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In My Shoes

You said you wanted to walk in my shoes. It could be tricky, too tight or too loose. You’d wobble and hobble just like a goose who trips o'er laces, gets many a bruise when making merry and drinking much booze. Be warned that my life is hardly a cruise, I cannot afford to pick and to choose. I live on my own; I am a recluse! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Monorhyme Mania Sponsor: John Hamilton © 25th August 2016

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John Michaels

Date: 5/13/2017 9:21:00 AM

Great monorhyme, Paul. Nice splash of humour, entwined with a more serious note; walking in someone else's shoes (be they actual or metaphorical) is never easy! All the best, John.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/13/2017 2:01:00 PM

It's said that passing shoes on to somebody else is not good for the feet! Perhaps in that case it's best to walk barefooted:) Thanks & Regards ~ paul

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 9/3/2016 3:35:00 PM

Walking in others shoes can be dangerous, Paul. Prefer my own. If I trip, then the blame is mine. At the moment I am having foot problems – arthritis is setting in. So far I am enduring the mild pain but in coming years I expect it will get worse. Of well, will just have to live with it. Best to you. / M

Paul Callus
Date: 9/3/2016 3:46:00 PM

Sorry about your arthritis, Maurice:( They say that it can be quite painful...I hope yours will be lenient with you! I agree with you...best to keep our shoes on, at least our feet get used to them:) Regards // paul

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 8/31/2016 7:42:00 AM

Congrats Paul, for your placement with this deep, wonderful piece!! ;-)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/31/2016 3:44:00 PM

Thank you, Teddy! All the best. // paul

Lu Loo

Date: 8/30/2016 3:35:00 PM

Paul...so creative and love the take on the contest! congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Paul Callus
Date: 8/31/2016 3:40:00 PM

Glad you liked my light fun poem, Laura:) Thank you for the nice comments and congrats. :) paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/30/2016 1:21:00 AM

Soup mail. Congrats on your win Paul! ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2016 3:03:00 PM

Thank you Connie. As you already know by now I answered your s.m. Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe

Date: 8/29/2016 9:28:00 PM

Congrats, Paul, this is a fun poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2016 2:54:00 PM

Thank you Agnes; sometimes a pinch of humour is needed to distract us from more serious things! Regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/29/2016 7:48:00 PM

Hi Paul, It always good to see you on the winners list. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2016 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Alexis. It was a pleasure to also see your name on the winners' list:) Regards // paul

Lin Lane

Date: 8/29/2016 6:49:00 PM

Well done and congratulations on this one, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2016 2:52:00 PM

Thank you, Lin. Pleased to see you back:) Regards // paul

Winged Warrior

Date: 8/29/2016 4:36:00 PM

Congrats!!! my friend...well deserved...god bless...^WW^

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2016 2:52:00 PM

Thank you WW. Sending blessings your way, too. Regards // paul

John Hamilton

Date: 8/29/2016 4:34:00 PM

Thanks Paul, was a great write, thanks for your entry, congrats on a fine placement!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2016 2:07:00 PM

Thank you for having me on your winners' list, John. You had some really good entries. ~ Regards // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 8/28/2016 1:39:00 AM

With your talents you'd make a lousy recluse, Paul, far too gragarious. Fun write, good luck in the contest. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 8/28/2016 4:54:00 AM

Thank you, Viv:) A fun write it is....and oh, you forget to add your shoe size:) ~ have a nice day ~ Regards // paul

Chris Hagy

Date: 8/27/2016 3:45:00 PM

Ha!...I wear a size eleven shoe...big foot for a girl of 5ft 8! I know this is really about life and not shoes, but it reminded me of other women trying to wear my shoes...and there's something to be said for living simple and alone!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/27/2016 5:35:00 PM

Yep, a woman's eleven would be about 41/2 in European sizes...not much less than what I wear, a 43! But then, you are a big girl:) as to your second comment, I prefer the quiet simple life. Thank you for a pleasant visit. Regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/26/2016 2:29:00 PM

Somehow, by poetic magic, you seem to have MY shoes!!!! :) great write Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 5:05:00 PM

I'll have to go and check out my shoes, Arthur, must have put on yours by mistake...or is it the other way round?:) Thanks for dropping by, my friend. Regards // paul

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/26/2016 1:27:00 PM

A 7 for this witty, clever poem Paul! Janice

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 4:26:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Janice:) Regards // paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/26/2016 12:20:00 PM

You got witty and silly and it worked! An enjoyable, fun read, Paul, and that is always a delight. I can't see friendly you as a recluse, I think you'd start chatting with plants and things. Aw, there's a poem idea. Good luck in all things ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 4:30:00 PM

It must be my age playing tricks on me, CayCay:)) Joking apart, life would be so monotonous were we to omit humour from it! Thank you for a most pleasant visit....looking forward to your next poem..."The Man Who Chatted with Plants":) ~ Have a lovely weekend! // paul

Carole Duet

Date: 8/25/2016 11:07:00 PM

me too....and I love this poem! It's ...amusing.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 9:33:00 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, Carole. Pleased to make your acquaintance:) Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 8/25/2016 9:14:00 PM

I like your version, Paul. Humorous and honest. Should do really well. Good luck!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 9:10:00 AM

I like your shoe version even better, Daniel...a product of life's experiences! Thank you for a pleasant visit. Regards // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/25/2016 6:02:00 PM

Very smart clever writing, that had me smiling at the funny, lively imagery :-) A terrific rhyme. :-) My best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 8:53:00 AM

Many thanks, Lynn:) So pleased to see you smiling...I'm glad you saw the funny side of it! Best regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/25/2016 5:18:00 PM

I'd toyed with a similar theme Paul as I remember an old contest - walk a mile in her shoes ... them my muse went her own way and went for humour! Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 8:33:00 AM

Our muses can be really funny, Jan. I started off with serious intentions, aimed at another contest, but then the mood changed and eventually I found myself taking part in this contest! Thank you for arriving here first...pity I didn't have the kettle on:) hugs // paul