I'M About To Flat Line- I Died a Litte Inside Contest

Melancholy days is all I see,
sadness has consumed me.
The light is has disappeared,
I dwell in nothing but grief.
living has become a routine.
Today I roam without direction,
I have no purpose I just exist.
when you left me my heart broke.
I died a little bit, it hurts to go on,
I see you walking away everyday.
I miss my dance partner very much,
as we tangoed between the sheets;
every day and night, I crave you.
When you left, I died a little inside.
I'm about to flat line, please save me.
Your kiss can cure my broken heart.
without you I die a little each second.
and I'm just a shell of my former self.




2-9-19
Contest: I Died A Little Inside
Sponsor: Silent One

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 2/12/2019 10:31:00 AM
Alexis, oh such an emotional write. I felt like when my husband died, I guess I still do ~
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Date: 2/11/2019 12:33:00 PM
Emotions can seem to flat line when a loving relationship ends, Alexis. The longing comes through so well in your poem! Congratulations on your well-earned win. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 2/11/2019 12:00:00 AM
- Congratulations on your very touching poem, Alexis :) - Have a lovely new week - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/10/2019 7:18:00 PM
I like how you compared it to almost flat lining. Good one, Alexis and congrats in the contest.
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Date: 2/10/2019 4:18:00 PM
You described melancholy so well.. deep and emotive poem... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 2/11/2019 7:47:00 AM
Hi Silent, Thank you so much. I appreciate my placement in your contest:')Alexis
Date: 2/9/2019 3:11:00 PM
So much appeal in your poem..a melancholy write..emotions well expressed, Alexis.
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Date: 2/9/2019 1:08:00 PM
This is incredibly well penned; I hung on every word; feeling the sorrow and pain. It should do well in the contest; best of luck.
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Date: 2/9/2019 11:10:00 AM
Alexis, this sounds like something you have truly gone through, and it sounds awful! The sad feelings ooze into the reader, waking up other sad feelings. Nicely done, for this is a convincing poem indeed for Silent One's contest.
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