Image and Reality Intertwine

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The frightful night brings evening dreams that breeze A host of thoughts to occupy my mind. While I breathe in and out melodious wheeze, Reality, with nightmares intertwine, A host of thoughts to occupy my mind, Prevent me now from sleeping fast and deep. Reality, with nightmares intertwine, To force me to my lifeless knees and weep. Prevent me now from sleeping fast and deep Hold back those demons that invade my peace: To force me to my lifeless knees and weep; To torture my straight line into a crease. Hold back those demons that invade my peace, While I breathe in and out melodious wheeze... To torture my straight line into a crease, The frightful night brings evening dreams that breeze. *** March 21, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Sara Ella

Date: 3/22/2017 9:17:00 PM

Sometimes dreams and reality are scarily hard to discern. This type of poem looks difficult to do... rather read your wonderful poetry.

Darren White
Date: 3/23/2017 1:28:00 PM

It's a delight to work on difficult rhyme and meter :)

White Wolf

Date: 3/21/2017 9:25:00 PM

I've never tried this form, and I think I'll leave it that way, Haha. But you have done an excellent job mate! So many great lines in this.

Darren White
Date: 3/22/2017 1:32:00 AM

Budgie, thank you :)

Maria Williams

Date: 3/21/2017 8:50:00 PM

A wonderful Pantoum Darren, and literally sent chills down my spine. I would give you a 10 for this if I can, however I do hope this is not a real life experience going on at the moment? Take care please. Hugs

Darren White
Date: 3/22/2017 1:31:00 AM

Hello Maria, thank you for the 10 :) I will not stop working on the Pantoum, because it's not yet completely to my satisfaction... Thank you.

Deadd Accountt

Date: 3/21/2017 6:37:00 PM

Well done, Darren. I really like the image you portrayed of a "melodious wheeze..." And " To torture my straight line to a crease"

Darren White
Date: 3/22/2017 1:29:00 AM

Thank you OP, this is a hard form of poetry to write, because you don't only have the message you want to bring, but it also massively effs up your flowing lines lol :)

Deadd Accountt
Date: 3/21/2017 6:37:00 PM

**into a crease

Roy Pett

Date: 3/21/2017 8:42:00 AM

Excellently written Pantoum Darren, this is a difficult form in my opinion, yet you have composed this which is brilliant, Roy. :))

Darren White
Date: 3/21/2017 8:58:00 AM

Thanks Roy, I love Pantoums, just like villanelles and terzanelles, for the repetition, but it also makes it hard to get a natural flowing poem. I am not yet completely satisfied with this one. It might be that I will add one or two stanzas to it, or change lines. Stay tuned :)