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It was a miserable sultry day Humidity hung like lemons on trees heavy air filled my lungs beads of sweat clung to my skin this heat was difficult to bear and stifling to try to breathe I wanted to be relieved and wished for a cooling summer breeze I felt a sudden chill later that day a drafty wind as he walked by He moved in a brisk pace but I glimpsed the furrow of his brow Sweeping winds of change were written in frosted crystals on his callous face Without so much as a whisper the temperature dipped in my heart If this is how the cool winds blow I'd prefer the spike of Summer heat over his glacial attitude and aloof demeaner From my eyes... fell flakes of Winter snow I could not read what was in his eyes They were clouded window panes I can't even begin to surmise what brought on the change in him My lips turned blue as the ill wind blew until it penetrated my soul His looks were blocks of ice. He built a wall I kept climbing it until my pulse grew weak and then I'd tumble and fall North winds had a strong hold on him I couldn't melt his frozen heart and mine was dying from lack of warmth I took flight to save my life on a frigid night : . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . : September 1st, 2017

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Date: 9/3/2017 10:21:00 AM
So well done Lin no surprise, you got another winner, great imagery, I wrote a poem called melt your frozen heart, yours is better!
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Date: 9/3/2017 10:29:00 AM
Well now, I'll just go and read your poem and then we can debate whose is better. lol Thanks, JD.
Date: 9/2/2017 6:44:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Lin:-0 hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/3/2017 10:28:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Jan.
Date: 9/2/2017 4:35:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Lin xxx000
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Date: 9/3/2017 10:27:00 AM
Thanks so much, Mike.
Date: 9/2/2017 9:18:00 AM
Congrats, Lin!
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Date: 9/3/2017 10:27:00 AM
Thank you very sincerely, Dale.
Date: 9/2/2017 4:29:00 AM
I have 2 hrs to do what I want on the computer! So I wanted to spend them on the Soup, and catch up with my friends!Your poem in inspiring! I've sensed these feelings before too with very old girlfriends...long ago! I really enjoyed reading your tremendous piece this morning, such a special read! Your powerful words amaze me and bring to me a sense of awe throughout the work! What a remarkable poem my friend, Great Work!!
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Date: 9/2/2017 7:14:00 AM
I am honored that you took a part of your 2 hours to visit me, Russell. Thanks ever so much for your grand comments. My hope is that you'll recover quickly, so don't push yourself to do more than your doctor and PTs require of you. Hugs.
Date: 9/2/2017 12:00:00 AM
Me thinks this may be one of your best dear friend, best wishes. See you in the winners circle...
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Date: 9/2/2017 7:11:00 AM
Thank you very much for the sweet comments, Charlie.
Date: 9/1/2017 9:50:00 PM
Very strong imagery, and I can feel the pain in this! Great write Lin!
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Date: 9/2/2017 7:11:00 AM
Thank you, Arthur.
Date: 9/1/2017 5:11:00 PM
strong visuals heighten the poetic energy of this beautiful write, lin...greeat job!..huggs
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:19:00 PM
Thank you so very much, nette.
Date: 9/1/2017 4:22:00 PM
a well-written story within a very descriptive poem...you could feel the emotional tension...good luck in the contest
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:18:00 PM
Thanks for the terrific comments, Frederic. I love your new avatar!
Date: 9/1/2017 1:49:00 PM
I feel an icy chill reading your poem Lin the imagery is awesome:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:18:00 PM
Thank you for feeling it to your core and for the great comments, Jan.
Date: 9/1/2017 11:50:00 AM
Awesome write for the contest Lin; another one that drew me in! Good luck in the contest!~Che :)
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Date: 9/1/2017 2:10:00 PM
Thanks for the comments and well wishes, Cheryl.
Date: 9/1/2017 10:20:00 AM
Beautifully done my lady...your winds are blowing well lol...best wishes...^WW^
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Date: 9/1/2017 2:09:00 PM
Like dust in the wind...thanks WW.
Date: 9/1/2017 8:34:00 AM
Wow Lin, I love how you relay strength and emotions through your words... Wonderful
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:39:00 AM
I thank you for the awesome words of comment, Tim.
Date: 9/1/2017 8:17:00 AM
Wow, Lin! This is an awesome write, my friend! I "clung" on to every word! Best of luck to you in the contest
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:33:00 AM
Thanks for the comments and well wishes, Budgie.
Date: 9/1/2017 8:12:00 AM
Wow Lin, sounds like Old Man Winter to me, I'd take flight too! A good one Good Luck!
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:32:00 AM
Thanks very much, Mike. He's pretty frigid, isn't he?

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