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'Twas long ago in a castle on a hill, I lay abed on my lavender pillow. A soft breeze stirred my thoughts as it whispered through yon willow. Deep in purple twilight moments, on the verge of sleep it seems, I rode upon a white stallion behind the man of my moonlight dreams. He was a knight in shining armor, his hair as dark as midnight skies. In moonlight I saw the width of his shoulders, and the stars in his eyes. He breached the high castle wall and knelt beside the foot of my bed. A soft smile touched his lips. "Princess, I love you," was all he said. Shadowed mist closed around us but I felt no need to be frightened. Once his arms closed around me, my need to be loved was heightened. The castle on a hill was filled with lots of love, music, and laughter. True love had found its way to me: a revered love to last forever after. 'Twas long ago in a castle on a hill, I lay next to him in an ebony bed. My knight was turning into a stranger I would soon come to dread. My mind became unclear about his feelings, and I was full of doubt, What happened to my knight, the one I didn't want to live without? His suit of armor was now tarnished; his white steed had run away. He told me I should leave, and in the next breath he begged me to stay. Illusions and delusions in my heart. Life was unravelling at the seams. I knew I was losing the love I had known, the man of my relucent dreams. He slipped out of my arms and stood at the window of the castle tower. One of us was descending into madness as silence lingered by the hour. Our chamber had grown so cold, no words were spoken to soften the pain. My tears fell in silence, as abundantly as the Spring's profusion of rain. 'Twas late night in a castle on a hill, I lay abed on my lavender pillow. A soft breeze stirred my thoughts as it whispered through yon willow. Alone in the castle tower, I grew fearful of ever again closing my eyes. By light of day and dark of night I searched for truth but found only lies. I prodded and examined my mind and heart for each worn memory of what we had shared, of what was, was not, or of what might yet be. The answer was to go on living, so I picked up what was left of my heart, sorely wounded but still beating, although it was missing a vital part. I dared to save my own soul from despair, weeping with dismal sorrow. I still dream my knight returns to me. It gives me hope for each tomorrow. At Winter's end he'll ride up to my castle wall and once again say to me, "Princess, I love you. Please forgive me. Our love is not a mere fantasy." <<<<<<>>>>>>> April 20th, 2016

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Date: 5/1/2016 4:07:00 AM
congrats well written xxxx
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Date: 4/29/2016 12:19:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement with such a deserving write!!!
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Date: 4/29/2016 7:29:00 AM
Thanks so very much, Brian.
Date: 4/28/2016 11:41:00 PM
You covered all the emotions of romantic love. Congratulations on such a smooth flowing entry. Loved it SuZ
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Date: 4/29/2016 7:28:00 AM
Hi Suz, and thank you for so nice a comment.
Date: 4/28/2016 12:00:00 PM
'Twas a fine win Princess, my heart felt congratulations. Now you've got me sounding like the Bard...
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Date: 4/28/2016 12:33:00 PM
As the Bard you sound very nice. Thanks, Sir Charlie.
Date: 4/28/2016 8:34:00 AM
Congrats on your finest slot! A realistic portrayal of life!
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Date: 4/28/2016 12:33:00 PM
Thank you very much, Balveen, for such a kind comment.
Date: 4/27/2016 6:10:00 PM
Lin, you told a beautiful story with beautiful rhyme flow... congrats on your top win in the castle contest :)-luloo
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Date: 4/28/2016 7:13:00 AM
Thanks, Luloo. I'm pleased that you like it.
Date: 4/27/2016 5:06:00 PM
An intriguing story Lin...Congrats on a fine win...
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Date: 4/27/2016 5:22:00 PM
Thank you, Joseph...Nice comment.
Date: 4/27/2016 3:45:00 PM
Congrats well written a beautiful story x
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Date: 4/27/2016 5:21:00 PM
Thanks so very much, Wendy.
Date: 4/27/2016 1:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this emotional poem. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:49:00 PM
Thanks ever so much, Joyce.
Date: 4/27/2016 12:51:00 PM
Congrats on your great win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:49:00 PM
Thanks for the congrats, BL. I appreciate your acknowledgement.
Date: 4/27/2016 12:49:00 PM
Hi Lin, my heartfelt congratulations to you on your well-deserved First Place win for this amazing 'castle on the hill' poem. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:48:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Sandra. I'll take those hugs, too.
Date: 4/27/2016 12:36:00 PM
Congratulations Lin on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:48:00 PM
Thank you very much, Nayda. I appreciate the honor.
Date: 4/21/2016 3:46:00 PM
The ups and downs of a compelling love story. Joy...doubts... disillusion, followed by hope for the future. Well done, Lin! ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 4/22/2016 8:18:00 AM
Thank you for such kind compliments, Paul. It's a bit long, but I'm glad it held your interest.
Date: 4/20/2016 8:41:00 PM
An enchanting love story Lin... Enjoyed...A7
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Date: 4/22/2016 8:17:00 AM
I'm happy to have enchanted you for a moment. Thank you, Joseph.
Date: 4/20/2016 7:37:00 PM
Lin I love this, it is like reading a story, brilliant, I can get so involved in it, I do get a lot of enjoyment reading poems and stories, I also love reading Cheryl Dunn's stories, have you checked her out, very well written, take care ......Vera
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Date: 4/22/2016 8:16:00 AM
Thanks so very much for such sweet and welcomed words, Vera.
Date: 4/20/2016 4:14:00 PM
Quite an epic tale of love Lin...it held together well from beginning to end. J.
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Date: 4/20/2016 4:24:00 PM
Thanks so very much, J. I'm glad it held your attention.
Date: 4/20/2016 3:00:00 PM
I enjoyed the read this morning. Nicely written Lin. We can always dream. Regards, Craig
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Lin Lane
Date: 4/20/2016 4:23:00 PM
Thank you, Craig. Whether full fledged dreams while sleeping or a daydream...we CAN always dream.

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