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Immortal Torment

"Immortal Torment" wolves would howl and demons would prowl as gold full Moon invaded a starless sky hushed a muffled cry as human spirits evaporated. pathways of gold grew decaying mold once old clock chimed dark midnight hour visions from Hell cast gory spell flying bats from belfry tower. fangs fell free 'neath dead skeleton tree as creamy clouds turned to misty dust a beast of dread rare form, undead, swooped in on wild wind gust. enraged in craze it struck in rage a sweet young thing was blood drained a bright soul lost for centuries cost a lifeless figure in bondage, chained. a wooden tomb secured her womb caged by a vampire seed her joy was none as she bore a son who ... on her bones ... did feed. she writhed in pain an evil stain left her a hollow shell immortal torment grew as each breath she drew she hoped she would expel. but time stood still and broke her will doomed to a hidden life her darkest dreams erased sunbeams as she prayed for feel of knife. *For S.K.A.T.'s Eerie Poem Tale Contest. *Please read my personal comment for more details.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 3/13/2014 2:07:00 AM
i remember this one, ~Love you forever my bff....... RIP Sweet Linda-Marie ~SKAT~
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Date: 9/16/2012 11:56:00 PM
soupmail!!!!
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Date: 7/29/2012 9:53:00 PM
Hello,,My BFF~ LINDA, i'm a little late congratulating all my sisters past contest. I'm enjoying all the DARK EERIE POETRY TALES. entries..*Looks like it was a fun CONTEST* Thank you for the entertainment :-) very eeeerie of you... take care~PD
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Date: 7/27/2012 1:11:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in ~SKAT~'s "Dark Eerie" contest Linda-Marie. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/26/2012 4:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning write Linda Marie xx
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Date: 7/25/2012 10:36:00 AM
Linda-Marie super congrats on your win, excellent write...keep those vampires away..David
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Date: 7/17/2012 10:03:00 PM
Linda, can't you do "about my poem?" I was clicking on that part to see what you wrote and then I notice you had made your remark at the bottom. you should try that other option if you are able!
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Date: 7/17/2012 10:02:00 PM
yes, this is a good definition of "eery" my friend. Let me go read what you wrote about this.
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Date: 7/16/2012 1:35:00 PM
I agree eerie..Winner material I am sure..I can't say that I enjoyed but I read..I am sure that Skat will like...Sara
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Date: 7/16/2012 12:49:00 PM
wow, I love this scary write, my friend - great to see you posting here again
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Date: 7/16/2012 10:30:00 AM
you rise to the occasion with this nightmarish explosion, sweets... winning huggs! :)
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Date: 7/16/2012 7:21:00 AM
For sure...Eerie dear poet ! And as always, your writes are filled with passion ! Have a wonderful week Linda-Marie....much love, james
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Date: 7/15/2012 12:29:00 PM
Oh, wow Linda-Marie, this is such a fantastic poem I'm in awe of its splendor! You have written one of the greatest eerie poems I've ever read my friend! The flow of this write is incredible and you rhymed it as if it was the easiest thing you've ever done! What a grandiose poem! Great Work!!
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Date: 7/15/2012 9:22:00 AM
oh and only way to kill a vampire as legend reads was to thrust a knife or stake into the dead heart of the loifeless victim..
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Date: 7/15/2012 9:16:00 AM
Sorry but About this poem is not working for me .. so.. legend has it that vampires bite their victims and hence immortal torment.. I took it step further to procreate a spawn of vampiire in this piece for added eerieness.. hope u enjoy poets ..luv..
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