If

If all my kisses made you feel annoyed, If nothing I could do could raise a smile, If all I said and wrote received a scowl, If all I gave required another mile, At least I’d know I had you for a while.

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Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 10/12/2011 3:48:00 PM

Well you didn't really need her and the fact is you are certainly worth more that this. May all your ladies be special Jack. :)

John Smith

Date: 10/10/2011 10:51:00 PM

Girls are like buses; another will be along soon. They do make great memories. well writ.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/10/2011 6:42:00 PM

one way to look at the situation Jack.. nice rhyme too with potent content .. enjoyed luv..

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/10/2011 5:50:00 PM

Yes, so very true! I've been with women that did this! I couldn't stand it, I'm a romantic through and through so her acting like this drove me nuts...well she's gone, out of my life now so it doesn't matter!! Wonderful work Jack!!

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer

Date: 10/10/2011 5:09:00 PM

Jack 'If' is so sweet! It shows true devotion-I think it will do well in the contest. Much luck to you. Ohh and look up 'cigar girl' on google-It's sort of like a old fashioned girl who walks around w/ a tray of cigars to sell to the gentleman. Sort of a sleezy look actually!