/2015 7:32:00 PM
Thanks as always Dear One "D" -- This one did turn out very well. And thanks too for the Seven +++ and the FAV!! This was a fun write for both Liam and me. (More of these to follow too in the future!!) Cheers and Best Dear "D" . . . G!!
Date: 11/17/2015 7:35:00 AM
A very nice collaboration, Gary. The last verse brought the whole writing to fruition, and ingenious contrast between the dark sky and pale moon.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/17/2015 7:26:00 PM
Thanks Dear Lin for your read here of my and Liam's collaborated effort. (We team up from time to time to do some special theme or topical writes.) I'm very pleased on behalf of both of us that you liked this poem!! Best Always, Gary
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