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In a Split Second

In a split second, life can be snuffed Unforeseen events cause misery Why this is so, ‘tis a great mystery Of such our lives are suitably stuffed None of us should ever be bluffed Accidents are main features of history. In a split second, The role of accidents is often sloughed We are victims of information trickery, Believing what we hear becomes primary Facetiously, going through life chuffed, In a split second. (R a) b b a a b R a b b a R)
Written October 1, 2022 [Rondine, a form I learned from writings of Jeff Kyser]

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Date: 10/4/2022 9:17:00 AM
We can all be easily fooled in this way "We are victims of information trickery," and I am sure I am one of them who is tricked.
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 10/4/2022 11:10:00 AM
Oh, I think we all are, Caren. It is quite prevalent today in the news media.
Date: 10/2/2022 3:13:00 PM
Gershon beat me to the same opinion I share with him. Thanks for sharing Milton...
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 10/2/2022 5:58:00 PM
Yes, Gershon does make a marvelous point. Perhaps I should try to write a poem like this with a more positive message. I'm sure one will come.
Date: 10/1/2022 8:32:00 PM
Just like -- and in a split second, our lives can be changed and rearranged for the better! (I think we overfocus on the bad stuff). ~ Mr. P for Positive
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 10/1/2022 9:16:00 PM
Actually, this is quite true, gw. It works both ways. Oh dear, what was I thinking???? Accentuate the positive; eliminate the negative!
Date: 10/1/2022 6:34:00 PM
Nice rap, love it! Rondine is it? This may be the form most rappers need to list their poems when unknown form. You may be onto something Milt. ~Anaya
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 10/1/2022 6:40:00 PM
Could be, Anaya. It does have the rap beat to it. Finding suitable rhymes is a big tricky. Thanks for your comment.
Date: 10/1/2022 4:39:00 PM
Very true, my friend. Interesting form of poetry, Milt. Thanks for sharing, Bill
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 10/1/2022 6:24:00 PM
Thanks, Bill, I was introduced to it by Jeff and wanted to try it for myself. I love working with new and complicated forms.
Date: 10/1/2022 2:37:00 PM
There you go - an unusual rhyme pattern, but it works. Been messing with a few others today as well. They all have some specific meter requirements as well, but I kind of enjoy that too.
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 10/1/2022 6:25:00 PM
I enjoyed trying this one, Jeff. I had a time coming up with the rhymes, but I think it worked. The other one sounds somewhat like a modified Limerick or Quintilla, I thought. I enjoyed yours more than the ones I read in Writer's Digest. Gosh, I haven't seen a copy of that magazine for a long, long time. I had a brief piece published in it years ago.