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Ill Winds of Change

It was a miserable sultry day 
Humidity hung like lemons on trees
heavy air filled my lungs 
beads of sweat clung to my skin 
this heat was difficult to bear
and stifling to try to breathe
I wanted to be relieved and wished
for a cooling summer breeze

I felt a sudden chill later that day
a drafty wind as he walked by 
He moved in a brisk pace
but I glimpsed the furrow of his brow
Sweeping winds of change were written
in frosted crystals on his callous face

Without so much as a whisper
the temperature dipped in my heart
If this is how the cool winds blow
I'd prefer the spike of Summer heat
over his glacial attitude and aloof demeaner
From my eyes... fell flakes of Winter snow

I could not read what was in his eyes
They were clouded window panes
I can't even begin to surmise
what brought on the change in him
My lips turned blue as the ill wind blew
until it penetrated my soul  

His looks were blocks of ice. He built a wall
I kept climbing it until my pulse grew weak
and then I'd tumble and fall
North winds had a strong hold on him
I couldn't melt his frozen heart
and mine was dying from lack of warmth
I took flight to save my life on a frigid night

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 September 1st, 2017
    
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Hamilton Avatar
September 3, 2017 at 10:21 AM
So well done Lin no surprise, you got another winner, great imagery, I wrote a poem called melt your frozen heart, yours is better!
Lane Avatar
September 3, 2017 at 10:29 AM
Well now, I'll just go and read your poem and then we can debate whose is better. lol Thanks, JD.
Allison Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 6:44 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Lin:-0 hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
September 3, 2017 at 10:28 AM
Thanks a lot, Jan.
Gentile Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 4:35 PM
Congrats on your win, Lin xxx000
Lane Avatar
September 3, 2017 at 10:27 AM
Thanks so much, Mike.
Cozart Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 9:18 AM
Congrats, Lin!
Lane Avatar
September 3, 2017 at 10:27 AM
Thank you very sincerely, Dale.
Sivey Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 4:29 AM
I have 2 hrs to do what I want on the computer! So I wanted to spend them on the Soup, and catch up with my friends!Your poem in inspiring! I've sensed these feelings before too with very old girlfriends...long ago! I really enjoyed reading your tremendous piece this morning, such a special read! Your powerful words amaze me and bring to me a sense of awe throughout the work! What a remarkable poem my friend, Great Work!!
Lane Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 7:14 AM
I am honored that you took a part of your 2 hours to visit me, Russell. Thanks ever so much for your grand comments. My hope is that you'll recover quickly, so don't push yourself to do more than your doctor and PTs require of you. Hugs.
Smith Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 12:00 AM
Me thinks this may be one of your best dear friend, best wishes. See you in the winners circle...
Lane Avatar
September 2, 2017 at 7:11 AM
Thank you very much for the sweet comments, Charlie.
Onclaud Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 5:11 PM
strong visuals heighten the poetic energy of this beautiful write, lin...greeat job!..huggs
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:19 PM
Thank you so very much, nette.
Parker Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 4:22 PM
a well-written story within a very descriptive poem...you could feel the emotional tension...good luck in the contest
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:18 PM
Thanks for the terrific comments, Frederic. I love your new avatar!
Allison Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 1:49 PM
I feel an icy chill reading your poem Lin the imagery is awesome:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:18 PM
Thank you for feeling it to your core and for the great comments, Jan.
Hoffman Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 11:50 AM
Awesome write for the contest Lin; another one that drew me in! Good luck in the contest!~Che :)
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 2:10 PM
Thanks for the comments and well wishes, Cheryl.
Warrior Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 10:20 AM
Beautifully done my lady...your winds are blowing well lol...best wishes...^WW^
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 2:09 PM
Like dust in the wind...thanks WW.
Smith Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:34 AM
Wow Lin, I love how you relay strength and emotions through your words... Wonderful
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:39 AM
I thank you for the awesome words of comment, Tim.
Wolf Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:17 AM
Wow, Lin! This is an awesome write, my friend! I "clung" on to every word! Best of luck to you in the contest
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:33 AM
Thanks for the comments and well wishes, Budgie.
Gentile Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:12 AM
Wow Lin, sounds like Old Man Winter to me, I'd take flight too! A good one Good Luck!
Lane Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:32 AM
Thanks very much, Mike. He's pretty frigid, isn't he?
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