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I'M About To Flat Line- I Died a Litte Inside Contest

Melancholy days is all I see, sadness has consumed me. The light is has disappeared, I dwell in nothing but grief. living has become a routine. Today I roam without direction, I have no purpose I just exist. when you left me my heart broke. I died a little bit, it hurts to go on, I see you walking away everyday. I miss my dance partner very much, as we tangoed between the sheets; every day and night, I crave you. When you left, I died a little inside. I'm about to flat line, please save me. Your kiss can cure my broken heart. without you I die a little each second. and I'm just a shell of my former self. 2-9-19 Contest: I Died A Little Inside Sponsor: Silent One

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Constance La France

Date: 2/12/2019 10:31:00 AM

Alexis, oh such an emotional write. I felt like when my husband died, I guess I still do ~

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/11/2019 12:33:00 PM

Emotions can seem to flat line when a loving relationship ends, Alexis. The longing comes through so well in your poem! Congratulations on your well-earned win. Hugs, Carolyn

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/11/2019 12:00:00 AM

- Congratulations on your very touching poem, Alexis :) - Have a lovely new week - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/10/2019 7:18:00 PM

I like how you compared it to almost flat lining. Good one, Alexis and congrats in the contest.

Silent One

Date: 2/10/2019 4:18:00 PM

You described melancholy so well.. deep and emotive poem... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Alexis Y.
Date: 2/11/2019 7:47:00 AM

Hi Silent, Thank you so much. I appreciate my placement in your contest:')Alexis

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/9/2019 3:11:00 PM

So much appeal in your poem..a melancholy write..emotions well expressed, Alexis.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 2/9/2019 1:08:00 PM

This is incredibly well penned; I hung on every word; feeling the sorrow and pain. It should do well in the contest; best of luck.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/9/2019 11:10:00 AM

Alexis, this sounds like something you have truly gone through, and it sounds awful! The sad feelings ooze into the reader, waking up other sad feelings. Nicely done, for this is a convincing poem indeed for Silent One's contest.