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In Another Time

I found him slumped over his Remington No.5, no more "Elite Typing" for this poor fellow. His Fedora was on the floor beside him, flat as a pancake with a stilleto heel print in the centre of it. Other than a pair of McCalls boxers, he wasn't wearing anything. The "Besame Red Velvet Lipstick stain on his crotch, matched the color on the cigarette butts in the black ashtray on his desk. I noticed the ashtray was embosed with a logo from the stork club.

I had been to the Stork club a few times, it's over on 53rd street. Not the kinda place for an ordinary gumshoe like myself. This guy musta been a regular, there were match books all over the apartment. In a place like that you never know who you might bump into. I seen Frank there one time, he didn't give me a second look. I tried to get into the Snub room once but couldn't get past St. Peter, maybe he didn't like that I was wearing a single gold earing. 

I did some calling around, it seems the poor chump was Vincent Scott, a rich banker from Hollywood. He had been about town with a Dorthy Lamour Wanabee. She had the attitude but was a bit lacking in the looks department. Mind you for a balding middle aged banker, she was probably the Cat's Ass. Rumor was that he was planning on leaving his wife and two kiddies. Judging by the two, one way tickets to Cuba in his desk drawer, plans were well under way. I guess that bullet hole in the center of Vincent's forehead kinda spoiled his plans.
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Deschler Avatar
July 23, 2015 at 10:23 PM
The wording in this story takes me to another place in time. I love it when a poem can do that!... A very enjoyable and creative write! Congrats on a great win, Rick!
Lamoureux Avatar
July 24, 2015 at 9:58 AM
Thanks Kelly, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
A   Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 2:16 AM
Hi Richard, Congrats on Carol's story, poem CONTEST. Always ~~ LINDA ~~
Lamoureux Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 8:50 AM
Thanks Linda.
A  Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 12:30 AM
RICHARD,, Congratulations on your awesome story win. Love SKAT
Lamoureux Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 8:50 AM
Thanks SKAT.
Allison Avatar
July 13, 2015 at 2:48 PM
dropping back with my congrats Richard great to re read this again:-) hugs Jan xx
Lamoureux Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 8:51 AM
Thanks Jan.
Guzzi Avatar
December 29, 2014 at 9:00 AM
I love it too. I hope you fared well in the contest? Thanks for stopping by my work. Light & Love & Happy New Year
Lamoureux Avatar
December 29, 2014 at 10:07 AM
I just checked, I guess it didn't make the cut.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 29, 2014 at 9:23 AM
Thanks Debbie. ;0)
Manassian Avatar
December 14, 2014 at 12:04 AM
Your descriptive words here were awesome, Rick. I didn't know there was a detective hiding in you somewhere. Hmmmmm. You sure fit the part, Mr Lamoureux. :) Good luck, my dear.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 14, 2014 at 7:11 PM
Ha ha, thanks. Probably those movies I watched as a kid.
Hicks Avatar
December 13, 2014 at 7:31 PM
Wow, so different, Richard! A completely different side of you that I haven't read. Would make a great opening to a murder mystery. The anticipation and build up was well thought out - I didn't even connect the dots that you were talking about a dead person until the very last sentence, actually. Well done!
Lamoureux Avatar
December 14, 2014 at 7:15 PM
Thanks Tim, just trying to mix things up a bit. I'm glad you like it.
Roberts Avatar
December 13, 2014 at 1:52 AM
Come on hurry up write the next chapter please, I await with anticipation....Seren
Lamoureux Avatar
December 13, 2014 at 10:08 AM
Thanks Seren, I'll have to see if my muse has more to say.
Meier-Hans Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 10:51 PM
Fantastic story Richard. You should do well with this but I still wish you good luck.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 13, 2014 at 10:06 AM
I am always happy to accept luck, thanks Brenda.
Vaso Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 8:49 PM
You have outdone yourself here, this confirms my previous comments, you sir are an an expert story teller! Loved this!
Lamoureux Avatar
December 13, 2014 at 10:05 AM
You are kind Arthur, I wish I could favorite a comment.
Hamilton Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 5:31 PM
great story Rick gl in contest hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
December 13, 2014 at 10:02 AM
Thanks Shadow.
Kayode Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 12:58 PM
This is so sweet and so detailed:..other than a pair of McCalls Boxers.., I also like the way you used "gumshoe" here ,above all, your detective prowess is great... this is nice Richard...huggs
Lamoureux Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 1:25 PM
Thanks Kayode. A hug back to you my friend.
Sirak Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 10:01 AM
Did you write those dime store detective novels and never tell us? This is great. Love the Dorothy Lamour reference.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 10:06 AM
Who knows maybe she is a distant relative of mine.
Chircop Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 8:07 AM
This is a different theme and I love the way you did it.Leaving a mystery to be solved ,and the reader in suspense.WoW!Charma
Lamoureux Avatar
December 12, 2014 at 9:01 AM
Thanks Charmaine, I had fun with this one.
Callus Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 11:07 AM
Kept me hooked, Richard...maybe we can have a follow up to this one! Keen to know how it's going to continue...and end! // paul
Lamoureux Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 5:09 PM
It's a mystery to me as well.
Bear Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 9:27 AM
Are you going to solve the murder? Would hate for the bad guy/girl to get away Waiting for the sequel See you soon Love Mom
Lamoureux Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 5:15 PM
One more day mom! Love ya.
Thirtyseven Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 6:24 AM
A great read. Enjoyed it muchly, just enough to get us in, and leave us hanging. Well done, nice style. Will we see more? Best of luck in the comp.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 7:43 AM
Thanks Scott. I will have to give thought to wether there will be a sequel. Based on the lack of response the likelihood is no but you never know what mood might strike me.
Meade Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 8:41 PM
That old letter opener in the neck does not make for a good day!! Loved the Cat's Ass comment!! best of luck my friend.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 11, 2014 at 7:44 AM
Thanks muchly David.
Allison Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 4:49 PM
very moody and atmospheric Richard with great imagery - good luck:-) Hugs Jan xx
Lamoureux Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 5:01 PM
Thanks Jan, I did a bit of research for this one. It was fun to write.
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