In Response To My First Poem

In response to my first poem


Coherent thoughts- posted 16/5/13

Truth could not be eclipsed, And you said it was a joke. 
There was a mystical feeling,Behind your saying that you didn't care. 
I could feel obscure pain beneath, And you said it was alright . 
A desire was shrouded, Once you said I should leave you alone. 
An Imperceivable feeling was sensed, And you said you didn't know. 
I could feel you in disguise, There was a silence of deep sea water. 


New poem 

 
Unmatched words
looks can't defy,
I can well perceive
even as you deny,
Rhyming of thoughts
the heart spies.

How long can you veil the truth 
and let it go in humour,
The caring, the emotion
can't be a rumour,
To stay lonely 
and snub desires,
Pretence to beloved
can't ever douse fire !




Written Sept 30th, 2015
For contest by Silent one

Awarded 5th place win

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 10/24/2015 3:42:00 AM
Very well written. A 7 for sure :)
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Date: 10/14/2015 12:46:00 PM
A 7! Liked your response! Agree with you not to "douse ever a fire."
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Date: 10/10/2015 5:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with these poems that so well express deep emotions!
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Date: 10/9/2015 1:29:00 AM
way to go in this contest, Dr. Sharma! BIG congrats to you.
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Date: 10/3/2015 9:32:00 PM
wow, loved this, no wonder you won!!! hugs!!
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Date: 10/2/2015 12:59:00 AM
Dr Upma, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT
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Date: 10/1/2015 4:17:00 PM
Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 10/1/2015 2:57:00 PM
Upma, congratulations on your win with these beauties and thanks for visiting my poem, in response ...
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Date: 10/1/2015 9:40:00 AM
Dear Dr Upma....so full of longing. Lovely call to the beloved to wake up. Congrats on your win....
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Date: 10/1/2015 8:25:00 AM
These are both steeped in emotion, congratulations on a fine win.
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Date: 10/1/2015 3:40:00 AM
Dear Upma, Your decision to put "douse fire" was a good one - it made me want to read the poem again, to absorb it. Congratulations on your win! Julia, with my kind regards.
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Date: 9/30/2015 10:29:00 PM
Congrats upma on your win! Love, Balveen
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:51:00 PM
My friend, big congrats on your win!
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:50:00 PM
Nice win Dr. Sharma
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:49:00 PM
Dr. Upma, congratulations on your awesome win:-)Alexis
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Date: 9/30/2015 7:25:00 PM
Wisdom is found in the truth! Awesome writes and win, big congrats! Hugs
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:40:00 PM
Beautifully penned response Dr Sharma congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/30/2015 3:56:00 PM
Well written response..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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