Timothy Hicks Poet Grook

In a Perfect World

In a perfect world
everyone's visions
would come to fruition,
but of course that couldn't happen
(given our nature)
and thus would end up in contradiction.

Perhaps it's because
we ask the wrong question,
thinking world means You or Me.
When in actuality
(when analyzed thoroughly)
World means We.



Written February 14th, 2016
For Contest: In a Perfect World hosted by Catie Lindsey

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Probir Gupta February 20, 2016 at 5:39 AM Exactly, and put through poetic lines in a nice brevity. Timothy Hicks February 24, 2016 at 12:04 AM Thanks Probir, for your visit ... always appreciated!

Reason A. Poteet February 19, 2016 at 7:11 AM You have sparked our thoughts today. Perfect can mean complete and that involves all of us. Love that first verse, you take us on a trip that ends in disaster. Great brevity, Tim, recalling Michael Jackson's hit, We are the World. Timothy Hicks February 19, 2016 at 9:48 PM Very astute and well-thought response, Reason. Thank you. I haven't heard that song, but I do like his Man in the Mirror!

Steve Grammatico February 19, 2016 at 5:49 AM An excellent sentiment well-expressed, Timothy. Timothy Hicks February 19, 2016 at 9:44 PM Thanks again Steve. Sentimental is a good word for it ...

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 19, 2016 at 1:13 AM Awesome poetry n win Timothy.. big congrats! Timothy Hicks February 19, 2016 at 9:43 PM Thanks Upma! :)

Poet Destroyer A February 18, 2016 at 10:22 PM Timothy, Congrats on your "Perfect World WIN." LINDA Timothy Hicks February 19, 2016 at 9:40 PM Thanks Linda! I was happy to see my poem up there, especially since there was so many other really good ones, wasn't sure.

Susan Gentry February 18, 2016 at 6:20 PM Congratulations on your win! So true... perception. Enjoyed reading this. :) Timothy Hicks February 18, 2016 at 9:58 PM Thanks Susan! You seem to have gotten the message :)

Lin Lane February 18, 2016 at 6:04 PM Well done and congratulations on this one, Timothy. Timothy Hicks February 18, 2016 at 9:58 PM Thank you Lin!

Beautiful Scars February 18, 2016 at 5:59 PM Timothy, congrats on your placement in the contest *smiles*-luloo Timothy Hicks February 18, 2016 at 6:00 PM Looks like I just barely made it through ... cool :) Thanks for letting me know (I forget to check) ...

Andrea Dietrich February 17, 2016 at 5:41 PM awesome second verse, Timothy. Yes, this is how I feel about the silliness of a perfect world. Timothy Hicks February 17, 2016 at 10:12 PM Thanks Andrea! I didn't feel like writing something super long, so I tried to keep it short ... lol. Appreciate your visits, and seeing your smiling profile pic (are you at the beach in that picture?)

Paul Callus February 16, 2016 at 11:18 AM The one who envisaged a perfect world, Sir Thomas More, was executed...and that shows how right your conclusion is in the 1st stanza! Again the correct answer is given in the 2nd stanza in which 'we' wins over egoism/individuality. A very good example of a Grook! // paul Timothy Hicks February 17, 2016 at 2:00 AM Thanks Paul! I'll have to look more into this Thomas More fellow, as I don't believe I've heard of him before.

Demetrios Trifiatis February 16, 2016 at 7:13 AM A perfect world to be achieved by imperfect beings is an utopia! Let us construct a less imperfect world if we can, but even this, as you say, is not easy to be achieved! Well-done my friend, Timothy! Good luck! Timothy Hicks February 17, 2016 at 1:59 AM Thanks Demetrios. I appreciate your thoughtful comments, and gracious spirit!

Amelia Gee February 15, 2016 at 3:12 PM Good example for contest! Timothy Hicks February 16, 2016 at 2:46 AM Thanks...

Emile Pinet February 15, 2016 at 1:29 PM Your word choices elegantly define what you wish to capture and convey to the reader. Well written. Emile. Timothy Hicks February 16, 2016 at 2:46 AM You've gotten to the heart of the matter, my friend! I'm glad my words were received and that you got something out of it. Thank you!

Suzanne Delaney February 15, 2016 at 12:01 PM Human nature is so perplexing but your simple solution is so full of wisdom. More than one path to perfection and 'We,' does wipe out selfishness. This will be a winner. Timothy Hicks February 16, 2016 at 2:44 AM You're always so kind and thoughtful, my dear poet friend. We shall see how the contest goes!

Eileen Manassian February 15, 2016 at 10:13 AM Lovely, Timothy. :) What a great message. Hugs Timothy Hicks February 16, 2016 at 2:43 AM Thanks as ever Eileen!

Richard Lamoureux February 15, 2016 at 8:47 AM I like it! Good luck in the contest. Timothy Hicks February 16, 2016 at 2:43 AM Thank you Richard! Though I think I enjoyed yours more, nonetheless I wanted to write something a little bit different, and keep it short.