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In a Pale Cringe

Mind-lashing words steep me deep into your olid casket of rancid oil, soul, my blistering sore, gangrenous from your slow simmer to break-neck boil. Pus green rupturing, your infection oozes into my core’s moaning cracks; fissures fitfully cleaved, leftovers rank, from molten hell-raising attacks. In a pale cringe, I sniffle on the putrefied edge of your furious fringe, myself, I try to throw away from the lava flow of your stoked madman's singe. Words spewing bitter spit, pinning me in place like a pitchfork’s sharpened tine, skin splitting, you stripping me to my bones, black burned in your raw acid brine. Verbiage vile you feast on, searing my sorry spirit a ragged crisped char, my emotional remains you savor, flavored of your poisonous black tar. Stew, I secretly seethe in my sour juices of pitiful pain and shame, yesterday - today - tomorrow; endlessly enduring life-swindled shell-game. I vow to see you in Hell, when I usher vengeful death to your darkened door, day of reckoning, when this shattered blue-glass-shard shadow, can take no more. Hot-branded, begrimed in your name, wounds of my being weep a diseased seep, essence; be mercifully cleansed and healed in the peace of my eternal sleep. Susan Ashley August 18, 2017 ~ Third Place ~ Contest: Unsheath Your Sword (Premiere) Sponsor: John Lawless

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Date: 11/1/2018 8:36:00 AM
Such a great penned piece with super imagery throughout Susan, Excellent indeed. Blessings, Gordon
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Susan Ashley
Date: 11/2/2018 12:19:00 PM
Thank you, Gordon, for your wonderful and generous comments and for your lovely visit, both are certainly appreciated. I'm pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/23/2018 11:40:00 PM
Remind me to NEVER get on your bad side, Susan. Congrats on your superbly written poem and your well deserved podium finish.
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Date: 9/28/2018 8:22:00 AM
Thank you. Line, for your awesome comments and your kindhearted congrats. Its always a pleasure to hear from you my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/23/2018 7:35:00 PM
Wow, Susan, this is really some amazing rant like no other! Very powerfully written and so deserving of your well-deserved podium win! Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/23/2018 10:54:00 PM
Thank you, Sandra, for your wonderful comments and heartwarming congrats. Both are cherished. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/23/2018 4:31:00 PM
Congratulations on you win, Susan ...Eve
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Date: 9/23/2018 10:53:00 PM
Thank you, Eve, for the kindness of your lovely comments and the warm congrats.. Best wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/22/2018 9:19:00 PM
Couldn't have imagined a sweetie like you writing something like this, but hey, it's quite the write!! Congrats on your win in the contest, my dear friend. Best wishes, gw
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Susan Ashley
Date: 9/23/2018 10:02:00 AM
Thank you, Gershon. You never know what darkness lies beneath this sweet facade.. lol! Thank you for your wonderful comments and heartwarming congrats.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 9/22/2018 6:46:00 PM
Hey! twisy sisy...way to go!...congrats on you're excellent placement...should have been higher I think...love & lashing...^WW^
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:52:00 AM
Thank you, WW, for your awesome comments and your heartwarming congrats. Your gracious presence is always so appreciated bro bro! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 9/22/2018 12:40:00 PM
WHEW! So dramatically descriptive, Susan! CONGRATS!! Janice
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:47:00 AM
Thank you Janice. Your wonderful comments and kind congrats bring a smile and are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/22/2018 12:21:00 PM
Very strongly written, Susan. Gorgeous wording. Congrats.
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:45:00 AM
Thank you Dale. Your esteemed and valued comments are truly appreciated as are your kind congrats.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/22/2018 12:10:00 PM
n incredibly strong poem, Susan-- congrats on your win!
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:44:00 AM
Thank you L.J. Your esteemed comments are truly appreciated as are your kind congrats.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 9/22/2018 11:56:00 AM
WOW.....JUST ... WELL....WOW. This is one hellacious rant Susan. Thanks for sharing in the contest
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:43:00 AM
Thank you, John, for my wonderful placement in your contest and your awesome comments. I am thrilled to be listed with such talented poets and I'm pleased that you enjoyed my pen's slice and dice. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 12/1/2017 5:14:00 PM
Full marks for your exquisite rhyme, Susan. The content is deep, emotionally felt and very expressive. Nobody should be made to suffer in such a way! There is never an excuse for abuse, in whatever guise it comes. ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 12/1/2017 9:06:00 PM
Thank you, Paul, for your comments. I completely agree that nobody; man, woman and most especially a child should ever be subjected to this kind of cruelty. I'm glad you found this piece to be so stirring, I truly wanted it to be. Thank you for you sharing your insightful thoughts my friend. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 11/22/2017 2:28:00 AM
Wow! A very powerful, emotional, evocative and compelling write, Susan. The vivid imagery and deep metaphors propel your sad story to its tragic conclusion. Great job! Kind regards, John.
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Date: 11/22/2017 1:36:00 PM
John, your enthusiastic response to my poem thrills me. Thank you for your favorable and invigorating comment. Your lovely visit and wonderful words are received gratefully with a smile! ~Susan
Date: 8/20/2017 10:22:00 AM
Dark, deep write, Susan, wonder what inspired this one:)
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Susan Ashley
Date: 8/20/2017 11:06:00 AM
Hi Jo, your comment is so appreciated. This poem was written about emotional abuse and I wanted to give it a voice. Many thanks for your time to read and comment and for your visit :)
Date: 8/20/2017 6:08:00 AM
A deep and dark write Susan..well penned...GL in the contest
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Date: 8/20/2017 11:09:00 AM
Thank you Joseph for your kind comment and much appreciation for your visit. Glad you enjoyed :)
Date: 8/19/2017 6:19:00 AM
A thinker--very intense!
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Date: 8/19/2017 3:51:00 PM
Thank you for the wonderful comment and the visit Vijay! I'm glad you liked the intensity :)
Date: 8/18/2017 10:39:00 PM
WOW! Susan, this is as deep as the Pacific Ocean. Lol! It's so smackin amazingly powerful! Hugs :)
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Date: 8/18/2017 11:01:00 PM
Hi Akkina, thank you for your strongly felt and encouraging comment. I'm so happy that you liked it and you thought it was deep. Many thanks and appreciation for your visit and sharing your thoughts :)
Date: 8/18/2017 7:27:00 PM
This is very vivid in imagery and the emotion it conveys is profound. I hope there is only happiness in your life now. :^)
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Date: 8/18/2017 7:39:00 PM
Hi Corwin, there is nothing but happiness in my life with my loving husband and children who are the loves of my life. Thank you for your wonderful and generous comment. I wrote this to highlight emotional abuse. I'm happy you enjoyed it :)

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