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If I... If I, upon waking, remember you not... If the torrents of lost love grow cold where once hot And ooze from this ebbing flow of life... Trickling...trickling...trickling into the night Where wanton souls are forgot: Where will I be? And, what is my lot? Abandoned as unpicked fruit left to rot On a spiraling trellis---the ravenous in sight--- Hammering...hammering...hammering in thrustful plight I aimlessly wander the same spot. ©deborah burch 2005

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Date: 3/20/2012 8:16:00 PM
so poetic this is. VERY nice, and congratulations on your win.
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Date: 3/20/2012 1:34:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work in Brian's contest...Sara
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Date: 3/19/2012 3:36:00 PM
Congrats, Deborah! A well-deserved win. Every line heartfelt. "Abandoned as unpicked fruit left to rot", what a great line! Blessings, Rhonda
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/20/2012 1:05:00 AM
Rhonda, thank you dear, so very much for your kindness...and the blessings ;) love, Deb
Date: 3/19/2012 12:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Brian's "Ten For" contest Deborah. Love, Carol
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/20/2012 1:01:00 AM
Thank you sooo much Carol...hugggs,Deb
Date: 3/19/2012 3:12:00 AM
Susan Burch! Why I absolutely see why this one won,darling! It is amazing in its ponderings...every line is sheer excellence. Congrats on a fantastic poem. :) Gwendolen
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Deborah Burch
Date: 3/19/2012 3:42:00 AM
What wonderful heart felt encouragement, Gwendolen!! Thank you so very much, my friend! Big Hug~Deborah Burch~ ;) lol

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