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I'M Too Tired To Dance

** An exercise: write a sonnet in iambic pentameter.

With heavy heart, I offer my remorse,
for I'm too tired to dance this weary eve.
The echoes of my workday's tireless chores
linger, leaving naught but fatigue's relief.

Oh, believe me, I hate to disappoint,
for the music tempts me to sway and dance.
But the hours I've toiled, each task and each point,
have drained me to a tired nudnik, perchance.

My spirit, once bright, now longs for respite,
to find solace in rest and heal my self.
Though my love for dance burns hot like cordite,
exhaustion demands I stay on the shelf.

Forgive me, my friend, tonight I must rest,
but once refreshed, we’ll fete and dance with zest.
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Webster: Nudnik = a boring person
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Andresen Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 11:15 AM
- Lovely poem :) - Dance as long as you are young, Anais ... when you grow old - you will be dizzy with pirouettes ... then you can write beautiful sonnets :) - (Close enough for me) - hugs
Vionet Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 7:45 PM
Thank you for the lovely comment =]
Gondolf Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 7:18 AM
You were close...
Vionet Avatar
June 30, 2023 at 12:09 PM
I tweaked it - now, it's PERFECT.
Gondolf Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 11:44 AM
Close enough for government work.
Vionet Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 11:02 AM
close? How close?
Gondolf Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 2:34 AM
When I’m too tired to dance I’m certainly too tired to write a sonnet in IP; my brain tends to shut down before my body does. Nice poem Anais.
Vionet Avatar
June 29, 2023 at 7:01 AM
I’m not sure that I ever wrote a proper sonnet before. So I set out to do that - THEN - as I will frequently do, I thought - what IZ iambic pentameter anyway?
Fisher Avatar
June 28, 2023 at 5:17 PM
Enjoyed your poem this evening. Your rhyming is so well done along with the story!
Vionet Avatar
June 28, 2023 at 9:12 PM
Thanks you
Meadows Avatar
June 27, 2023 at 11:13 PM
A good poem. Music and dance can cheer us up. Well done.
Vionet Avatar
June 28, 2023 at 9:12 PM
Oh, that’s true
Situation Avatar
June 27, 2023 at 7:35 PM
Reminds of war time dances. It was good enough to read.
Vionet Avatar
June 27, 2023 at 7:40 PM
Thanks, around here, where you can't swing a cat without hitting 12 poets, I'll take it =]
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